NegativeBoom

no, you may not apply to be a canon character.

you can apply to be a literal cannon though

Just a quick announcement, we still have room for people. Just, please don’t apply as a Saiyan, or Half-Saiyan for the love of god. We will deny you.

Go take a look at responses to other Saiyan applications, for one.

Secondly, we have a lot of Saiyans, so we’re trying to get other races.

Denied

Denied.

That was really long. Accepted for reasons besides that.

There are so many things wrong with this that I’m just going to say denied.

Reasons (In order of severity)-

1. Very unfaithful to the lore of Dragon Ball/Dragon Ball Z, especially regarding your name, and your character’s parent’s names. Due to the age of your character, you should not exist at all. You should be at least 22/23 years old, the…[Read more]

I’m not sure what to even say about this.

Ok, Ok. I think I’m a bit composed now.

For starters, being a Saiyan-Arcosian hybrid makes no sense on multiple levels.

Your backstory is really short, like, not even close to long enough. Look at other applications that are Saiyan/Half-Siayan.

And just some pointers:

Nobody will start with Instant…[Read more]

Listen up, and I want you to read very carefully and clearly.

Noobly said he doesn’t think that you have what it takes to be accepted as a Saiyan. Not that you cannot apply as a Saiyan. If you look into the previous Saiyan applications that were accepted and the one you posted, you will notice a clear difference in their writing, the content, and…[Read more]

Accepted.

god damn it nobody actually replied, this was accepted

scroll up to the last time you posted it.

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Ok, if this is serious, clans?
what

Frosty the- wait no this is Icey. Accepted.

It’s the one and only meme himself, Rigen!

Anyway, I’ll be honest. The character itself is different, not bad, but for me it sort of borders edgy. Be careful with that, you could cut yourself.

Anyway, that skill set is a bit overpowered to start with, and I’d like some more depth and all that good stuff.

Alright so, Eniz isn’t a bad character. The issue is, he’s bland. There’s not much about how or why he is who he is. Add depth. Add flare. Make him unique, make him a character that is worth caring about.

Ok so, buddy, pal. Rewrite this. Don’t put the same thing twice in one post.

Your backstory has little to no grammar, making it difficult to read, but needs to be expanded upon regardless. It makes no sense from the lore of dragon ball, keep in mind that this is starting at the start of Z.

Your general appearance is actually retarded. No way…[Read more]

Hello!

Thank you for applying, I’ve gone over your application, and here are the areas I believe it can (And should) improve on.

For a start, we ask that Saiyans write a minimum of 4-5 paragraphs that contain good grammar, and quite a bit of detail.

Your backstory… isn’t bad, it’s just very lacking. Explain who your character is, why they do…[Read more]

Alright, so…

I like the general story, although I feel as though it is lacking a lot of detail. Generally speaking, there are a few questions you could answer.

1. Why did he kill his squad?
2. Who’s empire?
3. What is his drive?

Beyond those, I’d like to see this expanded into around 3 or 4 paragraphs long. Thank you!

Go to the training tab, and you should be able to change it there.