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  • #31363

    Zyph
    Participant

    Dragon Block C Roleplay!

    Hello everyone, I’m bringing to you a Dragon Block C server that is strictly role play. This server is going to allow you to create your own Dragon Block C Character. If you want to be evil, you can be evil and be a villain. If you want to be a good guy, you can be a good guy. The choice is yours. There is no definitive story to the server (Although all the characters from the anime will be in the roleplay).The server is white-listed to prevent people from ruining the experience for all those who want to role play.

    First and foremost, you will be making an application that I will judge to determine whether or not you will be on the server. You can choose between 6 races.

    Races:
    Saiyan: There are restrictions on your transformations, which you can rid yourself through a roleplay reason and having a high enough bp. Hardest race to apply for. disadvantages include; Not being able to become a super saiyan without a genuine reason, pride doesn’t count as a reason.
    Half- Saiyan: There are restrictions on your transformations, which you can rid through a roleplay reason and a high enough bp. Second hardest race to apply for. Can become a super saiyan slightly easier Disadvantages: considered inferior by saiyans, lack of pure fighting drive.

    Human: Most well balanced, have Buff Form. Most well accepted, most lenience in back story The application still has to be good, but it doesn’t have to be as ridiculous as other races. (You can use mostly any skin of your choice as long as it fits the lore)

    Namekian: Can fuse with another Namekian(npc) once for a power boost, otherwise similar traits to humans. Namekians will also start with the ability to fly

    Majins: You start off with fly and endurance. You must choose human with a skin that is a majin.

    Arcosian (Frieza’s Race): : The Frieza race is an agile race, There are also restrictions on when you can go up in a transformation, which you rid yourself of through getting a high enough bp.

    – Template for Submission Application –

    Name: Self-Explanatory
    Gender: Male or Female
    Race: Choices from above
    Age: Self-Explanatory
    Personality:What is your character like? How does he act to others?
    General Appearance: You can either describe the gi outfit you would like, battle armor outfit and scouter color you would like if you are saiyan or arcosian, or your minecraft skin you’ll be using, plus hair styles, hair colors, tail or no tail, etc… Do not copy people in the show, you can use gi and armors from the characters from the show and make custom outfits with your gi please.Please try to come up with a creative story from scratch rather than copying dbz and saying something
    Backstory: This is your characters history. If you are a saiyan or an arcosian, you can get battle armor and a scouter if you the correct card

    Server Rules: Please do not curse an obscene amount. Some cussing is okay, but don’t go over board using extreme swear words. (Ex. F#*!&)
    Griefing is ONLY ALLOWED if you have a feud that the other person knows about and it’s their house. Otherwise, no griefing, it can get you banned.
    Play nice. You’re character can be unlikable, but don’t be unlikable yourself.

    Dragon Blocks are very rare for some custom wishing. and will allow a lot of wishes, just nothing ridiculous.

    Dying from another player in RP requires someone to summon Shenron or Porunga to revive you. Shenron can revive multiple people once, while Porunga can revive people one by one an infinite amount of times. When you die, if you would wish to make a new character rather than wait for someone, you can make a new character. So, if you’d like to switch from human to arcosian, you can do so. Staff is not needed to revive someone that died from RP.

    The Schedule:
    TBA (To Be Announced)

    Saga missions are off..
    Note: I made the configs to make a realistic DBZ Feel

    Once there is a decently sized group of people wanting to join, we will release the ip and mods to the group as a whole at the same time. Good luck with your application.

    Note: From my personal stand point, when you are making your class please don’t all go for Saiyan/Half saiyan Get creative, try getting a little out of your comfort zone. After reading this, if you still want to be a saiyan or half-saiyan, I’m not stopping you. Go for it, but you better make a really good character. Also if your submission is accepted I’ll send you a pm with my discord. Good Luck 🙂

    • This topic was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
  • #31373

    superciano06
    Participant

    Name: Rigen
    Gender: Male
    Race: Namekian
    Age: 24
    Personality: He is a very rogue person, but dosen’t boast about his achievements, he’s not the slient type either, he enjoys making new friends and he also enjoys fighting.
    General Appearance: Wears Yardrat Looking Armor with a color reshade of Brown, Orange, And Purple. His Skin Color is Purple and His head is the spiky Mohawk looking due from DBXV. His eye color is red.
    Backstory: He lived in poverty and famine, Due to a huge empire taking all resources from his planet, he was part of a resistance and they all gotten killed. When he became 15 he flew to earth in a spaceship and lived there…. Now he is 24 and this is where the story takes place

    My Discord is superciano#3403

    • #31545

      Kirimono
      Participant

      Accepted.

    • #32217

      gguanill
      Participant

      First Time Submitting to anything ever lmao.

      Name: Darke (pronounced like Dark, silent e)

      Gender: Male

      Race: “Human” (if it’s possible, could this be a Tuffle? And just use the Human race as a launchpad to play the game with)

      Age: 26

      Personality: Darke is stoic, primarily, but he has a temper if his buttons are pushed enough. He will defend his idea of justice, at any means necessary, but will respect and maybe even relinquish his guard for those he deems innocent. But sometimes, his definition of good and evil will not be the binar, “black-and-white” kind.

      General Appearance: Darke once sported the armor of the Saiyans after his first kill, but over many years of wear and tear, he has since abandoned it. He does, however, keep a purple scouter as a trophy (I have a resource pack that changes this to Bardock’s bandana, so that’s the primary reason why the purple scouter specifically), reminding him of his crusade. Now? Darke wears a black under suit and standard issue Saiyan boots and gloves (reminiscent Gohan firing the Kamehameha at Buu’s shell, before Majin Buu was born). He has long brown hair, hovering just over his shoulders. His eyes are blue. He has a scar across his abdomen, from his first encounter with Saiyans.

      Backstory: For this backstory, I’m going to create a Tuffle version. If that is inadequate, then I will make another.

      Darke descended from the last generation of Tuffles to reside on what was once Planet Vegeta. His father, Mare, in a last ditch effort to preserve his race, sent four families away from Planet Plant, while Mare and other Tuffle soldiers fought against the Saiyan aggressors. Two of the four ships made it past the Oozaru forces of Saiyans; the other two were reduced to dust. At this time, Darke was but a fetus in his mother Tyla’s womb, safe in the confines of his family’s ship, headed to a planet untouched by any life. Due to the Tuffle’s advanced technology, the two families had enough resources to create vegetation, synthetic meat, and an infinite source of water, so that they could survive until the Tuffles called them back to safety. The call never came.

      It was age 730 when the Tuffles were wiped off of what once was Planet Plant. Life on Planet XXI, the desolate sand planet where Tyla and the others lived on, became normal for Darke. But the two families made sure to raise Darke, and Riku, a Tuffle boy who was also born after they were refuged on XXI, with one constant reminder: the Saiyans were the reason why their fathers were left behind, and presumably murdered, was because of the Saiyan savages. They were to blame.

      By age 748, the two boys have grown to be “strong.” After all, they were raised with very little to do other than to prepare themselves for the day that they may find a Saiyan, or other threats to their family, and tend to their mothers and other elders. They were the youngest of the two groups, and they were the only men strong enough to do so. But little did they know that, as “strong” as they believed themselves to be, they would not be strong enough to prevent the onslaught coming to them.

      On one afternoon, a Galactic Cold Army ship lands not too far from them. Unsure of what their purpose for arriving was, the two boys approached the ship. Before they knew it, two Saiyans exited the ship. In a fit of rage, Darke and Riku attacked first, only for Darke to be blasted in the abdomen, and Riku’s arm to be severed. Both were incapacitated. Hours later, Darke regains consciousness, only to find that Riku had been killed due to the loss of blood. Pushed only by rage and the fortune of not being killed in by the blast, Darke straggled back to his “home.” And when he arrived, he returned to two Saiyans standing over a pile of dead bodies–bodies he called mother, uncle, aunt, and friends.

      Enraged, Darke struck again, his hatred evening the odds just barely. After a long, exhaustive battle, Darke just barely incapacitates the Saiyans. Mercilessly, he stands over their bodies as they bargain for their lives. Placing his boot on the “leader”‘s chest, Darke replies, “The same mercy you gave to my mother? Not a chance.” And with that, Darke sends his fist through the Saiyan’s head, killing him. The same could be said for the accomplice.

      Darke entered the healing chamber in his mother’s ship, which took him four days to heal and return to optimal functionality. On the fifth day, he buried his friends and loved ones. On the sixth, he stumbled upon one of the assailant’s scouters. And what he found on it, he did not like.

      The Saiyans–and the Galactic Cold Army–discovered that Planet XXI’s wealth was beneath the sand; it’s core was made of rare ores that could supply a planet with an army equivalent to the Armored Squadrons of the GCA. The Saiyans were sent to scout the area and secure the territory. But when GCA did not hear back from the two men, as scheduled, they sent the Armored Squadron to assess the situation. They were projected to return in seven days; only one day after Darke received news of this.

      Knowing he could not survive by himself, Darke “packed his bags”, retrieving his Tuffle technology, his clothing and food, and stored it back on the Tuffle ship–the Saiyan’s ship surely would be rigged with a tracking device. But, that didn’t mean he couldn’t scavenge things from it. with only six hours until the Squadron would arrive, Darke managed to secure advanced armor, training programs, scouters and medical supplies. It wouldn’t last him forever, but it would do. Over the next eight years, Darke has traveled the universe in search for any more Saiyans, fueled by the losses of his family and Riku. There is light in him, capable of forgiveness, but it is shrouded by the monstrous acts committed in the name of vengeance and justice for the Tuffles; he is, by no means, a “good” man.

      Discord is Darke #4932

    • #32223

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Holy crap.

      Never did I once think we would get a tuffle!

      Anyways, this was great! Accepted!

    • #32280

      Superdemrio09
      Participant

      Name: Rafen
      Gender Male
      Race Half Saiyan
      Age 10
      Personalty: Born In Plant Vegeta Trains To Be As Strong As His Day Loves To Spar With people
      When He was Ten Years Old Suddenly A Person Named Frieza Came With Solders He Fought Him WIth his Captain Named Yicen His Captain Was Killed In Cold Blood I Was Scared And Ran To The Space Pods There was Gonna Five Of Them I Went In One Of Them And Clicked a Random Button That sent him flying To Earth Suddenly He Was Tired Out So When He Got Out He Passed Out And A Few Humans Came To Save Him They Teached Him About Stuff In The Earth World But I Didn’t Remember Anything
      And Then He Lived in A Shop Working There For Days He Always Protects It And Then He Meets Rozen
      His Cuzen He Forgot Who He was He Told Him About him He Was A Kind Fighter And He Was Not A Saiyan He Was A Human That was Stronger Then Me Luckey Then Someone Came To My Shop while i was Cooking Roasted Fish and Potatos And He Used His Ki To Blast It Open He was there to Steal Stuff So I Came Up There And Tried To Fight Him He was too strong so i backed off and called my cuzen to help and we doubled teamed him and suddleny he says You Will Die In 5 Years And My Cuzen Says We Will Be Ready For Anything that happens He Trained Me To Be Strong Like him he teached me about ki and we starts Our Adventure
      Discord Tag:SuperDemiro09#6825

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 1 week ago by  Superdemrio09.
    • #33883

      Yin
      Participant

      Name: Yin Yasutake

      Race: Shinjin

      Gender: Male

      Age: 43,052

      Appearence: Yin has a human like appearence with a blue sweater.
      ———————————————————————————————
      Personality: Yin is a little perverted shinjin that likes to spy on his female shinjin friends when he they were little and sometimes now too. But when it comes to fighting Yin has been training his whole life for it and is one of the strongest shinjin’s.

      Backstory: Yin was very lucky to be born from the golden fruit from the Kaiju tree.
      He was a very happy little kid with his friends (Kozato Masaru – Male – Age: 43,176)(Komori Hoshiko – Female – Age: 44,253)(Katayama Taki – Female – Age: 41,842) and he was a little naughty since he used to spy on his female friends when they were to change from clothing.
      When time passed on he became more and more responsible in the world so he began training and training. Yin trained with his friends for almost 3 decades!! He was very happy with the results of his training and his friends but then… evil attacked, Yin and his friends tried to fight back but ‘they’ were too strong so Yin and his friends needed to flee to a other planet. When they found a other planet they could live on they began training again but this time they trained for days and only had a chance to rest 1 day in a week. After a while of training the rage in Yin and his friends began building up and up and up, they wanted revenge. They went back to their planet to see how it was doing and they were horrified by the looks but they were happy to be back, back to their own planet and this time they were prepared. In the time they were training they were gathering troops arround the universe to help them defeat ‘them’. And there they went, they fought and fought and fought, the fight went on for a year, Yin’s team lost many men but they kept on pushing motivating their selfes that they can win this war between evil and goog, Yin’s team won the battle!! and everyone was really happy but Yin had a bad feeling about this.
      Many years have past and Yin and his friends cleaned up the planet and they were happy that they could live on their own planet again. But something waits for them in the future.
      Yin lived in peace for many years and nothing really intresting happened.
      But then a warrior called by the name ‘Goku’ showed up and he was intrested to meet Goku.
      Yin went on a long search with his friends to meet Goku and whilst he was searching for Goku, Yin and his friends heard many other story’s of Goku and this one in particular Yin is really intrested in. Galactic New Reporter: “Ladies and gentleman! Goku has challenged Lord Beerus The God Of Destruction to a battle! Will Goku win from the God Of Destruction, wait a second! Goku is… Goku is transforming in to something!! Ladies and gentleman Goku has just transformed into something called a “Super Saiyan God”!!!!.”
      And at that moment Yin and his friends knew they wanted to meet Goku.
      Yin and his friends found Goku’s location its planet#1904 called ‘Earth’.
      Yin and his friends Goku on Earth and were really stoked to meet him, but there was someone next to Goku he is called ‘Vegeta’, when i asked Vegeta who he was he became really pissed since i only knew who Goku was but at the end of the day we ate this dish called Sushi it was really good! and we met alot of new poeple like the supreme kai and many more!
      But there was one thing that really suprised me… and that was that the God of Destruction Lord Beerus was there! And then i saw Goku talking to Beerus so casually like they were friends for years already… It really shocked me.
      At the end of the day Goku challenged me for a little sparring but i denied his request and my friends too at the end of the day everyone had a blast, the food was great and the poeple on Earth were really nice.

      P.S: My apologie’s for my english, i learned it through 4 years of gaming experience.

      Discord: YinYangPanda#7967

  • #31377

    DreamLimit
    Participant

    Name – Angel
    Gender – Female
    Race – Human
    Age – 18

    Personality – She’s very friendly, and although she’s slightly shy around new people, she enjoys making new friends. She generally doesn’t like fighting, only fighting when she must, which may be considered a weakness, but she’ll do anything to help her friends however she can.

    General Appearance – Her outfit resembles Gohan’s Saiyaman outfit without the cape, but a navy blue instead of green. She has long blonde hair, and blue eyes.

    Backstory – Her parents passed away when she was very 4, leaving her brother and herself to fend for themselves. Living in a militaristic city, where you were either broke, or a fighter, her brother, 12 at the time, became a fighter so they could live a decent life. When Angel was 12, she demanded her brother train her, so she would be able to help him. After a lot of persistence, he agreed to train her. He trained her whenever he had time to go home, which was only a few times a month. When Angel was 14, her brother died during a war against a neighbouring city. She blamed her hometown for his death and ran away, swearing to never return. After weeks of traveling, barely surviving, she found an abandoned house in the middle of a large forest, close to a small town. She cleaned up the place the lived there, occasionally visiting the town for small jobs so she would be able to afford food and such. She continued her training at home. 4 years later, Angel had become an unofficial official hero to the town, having defended it a few times from strong bandits and such, as the town didn’t have fighters.

    This is what the outfit looks like (except navy blue instead of green) – http://img12.deviantart.net/196d/i/2011/189/0/f/gohan_ssj_greatsaiyaman_by_maffo1989-d3i39ho.png

    I haven’t quite made the skin yet, but it’s really late right now, so I’ll be sure to do it later!

    Discord – Dream Limit#2986

    • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  DreamLimit.
    • #31407

      Zyph
      Participant

      Accepted, you’ll be sent the invite to the discord.

  • #31381

    Name-Leuda Aleria
    Gender-Male
    Race-Arcosian
    Age-22

    General Appearance- Dark grey skin with white body armor, black spikes/horns, and blue gems
    Armor types (from dbzxv2)Torso: Berserker armor, lower Body:Ultimate F suit, Hands:Elite suit, Feet:Z fighting suit
    Personality- He will use any means necessary to complete a mission, and has no sense of morality. He does however know the difference between right and wrong, but chooses the outcomes that benefit himself most. He chooses logic over emotion any time applicable, and one may find it hard to get under his skin.

    Backstory- lueda Was born into the frieza force like many others, but never really climbed the ranks, though he was a good fighter he lacked motivation to stop from stagnating, never striving to improve beyond what he was born with. Once Frieza was killed and the frieza force disbanded, He traveled the galaxy as a mercenary offering his services to any who would pay. Eventually he found himself at (your servers name here) and was offered a chance to better himself, seeing this as an opportunity he accepts the offer and begins his training.

    Discord- Arcosians Uprising#9037

    • #31384

      so for some reason i cant edit my original post, so ill add it here. add this to personality-Usually indifferent and quick to shrug new people off, but once you’ve earned his trust he’ll always have your back.

    • #31416

      Zyph
      Participant

      Needs to improve on his backstory. How or why was he in The Frieza Force? Why did he become a mercenary? How did he get to (whichever planet)? Who and how gave the opportunity to Leuda to redeem himself? You can still use Leuda; I haven’t denied this yet, of course. But you need to add more information to it.

      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
    • #31451

      1)He was born into the frieza force, like the very first sentence said. 2)He became a mercenary because frieza’s death collapsed the frieza force(also mentioned in the original post). 3)He got to the planet via standard issue frieza space pod, though i dont know any planet names except namek, earth, and yardrat. 5)The Host world’s Leader gave him the opportunity to better himself after defeating him in combat, cant think of How the fight started atm though. Hope This suffices 🙂

    • #31452

      Zyph
      Participant

      Improved, though Id be prefer if you added it to your backstory. Also I would like if you can add more to the end. But besides that it’s looking well. Although, your backstory may change slightly due to the lore of story, we’ll try not to though. Once we see an improved a final decision will be made.

      Note: Use Happy Fappy’s character backstory as an example, just to get a general idea of how it may get you accepted into the discord and server.

      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
  • #31385

    Freeza_Cold
    Participant

    question, are we allowed to be a character from the actual DB franchise

    • #31398

      Zyph
      Participant

      No, since the characters will be in the role play. Although you can be any race you go for, applying the requirements

      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
  • #31388

    Inoka
    Participant

    It’s been a while since I tried joining one of these, so I’ll give it a shot.
    I’ll be shooting for Saiyan while I’m at it, but first I’ve gotta ask some questions.

    I know you said there’s no story to the server, but for the sake of character building, what’s the general backstory to it all?

    Are we gonna be going with a “DBZ but this stuff didn’t happen” kind of vibe, flat out post-Z story, or “Everything just works so don’t worry about it”?

    Because small details like if Planet Vegeta and other Saiyans being around or if Frieza is still alive could make the difference between Saiyan facing her mid-life crisis or shell shocked survivor in denial trying to enforce the policy of two dead kings.

    Anyway, once I get a better idea on how things are flowing, I’ll take a shot with a character sheet; my Discord is “Zero Damage Hero#4885”.

    • #31403

      Zyph
      Participant

      The role play, may take place during the events of the series and I did mention the characters would appear. We could the role play after the series events too. Another option would be to create our own lore. But
      for now the general idea would be the first one. Anyways, once I good enough of people to be in the discord I might get people to try to be in staff. Also, the lowest age level for characters would be until 10 or 12 no lower than that

  • #31394

    MrCinekPl
    Participant

    Name: Zik
    Gender: Male
    Race: Majin
    Age: 150
    Personality: Zik is proud majin creature, he’s not evil or good, he is neutral.
    He is very proud, zik very love fight, he never run from his enemy.
    General Appearance: He is purple Majin, he is using buu armor, black/red eyes, white pants, black/red boots. *skin* –> http://imgur.com/a/GAVlJ
    Backstory: Zik is a detached part of Buu, when Buu destroying Galaxy, he lose part of body and thats how Zik born, Zik after this went to sleep for 150 years.

    sry for “bad english” and if it is only voice roleplay pls reject my application, if it is roleplay on minecraft chat or something like this then you can accept my application if you want.

    • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  MrCinekPl.
    • #31402

      Zyph
      Participant

      No voices needed, although if you want to get into the role play you might have to work on your character a bit more on his backstory and go more in depth

      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
    • #31406

      MrCinekPl
      Participant

      k

  • #31401

    Sam Noé
    Participant

    I’ve never been on a roleplay server before but gotta start somewhere so… let’s give a try

    Name : Pesto ( cause human are supposed to have spice name if I recall well)

    Gender : Male, but if needed, I don’t mind being a female

    Race : Human

    Age : 40

    Personality : A neutral guy that will bring either peace or chaos depending on the situation, on what he feels like doing, his mood, and potential profit. Still he’s slightly evil. Quite silencious, he hates being the center of awareness, is quite cold and distant with people in general, and has great sens of pride and honour. He doesn’t mind doing massive slaughters and is totally hyped when fighting an opponent of his level, though he’ll doubtlessly run away if he’s brought to the brink of death. In general he will do everything and anything he can to stay alive

    Appearance : Wearing a battle armor most of the time as he’s a former soldier : a grey and blue chest plate, black battle gloves, brown pants and black’n’blue battle boots, all of this made out of warenai. Green eyes, brown hair in battle, brown short beard, a strong imposing body, maybe a scar. I’D LIKE TO SPECIFY that is just and ideal skin, since I don’t have the skin and am far from being good at making it, I’ll do my best and if I can’t make it I’ll find or make something else that will suit me.

    Backstory : He had a normal childhood and took up on Earth’s Galactic Defense Forces School aged 12, he was a good student. Aged 20 he finally graduated and oficially joined the Forces as soldier, walking in the footprints of his father and grandfather. From this point he had a banal life until a certain mission.
    The ship he was working in had to escort a research ship throughout a sector occupied by the ruins of Freeza’s army. The minister of scientific developement hiself was part of the expedition. All soldiers on his ship, himself included, were largely able to take on former Freeza’soldier easily, but the local warlord had heard of their passage, so he hired a group of mercenaries to kidnap the minister and ask a huge ransom. They had the element of surprise, were powerful and merciless, the crew of his ship was slaugthered, the best were made prisonners and forced to join the mercenaries during the battle.
    Most of his friends started to like the life of a murderer, but unlike them he had the intense blazing will of a real freedom. Around his early 30s he challenged his leader to a death match. He barely won this ferocious fight, disbanded his men and left with a ship. But now he had to survive alone and so couldn’t help becoming slightly evil.
    As a trained skilled soldier who knowed the life of lonely wandering deserter, he had become a jack of all trades, and he thought that becoming a bounty hunter was a good choice to survive physically, but not mentally.
    Now he accepts kinda any jobs, sabotage, assassination, spying, protecting, bullying, mass murder, infitration were his favourite but rarest contracts, otherwise he literally do any little work, mainly working on construction sites and guard in bars. He has the deep will of one day going back to earth, live with his family and found one, but rare news from Earth are hopeless.

    I haven’t tried discord yet so I don’t have an account but I will certainly create one soon or late, this thing is interesting. But I don’t have a mic. I’ll put my account later.

    • #31404

      Sam Noé
      Participant

      So signing in is quite easier than I had thought x) Well anyway here’s my very new account :
      IAmRaptor#4475
      And as you may have understand I have no experience at all with Discord so keep this in mind.

    • #31434

      Zyph
      Participant

      Pesto, reminds me of Hit. Anyhow, you have a pretty good character application and His backstory is pretty interesting to go through and sorta makes you wonder what he’ll do next. Although, I wanna warn that your backstory may change just slightly but we’ll try to avoid that. Anyways, You have a pretty good application. Accepted

    • #31435

      Sam Noé
      Participant

      Now that you point it out he indeed reminds me Hit, but he’s from my own mind. No inspiration, except that I like bounty hunters in general.
      And I ain’t against changes, it may become even greater so why not ?

    • #31438

      Zyph
      Participant

      Glad to see that your positivism towards change.

  • #31408

    Kirimono
    Participant

    Hello everyone, My name is Kirimono. I co-own the DBC server and if I send you a friend request on discord with my account Rin, Please accept me! Thank you!

  • #31409

    superciano06
    Participant

    Am i accepted?

    • #31410

      Kirimono
      Participant

      You may be, we’re still deciding.

    • #31412

      Zyph
      Participant

      Superciano, we like the submission and your backstory became interesting. One thing though, we would like a more elaborate backstory. Then will decide for your acceptance.

  • #31414

    Jojy
    Participant

    My character’s name is Cinder, of the Arcosian clans from Universe 4. She belonged to the royal bloodline, a family not unlike Frieza’s, who were feared throughout their universe. Despite being born incredibly strong, with the universe at her mercy, she wanted more. While not inherently cruel like her kin, she had a lust for a good fight, and always ended up being disappointed at the strength of her foes. Tired of the easy life, she collected the dragonballs, and wished to start a new life, far away, where she would be forced to work her way to the top, and finally have a chance to be challenged.

    Cinder is Arcosian, as mentioned, but unlike most of her race, she was born in a shade of red not unlike that of the blood she has spent most of her life spilling. She has several outfits, depending on the situation, but the one she is seen in most commonly resembles that of the Supreme Kai of Universe 7. She prefers to stay in her base form, only resorting to her weaker forms to humiliate unworthy opponents.

    Also worth noting is that she has a strong dislike for ki attacks; She feels that conflict is better resolved hand to hand, and that attacking from a distance is a sign of cowardice.

    I should mention, I’ve never roleplayed before, this is pretty new to me. But I’m willing to give it a shot, as I really want the opportunity to flesh out my character a bit more, and have some fun with others while doing so.

    • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Jojy.
    • #31419

      Zyph
      Participant

      I won’t deny this, since its the first time you ever submitted a character and tried for a role-play. But I would like if you would use the character template on my first post, so you can organize your character. I’d suggest applying what I said for another character template (not saying you need to make another character just saying you should be more organize in your next post) and you might wanna add more to your background and work more on the pace. Anyhow, Good luck! 🙂

      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
  • #31417

    Jojy
    Participant

    Oops, forgot to include my discord name. Jojy123#6911

  • #31422

    Inoka
    Participant

    Well I guess I’ll give it a try, spent a good bit of time researching and coming up with a decent Saiyan, and hopefully it pays off.

    Name: Ginsera (Based off of Ginseng)

    Gender: Female

    Race: Saiyan

    Age: 26

    Personality: Not as rough and tough as your average Saiyan after being kicked from the army and falling into depression, is trying to be more open minded in the galaxy and somehow rekindle her pride and find her place as a Saiyan.
    After coming to Earth as a tourist, she became more curious about it and is trying to understand it’s culture as well as it’s flora and fauna as best as she can, which is by making giant assumptions and misunderstanding everything (Such as the concept of a Zombie and Skeleton enemy being that an Earthling keeps moving and fighting after they die, which the thought of is really cool to her and example of how Humans and Saiyans differ).

    General Appearance: In her formal wear, she wears a custom version of the full body model of Battle Armor, with a red jumpsuit underneath it all only visible from the legs, and the shoulder pads removed, leaving a more tighter and less protective layer of armor over her shoulders.
    When not in her combat equipment, wears more casual clothes to fit in with Earthlings, such as a red jacket and shorts, with a dark blue undershirt beneath it.
    Her hair is a large, messy look that’s smooth on top, but spikes towards the back and ends in three larger spikes at the very bottom of her head, that reach past shoulder length.

    Backstory: Like most Saiyans, Ginsera was born into and served under the banner of the Galatic Frieza Army in the traditional Saiyan style, raised in an incubation pod, sent to low threat planets, picked up when her duty was fulfilled, and eventually found her place as a member of a band of low-class Saiyan raiders.

    Together they crushed the inhabitants of planets who’s warriors had low power levels with natural Saiyan might, and they utterly destroyed the people who could’ve put up a fight with the terrifying power of the Great Ape.

    It was all your standard low risk, high reward type of operations that kept her out of harms way, there was no need to train when anything too dangerous could’ve been dealt with under the light of a full moon, and those same enemies that could’ve harmed her wouldn’t be able to pierce her hide when she went berserk as a Great Ape.

    For years this easy life style went on and her strength remained static, her action on the battlefield being her only source of exercise and never once being close enough to death to reap the rewards of a Zenkai boost.

    However, one day a Saiyan scientist perfected the Saibamen, small creatures that could be planted in the ground and with a bit of watering from a special serum, would sprout into a full fledged disposable warrior that by itself could decimate a planet in time.

    It was in a recent mission that involved taking over a near powerless planet that the group that Ginsera was in decided to have some fun with their new toys, and with the atmosphere of Saiyan bravado rich in the air, they all tossed Saibamen recklessly, and ordered the makeshift soldiers to do their bidding, cleaning out cities until nothing was left.

    It was then that they decided, in order to dispose of the remaining Saibamen, that an all out fight between the remaining Saibamen was in order.
    What followed was what could best be described as a salad, parts of green thrown everywhere from torn about warriors, until one last Saibamen remained.

    Even to what was essentially a three day old life, it was painfully clear to it that it’s “prize” was to be killed by their hands instead of it’s brothers, and thus it lashed out at the Saiyans, and for the first time in her life, Ginsera was dealt a serious blow as the surprising might of just a single Saibamen with just a power level of 1200 was enough to push back the team of low-class warriors, not used to facing such a strong enemy in the daylight.

    Even though it was by the number, stronger than all of them, it was still outnumbered by the Saiyans and eventually destroyed in a hail of Ki, putting an end to their sudden nightmare, but the damage was done.

    The simple lifeform born from and that returned to the dirt had, for the first time in her life, threatened her life, and that fear would eventually turn into a full on Saibaphobia, however as the adrenaline wore off from the fight the terror of a sudden strong foe had subsided, and a new thought took it’s place.

    “I’ve fought for my whole life, but this trash that was literally just born in the mud was already a stronger warrior than I was…!”

    The realization that science had created a being that put her twenty six years of experience to shame crushed her, the only thing that kept it from surpassing her in every way was two things.

    First was that at the end of the day, it was still just a dumb Saibamen, the only reason it had to turn against them was that they were individually weaker than it, and they had shown that they wouldn’t just let it live.

    The second reason was obviously that Saibamen didn’t have tails, and as such couldn’t absorb Blutz Waves and drastically increase it’s power.

    But still, her pride as a Saiyan was damaged, her pride as a warrior damaged, and her pride as a raider in the Galatic Frieza Army was damaged.
    She had no idea where she fit in anymore, in one mission she had gone from a member of the strongest species in the galaxy to glorified filler that could easily be replaced by seeds, water, and dirt.
    All her anxiety impacted her work, her speed in battle slowed down with the thought of “What if this person turns out to be stronger than me?” which eventually lead to her dismissal from the group and eventually the entire army.

    Luckily, all the pay had built up over the years, and with nothing to spend it on since she could just take what she needed from the next planet, she was left with a tidy little fortune that kept her from having to work in some meat distribution center on Planet Vegeta.

    With her fierce flame of Saiyan pride being reduced to a cinder, and no opponents or planets assigned for her to fight, she spent her days in a stupor, shut inside her little cave on Planet Vegeta doing nothing but eating and keeping herself entertained to let time pass, her glory days had passed and despite being in the prime of her life, she was getting even weaker while trying to fill the hole in her life.

    One day, by chance, she overheard talk between two Saiyans passing by her window, about a tiny backwater planet called Earth that everyone dreaded being assigned to, due to it’s lack of anything worthwhile.

    With a quick bit of research, she learned more about the planet, hearing about it’s weak inhabitants that look nearly identical to Saiyans, it’s abundant amounts of food and water and just being a little podunk planet; she decided it might be time to visit another planet for a reason other than to mindlessly slaughter it’s inhabitants for resale, and live among them to see how one of the weakest species in the galaxy can find purpose in their lives.

    So she practiced wrapping her tail around her waist instead of letting it hang freely, spent a good bit on a commercial spaceship, and set course for Earth to find her purpose.

    And yeah, that’s the character I came up with.
    The backstory might’ve dragged on longer than I planned but hey, more is better, right?
    Hopefully this is enough to turn some heads and make all the work worth it, but just tell me if anything’s wrong.

    If that’s not the case, then you’ve got my Discord up there, and I’ll be waiting until I hear back.

    • #31426

      Zyph
      Participant

      Wow..this character submission is very good for being the first time you ever submitted, you accomplished every requirement needed this story was a great story that your time to make. Accepted. Note:( I expect all sayians application to be just as good as this since it’s the hardest application to apply for, it doesn’t have to be pretty long but take an example from this to better your own characters).

    • #31427

      Zyph
      Participant

      Sorry if It looks like I did this in a rush, it’s because I did.

    • #31428

      Inoka
      Participant

      Hey, no problem, even if your entire post was just the word “Accepted” I still would’ve been thrilled.

  • #31423

    superciano06
    Participant

    More for the backstory? Ok

    So this On the a Planet called Fitle, In the city of Riggityrog, layed a boy named Rigan. He was a namekian child with alot of talents. and was spoiled before the famine came. when the famine came all of the crops have been wiped from the land. but this wasn’t a problem for Rigan and his family. for his people didn’t need to eat. but then a drought came. they was deprived of most of their fresh war and lived in the hot sun for a long time with little water to go around. One day on the hot day of Fitle a strange ship came by. They where called the Doioxid Empire. Ruled by a evil and corrupt Majin. he was similar to Frieza, but strong, fiercer, and showed less remorse. he was a down right evil man. his name was Tea. Him and his soldiers, raided the land and capture d the planet. This gone on until Rigan was Twelve where he and a couple of friends formed a resistance. they invited over 65+ people, races of all sorts. from Saiyans to Namekians and So On- So Fourth. They fought until Rigan became 20 where, Tea wiped out all of his friends, and destroyed his planet. Luckily however Rigan was on earth and lost transportation. when he heard about it, he was devastated. He stayed on earth however, knowing that if he ever tried to fight back against Tea, he would die on the spot. To this day he remains on earth… Training so he can fianlly get his revenge against Tea.

    EDIT: RIP the backstory is kinda different sorry.

    • #31432

      Zyph
      Participant

      Okay, a new backstory. It’s more exceeding than your old one. It’s also better written and thought of than the old one. Also I would like to point out when we decide the lore of the story, your background it’s only gonna change slightly. I’d suggest you elaborate more on how Rigan got a way to transport to earth.

  • #31425

    Happy Fappy
    Participant

    Name: Icey
    Gender: Female
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 20
    Personality: Mix personality; finds joy in cruelty, jests about most things, but at the same time has feeling of compassion. Can be serious at times. In general has a stone heart, that will slowly fade away. I have to state she is not the same as normal arcosians, she is slowly learning things since her exile and adjusting.

    General Appearance: This arcosian is grey and blue; grey skin with touches of very light grey that seem to highlight areas. Her head, shoulders and chest pieces have a blue to it. Only has the law grade armor, given to her by her father. It had no colour to it.

    Backstory: Icey was the daughter of King Cold, sister of cooler and frieza. She seemed to be an outcast in the family, because the brothers and her father never respected her and treated her very lower then dirt. Icey was beaten at times in an effort to mold her, to make her tougher, in mind and physically. King Cold did not want to get rid of her, since she was apart of his blood, so he decided this toughing up would help, and to get her to do all his deeds. To conquer planets, to destroy all life on them that did not want to conform or serve him. She was not weak after all, but this was her life. The constant beats enraged her, she was getting sick of it. Something inside her snapped one day, she struck King Cold! He was in shock with the eminence power she possessed in her rage. Then and there King Cold decided to send her to an uninhabited planet, to discard her and hope she would perish. He had no need for something that did not bend to his will, even if she was blood-kin. He had picked a planet that had x1000000 gravity, virtually impossible to escape! There was only one planet and it’s moon in the system (the moon was huge, but very far away).

    Little did they know, stranded on that planet, Icey kindled a grudge for her family. Unable to move, she started to meditate and focus her rage. Summoning the strength within her, the little strength she could summon was enough to be able to get up and walk. Soon after she began to train, getting stronger with each passing day. Learning new skills and abilities. She spent years on this planet, before bandits came to hopefully create a hidden base on the moon. Icey quickly ended this, in the pursue of claiming a ship to escape the dreaded place. She was able to leap from the planet to the moon, to commandeer the ship. Thanks to her years of training. After getting her bearing and direction in space, she went forth to find her family in hopes for revenge. All Icey had found was all her family members were dead, bested by someone. Icey’s rage was still kindled, she hungered for a battle that was taken away from her. After a long battle with in herself, she decide to be a mercenary for hire. To slowly feed the hunger for battle. Sometime Icey killed her contractors, because of their attitude towards her. She was ruthless at times and sometimes her contract required her not to be. She accepted her life, for now!

    Discord: Jellybean #1517

    • #31433

      Zyph
      Participant

      Icey’s backstory, is very delightful, and it’s also very intriguing. It may possibly also fit in the lore of the role-play story. It’s a splendid character submission. But I will have to discuss with the staff about accepting your application since your related to a main villain the story. But don’t worry your odds of joining are about 75%.

      P.S: Very creative name like Cold,Frieza,Cooler. 😛

    • #31541

      Zyph
      Participant

      This is long over due, I apologize for making you wait a while. Anyways, I’ll spare you the details for now.

      Accepted

      You’ll be sent an invitation through discord

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Zyph.
  • #31436

    Sam Noé
    Participant

    I just thought it could be good that we add our time zones
    So mine is UTC +2, Belgium.

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  • #31439

    Fallout2552
    Participant

    This is hella cringe

  • #31440

    iriome12
    Participant

    Name: Gladio
    Gender: Male
    Race: Saiyan
    Age: 18
    Personality:What Its a funny person with a curious personality, he likes to fight with stronger people and discover new powers, you can trust him in bad moments. normally a good person if you are it too, a very kind person.
    General Appearance: similar to goku’s gi, but not orange, it is yellow and black, with tail and a spiky hair.
    Backstory: Born into the saiyan planet, and sent to the earth after the saiyan’s planet destruction with others saiyans trying to save some people of the race, Gladio grew up on the earth training with his mates, having a hard training on his life, he was trying to protect all his friends, but one day, they get betrayed of the strongest of them, some of them has just died and the rage that created was enough for gladio to discover the super saiyajin’s form, now gladio is having a harder training with other saiyans that he finded on the earth to get stronger and avenge his dead friends, walking around the universe, training with new oponents to get stronger, without lose that hope of avenge his lost friends

    my discord iriome12
    #3443 sorry for my english i from spain, i think u can understand it xD

    • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  iriome12.
    • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  iriome12.
    • #31444

      Zyph
      Participant

      Denied. This is because it just to simple for a backstory of a Saiyan, I advice you to take reference from Ginsera character submission, and then try again fleshing out your character. It doesn’t have to be as long but it has to be pretty darn good. Anyways, I’ll give you the benefit of the doubt that your from spain and only know a bit of english so I’ll give you 2 more chances. If none of the next posts are reaching the requirements, I’d suggest you try another race. Good Luck! 🙂

      Note: Sorry, If I sounded a bit harsh.

      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
    • #31450

      iriome12
      Participant

      Name: Gladio

      Gender: Male

      Race: Saiyan

      Age: 18

      Personality: A proud and rough saiyan quiet and kind, but he walks with the image of his dead friends, if you try to hurt his friends or dear people, he will get very angry, you should be carefull if you do that. You can trust him and if you are his friend, he will never betray you, and he will try to protect you. He is a Curious guy, after he started to training he discovered an awesome power inside him, now he is upset and he wants to beat strong enemies and find some strong people to training too. he wants to have a family becouse he doens’t know his family before he left saiyan’s planet.

      General Appearance: he wears turtle hermit clothes becouse he was an student of master roshi
      that clothes are very light to fight, he doesnt use any armor and scouter, he keeps having tail.

      Backstory:A proud and rough saiyan sent to the earth in mission to find other saiyans, before he was sent to the earth, he found 2 saiyans that were his friends but 2 months before he found them, a villain appeared, he was powerful, and he killed his friends, but he did escape, now he knows that the same villain is looking for him, Gladio found another guy, he’s a namekian and now its his best friend, he always training with him in the time room, he was a low class saiyan, but he doens’t have rank now on the earth, he is alone with his new friend, searching for more people like him, hoping to get stronger and avenge his friends.

      4 years later, he keeps training and he got stronger, discovering the super form and learning some ki attacks from master Roshi, he is going to the capsule corp to meet vegetta and ask him to training, but he said that he wont training with him becouse his power was very low, then he raged and transformed into super saiyajin’s form, showing vegetta his potential, then, vegetta accepted to training with him, they went to the time room and while they were training he told his history to vegetta, before this, vegetta started to be Gladio’s mentor, showing him how to use his ki attacks and some movements.

      2 months in real world before vegetta’s training with Gladio was enough for vegetta to see how strong Gladio has become, Gladio reached the level of Super Saiyajin’s Second Phase, and learned the big bang attack from vegetta, then the left the time room and they went to capsule corp again, there was gohan talking with bulma, he met Gladio and he tough he was very kind person, so gohan asked Gladio if he wants to meet the old kai that can unlock his potential more, Gladio accepted and they went with him.

      Before Gladio comes back to earth, with his new powers, he started to training serious with vegetta, getting hurt, he got to go to the capsule corp to a healing machine, before he left it, he met little trunks, he started talking with him and trunks told Gladio that he was going to show him something awesome, Trunks taught him the fusion with gotens in Super Saiyajin’s Phase 3, that was stronger than Gladio on ssj2 so he got motivated to keep training, he asked to bulma for some heavy clothes to training, he took them and went with vegetta again into the time room.

      while they were on time room, the same villain that killed his friends breaks the door of the room, 5 months (real life) later, popo and dende achieve to repair the door of the room before the villain dissapeared again, obviusly that time was so much in the time room and he become so much stronger, not as vegetta but he was strong enough to beat his oponnent.

      Gladio started to search for the dragon balls and 2 months later he found them all, then he called Shen Long, asking him to take the villain in front of him, shen long accepted his wish and the villain appeared, stablishing an intense battle with Gladio, Gladio thinking that he was so strong just transformed into SSJ1 and he fell to the ground when he was hit by the villain, he was going to kill gladio but… in the same moment… He appeared, his best friend, and the attack of the villain hits him, but he doesn’t die, in that moment Gladio gets rage and transforms into full power SSJ2 using his best attack, big bang attack by his mentor, and hits the villain making him lose his strength, Gladio breaks villain’s mask and see that is one of the saiyans sent with him, then he knews that he was betrayed and started crying and shouting, while he was raging and that rage makes Gladio reach SSj3 but only in the moments that he gets rage.

      Now Gladio can’t just trust saiyans, and he thinks that he is alone with his friend, now he is searching for people that he can trust… a new home, that is what he wants now.

      my discord iriome12
      #3443 (hope u like it :D) i dont know if u can see it, i see page bug

  • #31448

    iriome12
    Participant

    Name: Gladio

    Gender: Male

    Race: Saiyan

    Age: 18

    Personality: A proud and rough saiyan quiet and kind, but he walks with the image of his dead friends, if you try to hurt his friends or dear people, he will get very angry, you should be carefull if you do that. You can trust him and if you are his friend, he will never betray you, and he will try to protect you. He is a Curious guy, after he started to training he discovered an awesome power inside him, now he is upset and he wants to beat strong enemies and find some strong people to training too. he wants to have a family becouse he doens’t know his family before he left saiyan’s planet.

    General Appearance: he wears turtle hermit clothes becouse he was an student of master roshi
    that clothes are very light to fight, he doesnt use any armor and scouter, he keeps having tail.

    Backstory:A proud and rough saiyan sent to the earth in mission to find other saiyans, before he was sent to the earth, he found 2 saiyans that were his friends but 2 months before he found them, a villain appeared, he was powerful, and he killed his friends, but he did escape, now he knows that the same villain is looking for him, Gladio found another guy, he’s a namekian and now its his best friend, he always training with him in the time room, he was a low class saiyan, but he doens’t have rank now on the earth, he is alone with his new friend, searching for more people like him, hoping to get stronger and avenge his friends.

    4 years later, he keeps training and he got stronger, discovering the super form and learning some ki attacks from master Roshi, he is going to the capsule corp to meet vegetta and ask him to training, but he said that he wont training with him becouse his power was very low, then he raged and transformed into super saiyajin’s form, showing vegetta his potential, then, vegetta accepted to training with him, they went to the time room and while they were training he told his history to vegetta, before this, vegetta started to be Gladio’s mentor, showing him how to use his ki attacks and some movements.

    2 months in real world before vegetta’s training with Gladio was enough for vegetta to see how strong Gladio has become, Gladio reached the level of Super Saiyajin’s Second Phase, and learned the big bang attack from vegetta, then the left the time room and they went to capsule corp again, there was gohan talking with bulma, he met Gladio and he tough he was very kind person, so gohan asked Gladio if he wants to meet the old kai that can unlock his potential more, Gladio accepted and they went with him.

    Before Gladio comes back to earth, with his new powers, he started to training serious with vegetta, getting hurt, he got to go to the capsule corp to a healing machine, before he left it, he met little trunks, he started talking with him and trunks told Gladio that he was going to show him something awesome, Trunks taught him the fusion with gotens in Super Saiyajin’s Phase 3, that was stronger than Gladio on ssj2 so he got motivated to keep training, he asked to bulma for some heavy clothes to training, he took them and went with vegetta again into the time room.

    while they were on time room, the same villain that killed his friends breaks the door of the room, 5 months (real life) later, popo and dende achieve to repair the door of the room before the villain dissapeared again, obviusly that time was so much in the time room and he become so much stronger, not as vegetta but he was strong enough to beat his oponnent.

    Gladio started to search for the dragon balls and 2 months later he found them all, then he called Shen Long, asking him to take the villain in front of him, shen long accepted his wish and the villain appeared, stablishing an intense battle with Gladio, Gladio thinking that he was so strong just transformed into SSJ1 and he fell to the ground when he was hit by the villain, he was going to kill gladio but… in the same moment… He appeared, his best friend, and the attack of the villain hits him, but he doesn’t die, in that moment Gladio gets rage and transforms into full power SSJ2 using his best attack, big bang attack by his mentor, and hits the villain making him lose his strength, Gladio breaks villain’s mask and see that is one of the saiyans sent with him, then he knews that he was betrayed and started crying and shouting, while he was raging and that rage makes Gladio reach SSj3 but only in the moments that he gets rage.

    Now Gladio can’t just trust saiyans, and he thinks that he is alone with his friend, now he is searching for people that he can trust… a new home, that is what he wants now.

    my discord iriome12
    #3443 (hope u like it :D)

    • #31455

      Zyph
      Participant

      Denied

      The backstory lacks content and quality. There’s too much repetition. It only talks about Gladio getting more powerful, stronger and training and it shows nothing about who your character is. Also, did you read the saiyan description? You need a genuine reason to go super sayian take Goku and Trunks for an example, they had a genuine reason to transform into Super Saiyan. Vegeta calling you weak doesn’t count as a reason to transform Super Saiyan. Also, Gladio is already overpowered and knows how to go Super Sayian and the forms above, and we really can’t allow you to start the roleplay already knowing how to do that. I still don’t think its near enough of being qualified for a saiyan. This application has potential but you have to work on it. A lot. Like, so much that you become applicable for our standards.

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  • #31449

    iriome12
    Participant

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  • #31454

    MrCinekPl
    Participant

    Name: Zik

    Gender: Male

    Race: Majin

    Age: 150

    Personality: Zik is proud majin creature, he’s not evil or good, he is neutral.
    Zik very love fight, he never run from his enemy.If Zik must fight he have no mercy for his enemies.

    General Appearance: He is purple Majin, he is using buu armor, black/red eyes, white pants, black/red boots. *skin* –> http://imgur.com/a/GAVlJ

    Backstory: Zik is a detached part of Buu, when Buu destroying Galaxy, he lose part of body and thats how Zik born.He’s trying to fight with him but Buu is overpowered Zik and Buu won this battle.Zik ran to the earth, on earth Zik start training.When he learned people organize first tenkaichi budokai he took part in it and won.He won 1 million zeni.For 1 million zeni he build house and buy some food.5 years late Zik saw master rorshi out of the bushes how to train. Next 145 years Zik spend on eating, sleeping and training.

    • #31458

      Zyph
      Participant

      Denied

      This lacks content and quality. It just seems to me a copy of Majin Buu, also if your a detached part of Buu, wouldn’t you fill the missing part of his body? Zik’s birth doesn’t make sense, a body part can’t come to life. Also Zik has no general reason to fight Buu since his alignment is neutral. Most of the stuff at the end didn’t make sense to me. Except the tenkaichi budokai. Anyways, It’s too short, it’s filled with cliches, and it has no details whatsoever. If you want to be Majin, try to put more effort into it. I urge you to either make it better- and I mean a lot better- or choose a different race.

      Note: Sorry, If I sounded harsh. But I’m just being honest and trying to encourage you to do way!! better than this.

      • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Zyph.
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    • #31461

      MrCinekPl
      Participant

      i understand, i will try again

    • #31470

      Zyph
      Participant

      Go for it bud

  • #31464

    Ian
    Participant

    Name: Ryce
    Gender: Male
    Race: Saiyan
    Age: 27
    Personality: Quiet and reserved; prefers to be alone. Pretends a calm and collected, “above it” attitude, but is easily flustered and has a short fuse.

    General Appearance: Average Saiyan bulk, and about 5 foot eight inches in height, with black eyes and Vegeta-like black hair, as is a common hairstyle among Saiyans.. Wears planet Sadal type battle armor (reason in the backstory).

    Backstory: A Saiyan baby born on planet Vegeta, with a lowly power level of eight. deemed a low-class warrior, he was sent to Earth to conquer it. However, a shockwave from a squabble between Beerus and Champa ripped open a wormhole between the universes, and Ryce’s pod was pulled into universe six, and landed on their Earth instead. From there he grew up as a normal Saiyan would, but was challenged constantly by the hostile humans that paralleled universe seven’s Earth. Being harassed by them so much, Ryce grew more powerful than his people would have suspected, to about double Raditz’s level. At an age of twenty-two he tricked the humans into starting a war that erased all life on the planet. He launched himself into space with one of the human’s ships as they destroyed themselves, looking for more planets to conquer, before landing on planet Eyce, where, after overestimating his own power, he was quickly subdued by Frost, who recruited him and sent him to Sadal to be enlisted in the Planet Sadal Defense Force. He has since cooperated with the Defense Force, but looks down on the Saiyans of universe six, believing them to be soft and weak, and dreams of a galactic empire worthy of the Saiyan race.

    • This reply was modified 5 months ago by  Ian.
    • #31466

      Zyph
      Participant

      It’s not bad, its more of bittersweet but it’s nowhere near our standards of saiyans. I see a bit of originality, since your backstory is a bit influenced by Goku’s. Work and try to put more effort into it and I urge you to add more content to your backstory. Don’t make it too long either, make an application that can meet our standards. Good Luck!

    • #31483

      Ian
      Participant

      Ok, I’ll go for a kind of dark-ish anti-hero backstory, since I don’t know exactly what you need, and I’m not going to ask because I don’t want the temptation to take a base template character and just paint it a different color. All I ask is for you to determine whether you can bend your standards a bit if you think that a given backstory is good enough.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Ian.
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    • #31491

      Zyph
      Participant

      It’s not what we need, It’s more of what fits in a standard of a saiyan application. Take a look at the one and only saiyan application at the moment. The minimum requirement should be at least like Ginsera’s application. It doesn’t have to be as good and as long but you better believe it should pretty darn good, since it’s the “hardest” race to apply for. But if, you think you can pull it off and us staff agree that your application is worthy. We’ll gladly take you into the role-play.

      Edit: I’ve read your recent post, I’d rather see the whole thing, and gladly read it. I’m glad to see you took your time to make a better backstory.

    • #31486

      Ian
      Participant

      Also, I’m going to add at least one more universe six version of a preexisting character, because I find it interesting to think about who they would be and what they’d be like.

    • #31487

      Ian
      Participant

      Ok, I made the backstory about four times longer probably, but that’s only because I wanted to make it a backstory, rather than just a bio. I had comic book backstories in mind when writing it, therefore the beginning will probably remind you of Deadpool or something. I also changed some things about it and generally added more content. Just bear with the length please, and tell me if you want me to post just the backstory, or the whole thing.

  • #31471

    Can you tell me how you were able to restrict transformation before a certain level? Also maybe a copy of the server config, so i can see what makes a “Realistic” dbz feel. its fine if you don’t feel like sharing any info though.

    • #31472

      Zyph
      Participant

      One, I didn’t restrict it in the config (obviously), I meant it in the role-play whenever you get stronger to reach the level of unlocking the transformation of whichever race you chose. Two, I could, but I don’t really see the point in showing you the configs, but maybe in the later future. Anyways, I changed the configs where I think it would makes a “Realistic” DBZ feel.

      Note: If you didn’t read the feed back on your application, I asked if you could elaborate on the end, since the application is getting near our standards. 🙂

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Zyph.
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    • #31520

      Meh, I’ve already lost interest. good luck with the server though.

  • #31478

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    Name: Bat
    Gender: Male
    Race: Saiyan
    Age: 12
    Personality: (that’s the tricky one :/) middle serious-joke-ish (a bit od Batman And Flash maybe :P) And he’s good And proud, but he van sometimes show historia evil się (bit od majin Vegeta)
    General appereance: Gogeta’s Chest And boots, Android 17’s pants, Trunks’ undershirt
    Backstory: On planet Vegeta there was a Saiyan, historia father nor mather were known. Few days before explosion, two bully’ies taken him when he was stilo baby, And thrown to the river. This river had frozen. Then after few days, Frieza exploded planet Vegeta and this Saiyan was pushed into space, he was flying in it for couple of years, then he landed on earth. Misterious man came to this child, he gave him food and clothes, And he left. After this young Saiyan Saiyan get up. His body was still 4 years old, but his existeance had already 8 years! He started training And rating. After 2 years he put his clothes on. After 6 more years, he begun leaving his place. And he was trqvelling always forward. He was killing every animal that can give him meat, even dinosaurs. But that will change! Later on Dragon Block C Series!

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  BatVenomPL.
    • #31480

      BatVenomPL
      Participant

      His evil side* (I hate autocorrect!!!)

    • #31482

      BatVenomPL
      Participant

      Discord: BatVenomPL#7017

    • #31509

      Zyph
      Participant

      Sorry, but no. The backstory lacks content and quality. It’s too short. The story reminds me of Goku, but with a little twist of your own. It shows nothing about who your character is. it’s filled with cliches, and it has no details. If you want to be saiyan, I urge you to either make it better- and I mean a lot better- or choose a different race. I expect quality from our saiyan applications.

      Denied

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  • #31481

    superciano06
    Participant

    Rigan transported to earth from a spaceship on his planet, he left to do a important duty on earth, which was too tell the cocurrent Z Fighters the news of the planet (he was a messager/fighter at the time)

    • #31489

      Zyph
      Participant

      Although, I would’ve prefer if you added it on a new character template,but since you did answer my question and the backstory is within our standards , I’ll let this pass. I won’t be doing this so often.

      Accepted

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Zyph.
  • #31493

    Ian
    Participant

    I don’t know if I can make something comparable to that, but here I go!
    Name: Ryce
    Gender: Male
    Race: Saiyan
    Age: 27
    Personality: Quiet and reserved; prefers to be alone. Pretends a calm and collected, “above it” attitude, but is easily flustered and has a short fuse. Can use basic ki techniques like flight, but strongly prefers physical combat, believing that ranged attacks are for cowards and weaklings.

    General Appearance: Average Saiyan bulk, white skin, and about 5 foot eight inches in height, has crossed eyebrows with black eyes and Vegeta-like black hair, as are all common among Saiyans. Wears planet Sadal type battle armor.

    Backstory: A Saiyan baby born on planet Vegeta, with a lowly power level of eight. deemed a low-class warrior, he was sent to Earth to conquer it. However, a shockwave of destructive energy from a squabble between Beerus and Champa eroded the barriers between universes and ripped open a wormhole between them. Ryce’s pod was pulled into universe six, and landed on their Earth instead. He was found by Dr. Boxer, head of a group of evil military scientists commissioned by the king of the earth to create an ultimate weapon of mass destruction. Dr. Boxer witnessed Ryce rip down a tree branch firsthand, and thought that he had been going about his task all wrong. Instead of missiles and bombs, he should start developing bioweapons! He took Ryce with him to an underground lab and immediately began tests, while commanding the rest of his group to study the Saiyan pod. Boxer studied the child closely, testing his colossal strength, taking blood samples, trying to make clones and reverse-engineer his blood in attempts to create a super soldier.

    When Ryce was about six, a portion of the lab suddenly exploded. When Dr. Boxer went to see what happened, Ryce had transformed into a gigantic ape monster. He was terrified at the child’s power and dismayed that Ryce destroyed his lab and escaped, but the Doctor had already finished his work; an army of cloned Saiyan warriors and several fleets of advanced fighter ships based on the Saiyan pod, and spent the some years of his life following trying to figure out what caused Ryce’s transformation, but his research came up short. Ryce spent the next eight years of his life raising himself in the forests and hills, while being chased and fought against by the humans who, on top of being very unfriendly, believed him to be one of the clones, as well as some of the clones themselves who could recognize him as foreign. The constant fighting and wandering strengthened him beyond what his own people would have suspected, to about twice Raditz’s level, while also increasing his bitterness and hatred toward others and his desire for power.

    After eight years, making Ryce fourteen years old, he began to realize that the humans and his clones had stopped hunting him, and discovered gradually that life on the planet had grown non-existent. Instead of being mortified, Ryce was overjoyed and took pride in that it was he who caused it in the end, with his only concern being his own well-being. Some days later, he stumbled upon the ruins of the lab where he was kept as a child, and knowing that there should be some ships inside, entered to investigate. When he entered the hangar, he saw who else but Dr. Boxer himself, the last human alive, disengaging the clamps around one of the ships. When he saw Ryce, Boxer tried to convince him to join him to join him in his travel across the stars, promising him more planets to conquer. But Ryce’s hatred for Dr. Boxer was greater than it was for anyone else, and Ryce killed him with one backhanded strike. He then entered the ship meant for the Doctor, and found coordinates for a planet pre-uploaded in the launch code, coordinates for what would have been planet Vegeta, transferred from the original pod. He activated the auto-pilot and the ship launched into space.

    A year later, the distance between the planets being so great, and all the while killing whoever he saw on the way, he finally touched down on what should have been Vegeta, but he found the Saiyans on this planet to be peaceful and kind. Thus believing them to be easy targets, he began his terrorizing of the planet’s people, finding them to be stronger than he thought, but still pushing them back. However, in only a week’s time, a large ship touched down near his location, and one hundred soldiers emerged from the top, preceding their leader, Frost. Frost implored him to stop this violence, offering him a pardon for his crimes in exchange for his cooperation. Instead, Ryce rushed Frost with a flurry of attacks, which were deflected with relative ease. Frost’s aura flared up, and without even transforming, beat Ryce back with terrible force, such that he was sent to his knees with a few short blows.

    Overwhelmingly frustrated with his opponent’s power, Ryce’s own power level skyrocketed, his aura burned red and his eyes went blank; he had transformed into a False Super Saiyan! He became mindless and relentless, and began to overpower Frost with vicious attacks. Frost commanded his men to take point while he powered up, and began a transformation. As Ryce was beating Frost’s men, he was suddenly knocked down by an attack he didn’t even see, before looking to Frost again and seeing that he was in his second form. He let out a mighty scream, powering up and charging once more, but Frost used his increased speed and power to get behind him and deliver a knock out strike to the back of his neck. Ryce powered down and fell unconscious, and Frost ordered his men to take him into custody.

    A month later Frost confronted Ryce in his cell and told him that if he would stop his senseless destruction, he would be set free and given something to do. Ryce admitted that anything would be better than staying in his cell, so Frost brought him to the Planet Sadal Defense Force academy, where he would be trained to hone his power and skills and use them for good. Under their tutelage, in the four years he spent there Ryce grew much stronger, eventually climbing to a level of 60,000, while also developing and mastering the power ball technique, though never again tapping into his true potential since his fight with Frost.

    He has since continued to work for the Defense force for eight years, and actually enjoys the amount of fighting he gets to do, although his brutality has gotten him in trouble on several occasions. He looks down on the Saiyans of Sadal, believing them to be weak and soft and with no tails to speak of, letting them know that fact in no uncertain terms, and especially despises their battle armor, stating more than once that they look more like dresses than armor, and dreams of a true Saiyan empire, of which he is on top.

    His current mission from the Force is to hunt down a parasitic alien that can possess people to bring out their innermost evil and give them outstanding power while feeding off of their life force. This elusive creature has fled across the universes, and evidence has led Ryce to believe that somewhere in universe seven is where it is hiding.

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Ian.
    • #31495

      Ian
      Participant

      This is all I’ve got, I think. Dr. Boxer is universe six’s Dr. Brief, and the parasite that Ryce is hunting is actually Watagash, the same alien that Jaco was looking for in Super, though this is some time before those events. Personally, I place Ryce’s birth as twenty or so years before Goku’s.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Ian.
    • #31497

      Zyph
      Participant

      It’s great, I really liked the originality and thought put into this. Although, there is still some cons on the backstory. Like, the cloned-saiyans,and when Ryce transformed into a false super saiyan, and we really can’t allow you to start the roleplay already knowing how to do that, also I’m still conflicted if that form is gonna in the roleplay (or even in the mod). And his power level is over the rate I was looking for, but that can be fix in due time, and also we can make an arrangement. But besides that, everything is looking great. Although, this is the only time I’ll allow to bend the standards for saiyans, since I saw potential in your character submission. ( I expect quality from the saiyans character submission)

      Accepted

      Note: I would like for you to explain; what happened to the cloned-saiyans. Also, I wanna point out your character backstory may change slightly due to the lore of the role-play.

      Also, whats your discord tag/username.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • #31499

      Ian
      Participant

      I added the part about him not transforming again to imply that he didn’t know how to transform again, and false super saiyan is only a fluke transformation, and nothing that permanently changes the user in a way that the real super saiyan does. Thank you for pointing out the cloned saiyans, that was an enormous oversight on my part. I’d like to add this to the backstory: that the clones were unstable and volatile, and so mutated over time, like Bio-Broly, but at a much slower rate. As such, I’d change the story slightly regarding Ryce, that he observed that the cloned Saiyans that were hunting him seemed to be melting away and turning into slimy monsters, instead of having them disappear completely from the story. Their power levels dropped as a result of their radical mutation, allowing Ryce to eradicate them over the eight year period. As for his power level, I wanted him to be strong enough to be trusted with Watagash, but after considering Jaco a bit more, and how even he was trusted with this mission, I think Ryce’s power level can be reduced.
      Also, do I need a discord? I don’t have one, but I think I can make one if need be. It’s a free service, right?

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Ian.
      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Ian.
    • #31503

      Zyph
      Participant

      No, problem. Discord, is a a free service you don’t have to download anything but you can download their app if you which too. I’d prefer, if you made a discord and gave me your discord tag/username, so that I could add you to our discord channel.

    • #31505

      Ian
      Participant

      Done. Username:Darin; tag: #7760

    • #31508

      Zyph
      Participant

      I sent you a request.

  • #31501

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    So what about me???

    • #31504

      Zyph
      Participant

      Oh sorry, Ill take a look at it.

  • #31507

    MrCinekPl
    Participant

    Name: Zeke
    Gender: Male
    Race: Saiyan
    Age: 22
    Personality: Neutral saiyan, he’s proud and if he fighting he have almost no mercy for his enemies.
    General Appearance: *no armor* – http://imgur.com/a/pi8vS , *armor* – http://imgur.com/a/RyOPE
    Backstory: Zeke was a normal Saiyan, he lived on the planet Vegeta. He was a middle class warrior, he loved fight.
    At the age of 18 years were sent to the planet Gucloinus in order to kill all the inhabitants.
    Mission failed, the people turned out to exceed his power level.
    When he returned, gravely wounded on the planet Vegeta had decided to train to become stronger.
    When he was 21 years old, he escaped from planet Vegeta, have decided that earth will be his new home.
    He was lucky that he escaped from planet Vegeta, because some time after the start saw planet Vegeta is destroyed.
    He reminded himself about all Saiyan’s living there.
    He vowed to himself that he would destroy whoever did it.
    Went immediately to earth.
    Landed without obstacle, he settled in the neighboring village, without revealing that it is an alien from outer space.
    Secretly he started training, after a month of training people discovered its secrets.
    He needs to run.
    The next day he settled on a farm, where he spent a further 6 months.

    Discord: olos22#8554

    • #31512

      Zyph
      Participant

      No. It’s a new character but it’s not better from your old one. There’s a gravely amount of grammar errors, and the backstory didn’t make much sense, Zeke escaped for no apparent reason from planet vegeta. The backstory shows nothing about the character. I don’t think its near enough of being qualified for a saiyan. You should know this is the hardest race to apply for, so I expect quality for the saiyan race character applications. Try to do better next time or I suggest to try some easier race.

      Denied

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Zyph.
      • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • #31546

      Kirimono
      Participant

      Here are some things you could improve upon, Please work on the grammar! “he loved fight”, “at the age of 18 years were sent” This is a small portion of the grammar errors. If you would like to apply again, apply for a different race. Mainly because we are trying to cut down on Saiyan’s for now. So please, apply for a different race. Thank you. It may seem I’m trying to “hurt your feelings”, etc. But I just want to help you be accepted, so take no offense to this. Thank you for reading.

      ~Rin

  • #31516

    Zyph
    Participant

    Announcement:
    I would like to keep the ratio of Saiyans to other races relativaly low, Since actual surviving Saiyans are supposed to be rare (this may change due to the lore). So we won’t be accepting much more Saiyans until we recieve more applications of the other races. Reason being is due to the fact that we need diversity within the role-play.

    Although, you may still apply for them. But you have to work on it. A lot. Like, so much that you become applicable for our standards. If they’re darn good, you may get a reply and possibly accepted.

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 4 weeks ago by  Zyph.
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  • #31527

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    Name: Bat
    Gender: Male
    Race: Arcosian (changed ?)
    Age: 12
    Personality: middle serious-joke-ish (a bit od Batman And Flash maybe :P) And he’s good And proud, but he can sometimes show his evil side (bit od majin Vegeta)
    General appereance: Arcosian’s body 3 fully Black
    Backstory: He was born on a planet named Zaburu. There wasn’t anyone who knew his father nor mother, but there always have been a guy that was caring him, this man’s name was Wint. Bat had just 6 years and he did get a mission to kill everyone on planet Entorn, but people of this planet Frozen him and sent to a random planet, and this planet just happened to be earth. When he landed, he was in ice. It was years before it unfroze, Bat left his spaceship started training, gathering minaterials, and living a peaceful life on lanet. Later on Dragon Block C Series!

    Discord: BatVenomPL#7017

    • #31540

      Zyph
      Participant

      This an improvement from your old one, but I’d like for you elaborate on a few stuff. What happen to his parents, and why doesn’t anybody know them? Why was Wint caring for him? How and why was Bat sent on a mission to kill everyone on Plant Entorn, Where did the ship land? since it was frozen a few years. Also, I’d suggest add more content to your backstory to show more on who your character is? Again, this improvement from your old character submission. You just need to work on it more. Good Luck!

    • #31550

      BatVenomPL
      Participant

      ok I’ll try

  • #31551

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    Name: Bat
    Gender: Male
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 12
    Personality: middle serious-joke-ish (a bit od Batman And Flash maybe :P) And he’s good And proud, but he can sometimes show his evil side (bit od majin Vegeta)
    General appereance: Arcosian’s body 3 fully Black with White crystals and red eyes
    Backstory: He was born on a planet named Zaburu. His parents left him on this planet alone, so there wasn’t anyone who knew his father nor mother, but there always have been a guy that was caring him, this man’s name was Wint. Wint was like a father for him, because Wint did know how it is, his parents also left him on this planet, so he knew that pain. Arcosians on this planet always did like to destroy other planets, or just kill people on those. Bat had just 6 years and he did get a mission to kill everyone on planet Entorn, he was sent to this planet with spaceship that was in military base. But he sadly landed on military base of planet Entron, when people of this planet found him then they froze him and sent to a random planet trough his spaceship, and this planet just happened to be earth. He landed on a mountain. When he landed, he was in ice. It was years before it unfroze, Bat left his spaceship started training, gathering materials, and living a peaceful life on lanet, he also builded a house on this mountain and he made a wheat farm. But his peaceful life can change! Later on Dragon Block C Series!

    Discord: BatVenomPL#7017

    • #31552

      BatVenomPL
      Participant

      If you still need more then tell me what informations you need 🙂 (phew that wasn’t so easy to make this story)

    • #31561

      Zyph
      Participant

      It’s better, but it still needs some work, you need to check for spelling errors and the end, also explain how and why got a mission to engender the life on the Planet Entron. Also you should elaborate more on his life on earth, and show more about your character.

  • #31562

    NegativeBoom
    Participant

    Hello! Quick bit before I start my application, I do make skins, so if anyone needs a skin for RP, just tell me, I’ll see what I can whip up.

    Name: Soi
    Gender: Male
    Race: Human (fav race + not that many human apps, only saw 2 others [yay me!])
    Age: 19
    Personality: Soi’s early childhood has led him to be a very aggressive person when provoked, but is generally very caring. He loves to help others, but will not let anyone hurt his friends. He does see reasoning, and will not defend a friend if they have done wrong to another person. Befriending him is very difficult, since he prefers to not talk to others who could cause him harm.

    General Appearance: Soi wears a simple Gi, the colors of this Gi are Grey and Red (I will be making a skin for this). His outfit comes from him working on a farm, he wore these clothes in order to have maximum mobility while farming. They have no symbols, as he wasn’t trained in martial arts with these colors. He keeps his hair short, but not bald. His hair color is a blue-black. His eyes are green.

    Backstory: Soi comes from an abusive family. His family, specifically his father was a very aggressive man. If he wasn’t pleased, you’d be beaten. His mother did nothing to help him, and in turn would also be beaten. At the age of 11 Soi ran away from his family, and old life. He found himself on an old farm, run by a rather elderly man. He saw an opportunity in this, and asked the man if he could stay there. The man let Soi stay there in return for help on the farm. By the age of 15 Soi was far more capable of defending himself, as he had gained strength from working on the farm. He asked the elderly man if he could leave to learn martial arts, and the man agreed. He went on to train at the nearest temple. The temple was Orin temple (He never meets Krillin, since he was long gone.). He trained there for 3 years and was kicked out for his actions. Those actions were his defense of a student who was being treated horribly for not being as skilled. After being kicked out of the temple, he vowed to never wear the Orin symbol again. At the age of 19 he decided to start going out to find people to help, and that is what he currently does.

    Thanks for reading!
    Here’s my discord for easier contact, if you do choose me to join.

    Negative
    #1695

    • #31564

      Zyph
      Participant

      Accepted

  • #31567

    StormSlayerSS
    Participant

    Name: Resoza

    Gender: Male

    Race: Arcosian

    Age: 20

    Personality:Is a determined warrior and stubborn fighter who will never give up till death, he gets angered really easily and doesn’t like being made a fool of, he has a soft side but doesnt show it when in a fight. He can be cold hearted at times and can be confusing at times but isn’t the worst guy to be friends with, he really loves training and competition.

    Appearance: No clothes, But his colour scheme is Gold, Grey, PurpleBlue, Grey in that order through creating a Arcosian, His eye colour is Red, He has no mouth in appearance and has a white aura.

    Backstory: When Resoza was born he was the weakest from his older brother and was always a outcast as a child but never gave up as a fighter even if everyone said he could never be one but he never gave up and felt determined to prove them wrong. When he was around 9 he started training to prove them wrong and trained til he was 15, soon learned his brother was accepted into the Freiza force. He never really hung out with his brother and by now he will never get to really truely know his brother but he will never give up on thinking that he will be able to see him again. He decided to steal a space pod at the age of 16 and go to other planets and find a better planet for harder opponents and better training he found many planets and fought many foes when he turned 17 he soon found out that there were stronger people at a planet inspecting to go to and attempt to fight its opponents even though they seemed stronger than him he never gave up just because of that reason. To train he found a planet that was seemingly gravity strong and had no inhabitants. So he trained there in till he was 19 He became really strong but every year he inspected the planets warriors and had seen that they were also getting strong and he saw that he was just keeping up with their strength by the time he hit 20. He was equal with one of the strongest warriors on the planet so he finally decided to land on the planet and fight them, learn their ways and train beside them but if he had to he would destroy them if they tried to kill him.

    • #31597

      Zyph
      Participant

      This needs work. How come Resoza was felt like an outcast? You need to elaborate more on his training, when and how did he find out his brother joining the frieza force. Why did he barely know his brother? Why didn’t go to see his brother, if didn’t really know him at all you ldid ft that in a cliffhanger. Why did he steal a ship?, and not just ask for one or borrow one? Anywsys, you need to put more thought and content into this.

  • #31573

    StormSlayerSS
    Participant

    This is my discord forgot to put it in.
    Storm
    #6832

  • #31574

    OkaraTheGhoul
    Participant

    Name: Coldra

    Gender: Male

    Race: Arcosian

    Age: 23

    Personality: Very protective of himself and his friends, Can be very sensitive at times and towards people, and he can be really stubborn in most fights and hee sees good in people, but will do anything to become stronger and stop them from trying to do things for evil purposes. He has very low self esteem and doubts himself.

    General Appearance: No armor red eyes Red scouter Color Scheme: Grey, Light PurpleBlue, Red, Light PurpleBlue. Red aura

    Backstory: As a kid Coldra was born as the strongest in his family he thought about his young sibling that was weaker then him could still become stronger and thought of him as competition instead of a joke like everyone else did. He trained a bit but he was mostly sleeping and went through his life without much care because he was young he didn’t think about much other than training and becoming stronger. When he hit 12 he was really strong compared the others he was strong enough to join the freiza force when he applied he was accepted when he turned 15, He decided to use the Frieza force for training instead of just blowing up planets and killing people. He became really strong and by the time he was 17 he met three others that were pure hearted like him they decided to all steal space pods and leave the Frieza force. When they were in space they spotted a planet where they could buy a ship, they worked really hard but after the 1st year already 1 of his groups members gave up and left him by the 2nd year the other had left him too. He was 21 years old when he finally had enough to get the ship he so desperately wanted, when he got it, it had a training room and so much more than he had expected. He traveled really far and went to many different planets by the time he was 22 he found a planet where life was perfectly modern and not as violent as the rest. He was in his ship and the ship was on the planets moon, he was training to become strong enough to protect the planet with his life trying to make up for watching all the planets and people that were destroyed by the Frieza force. Around a year later he decided to make his presence known that he was there to protect, when he landed he was attacked by words and called a monster but he knew that they were just feared by him so he decided to go out hiding and protect them in secret. At this point the story continues from here.

    Discord: Okara#9552

    • #31600

      Zyph
      Participant

      You need to work on this more. Show mor of how your character is. How come he was the strongest out of all of the younglings, what kind BD of training did he went through? You should elaborate about his time within those 2 years what did he do and go through. Who were these friends of his and how did he meet them? Also, why did they steal some pods the griega force and leave? Why did his two friends give up and leave him during the second
      year? Why did he travel to planet to planet? The end of this is pretty solid, you show work on it more.

    • #31610

      OkaraTheGhoul
      Participant

      Coldra was born with a really high power level as a child he was a very abnormal child and was praised for his strength by his friends. He thought about his young sibling at times that was weaker then him, he could still become stronger than him and thought of him as competition instead of a joke like everyone else did. He trained a bit when he was 9, training such as weights and gravity but he was mostly sleeping and went through his life without much care because he was young he didn’t think about much other than sleep, hanging with friends and becoming stronger. When he hit 12 he was really strong compared the others, he was strong enough to join the Freiza force when he applied he was accepted when he turned 15, He decided to use the Frieza force for training instead of just blowing up planets and killing people, because he wasn’t in to it and he felt bad because he was still weak compared to Frieza, and had to watch his disasterous ways. He tried his best and trained a lot, became really strong and by the time he was 17 he met two others that were pure hearted like him, they’re names were Zagara and Garagin, Zagara has red skin and dark red dots all over with horns. Zagara was a arcosian like him and had purple gems, red skin, and gray plateing. They decided they were sick of seeing all the destruction and wanted to make a pure hearted force to fight the Frieza force so they all stole space pods and left the Frieza force. When they were in space they spotted a planet where they could buy a ship, that could help expand their crew, it was of reasonable size, they worked really hard to try to gain the money for the ship, the kind of jobs they did were simple mining for rare materials, hunting even though they didn’t like it, At the half way mark of how much they needed a year went by and one already gave up because it was so difficult to find anything and left in his space pod. The other left mysteriously he may had thought something went wrong or he had given up on trying because they barely got 75 percent of the money they needed. He was 21 years old when he finally had enough to get the ship he so desperately wanted, when he got it, it had a gravity room, a recovery room, and so much more than he had expected. He traveled really far and went to many different planets but most of them were ruined, he search for a innocent planet that wasn’t ruined by the Frieza force by the time he was 22 he found a planet where life was perfectly modern and not as violent as the rest. He was in his ship and the ship was on the planets moon, he was training in the ships gravity room to become strong enough to protect the planet with his life trying to make up for watching all the planets and people that were destroyed by the Frieza force. Around a year later he decided to make his presence known that he was there to protect, when he landed he was attacked by words and called a monster but he knew that they were just feared by him so he decided to go out hiding and protect them in secret. At this point the story continues from here.

  • #31577

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    Name: Bat
    Gender: Male
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 12
    Personality: middle serious-joke-ish (a bit of Batman And Flash maybe :P) And he’s good And proud, but he can sometimes show his evil side (bit of majin Vegeta)
    General appereance: Arcosian’s body 3 fully Black with White crystals and red eyes
    Backstory: He was born on a planet named Zaburu. His parents left him on this planet alone, so there wasn’t anyone who knew his father nor mother, but there always have been a guy that was caring him, this man’s name was Wint. Wint was like a father for him, because Wint did know how it is, his parents also left him on this planet, so he knew that pain. Wint was always helping Bat, in training, getting food, etc. Bat was training everyday, in morning, midday and in evening, he didn’t ever stop training. Arcosians on this planet always liked to destroy other planets, or just kill people on those. People from this planet were in war with planet Entorn, so they wanted to send to this planet their most skilled arcosian. They were thinking that Bat is the most skilled one, so they sent him. Bat had just 6 years and he did get a mission to kill everyone on planet Entorn, he was sent to this planet with spaceship that was in military base. But he sadly landed on military base of planet Entron, when people of this planet found him then they froze him and sent to a random planet trough his spaceship, and this planet just happened to be earth. He landed on a mountain. When he landed, he was in ice. It was years before it unfroze, Bat left his spaceship started training, gathering materials, and living a peaceful life on lanet, he also builded a house on this mountain and he made a wheat farm. His house was made on plains, near river, so he had his farm next to his house, he also made farm of pigs, cows, sheeps, and he made a secret laboratory under his house, so he can experiment with everything that he will find, to be sure what it is, there wasn’t anything more that he did, just he made a farm of wheat, carrots and he also found potatoes. But his peaceful life can change! Later on Dragon Block C Series!

    Discord: BatVenomPL#7017

    P.S. I don’t really know what to do more xD

    • #31601

      Zyph
      Participant

      It’s pretty solid now, Fix some grammar. Elaborate more on why did they freeze Bat and what did Bat do when he suddenly woked up from his frozen slumber. Why didn’t he go explore and build a house instead? How long did it take him? Do that and your pretty much set.

  • #31579

    JamesCfer
    Participant

    Name: Alex or Al as his friends called him
    Gender: Male
    Race:half-Saiyan
    Age: 17
    Personality:he is a kind person who always holds back in a fight not wishing to hurt anyone, but if someone hurts one of his friends he give it 100% and does not play around. He is scared to lose anyone close to him, but when he lets out his full power he becomes full of himself.
    General Appearance: A black Gi that has a white mark around the lower chest area which is a mark of his rank from his farther school white meaning he has finished his training. His hair is normally down covering some of his face.
    Backstory: Alex full name Alexander Leo Cfer He was born on a world far away his mother a saiyan was called away for a war when Alex was just a baby. His father Leo a human taught at a school for martial arts training Alex in several different fighting styles. Alex was trained at Leo’s school and began as being one of the most untalented students at the school. He was constantly bullied by the stronger students. His father was always kind to Alex, making him feel better when the students were bullying him. after a few years at his 14th birthday his father had decided to build a fighting style for Alex since he was not able to master the ones that already existed. His father knew that Alex Specialized in Speed. After about a month of learning this new fighting style he began to climb his way up in the school’s student ratings system. The students began to respect him when he started to show some talent, they began to treat his as an equal. Shortly after his 15th birthday Alex took place in the finals tournament where the graduation event occurs it is the final testing ground for students in their final year of training. Alex made it to the final round of the tournament by using a technique that his father taught him to control, Leo called it power multiply, it allows him to multiply his power by up to 10 times. By multiplying his power, it leaves his body exhausted. One day some pink creature came to the school. Leo called it a New Born majin. It looked just like a child, but the power coming off it was making Alex worried that his father could beat him. The majin raised its hand and with a white flash the school and all of Alex’s friends inside were gone all that was left was Alex and Leo. Leo lost it after he saw that the majin had killed the students. Leo Rushed him whirl Alex was Breaking down feeling useless. Leo was Beaten brutally before being killed, whirl Alex just watched on feeling powerless. Alex was seeing his life flashing before his eyes and something broke in him as he realized he had nothing left. His power spilled out he had no control over it. His hair began to spike as if he was going super saiyan but his base power was not high enough to achieve the form. He temporally became a false super saiyan it burnt out his body leaving him with no energy left, but he was able to get of a single attack to destroy the majin a single black wave flew out at the majin and as the majin screamed it was destroyed. Alex was rushed into a hospital to heal it took over a month for his body to heal after he burnt it out. Now he spends his time training and perfecting his power multiplication technique. His focus is on his speed and defense he never wants to feel powerless to save someone.
    Note he does not know he is half saiyan he thinks he is human
    Discord: JamesCfer#4722

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  JamesCfer.
    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  JamesCfer.
    • #31603

      Zyph
      Participant

      First, half-saiyan? This will be interesting.

      Alright, am gonna start. Why did his mother never came back? How did his parents meet? Why was Alex so untalented and couldn’t use the other fighting styles? How did Leo know of this “power multiply” did he create it or learned it from someone else? When was Leo taught the power multiply and what kind of training did he go through to achieve it? How does Leo know of majins? Alright, am gonna point this out before anyone else does this. FSS( False Super Saiyan) will not be in the role play. Unless it’s in the mod. Jamescfer, I urge you to change the part Alex goes FFS with something else. Also don”t Majins regenerate? Who took him to the hospital? Who took care of him or does he take care of himself? How is he going about his life besides training? You should work on it slot if you really want to be a half-saiyan, also I saw a lot of grammar errors. You should fix those if you want me to understand the backstory more. Good Luck!

    • #31613

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      Name: Alex or Al as his friends called him
      Gender: Male
      Race: Half-Saiyan
      Age: 17
      Personality: He is a kind person who always holds back in a fight not wishing to hurt anyone, but if someone hurts one of his friends he gives it 100% and does not play around. He is scared to lose anyone close to him, but when he lets out his full power he becomes full of himself.
      General Appearance: A black Gi that has a white mark around the lower chest area which is a mark of his rank from his farther school white meaning he has finished his training. His hair is normally down covering some of his face.
      Backstory: Alex full name Alexander Leo Cfer He was born on a world far away his mother a saiyan was called away for a war when Alex was just a baby. (she never came back it is assumed she is dead) His father Leo a human taught at a school for martial arts training, and taught Alex in several different fighting styles. Alex was trained at Leo’s school and was one of the most untalented students at the school in those fighting styles, because of his foot work he likes to keep moving in a fight but the styles that were taught were made so that you would stop and have a moment to take in the situation, whereas Alex would watch the situation whirl moving. He was constantly bullied by the other students, because of this. His father was always kind to Alex, making him feel better when the students were bullying him. After a few years on his 14th birthday his father had decided to build a fighting style with Alex since he was not able to master the ones that already existed. His father knew that Alex Specialized in Speed. After about a month of learning this new fighting style he began to climb his way up in the school’s student ratings system. (the top 10 students get to fight in the yearly tournaments) The students began to respect him when he beat the 10th strongest student in the school, they began to treat his as an equal after that. Shortly after his 15th birthday Alex took place in the graduation tournament where the graduation event occurs it is the final testing ground for students in their final year of training. Alex made it to the final round of the tournament by using a technique that his father taught him to control, Leo called it power multiply (its true name is the Kaioken), it allows him to multiply his power by up to 10 times. (Leo learnt it from his master who learnt it from king kai after he had died protecting the Earth against some creature (no one knows much about). Leo’s Master was able to teach Leo the basics of the technique allowing him to multiply his power. Leo’s master was able to come back for 3 days because of what he did for the Earth. By multiplying his power, it leaves his body exhausted once it wears off. One day some pink creature came to the school. Leo called it a New Born majin. It looked just like a child, but the power coming off it was making Alex worried, because the power out classed his father. The majin raised its hand and with a white flash the school and all of Alex’s friends were gone all that was left was Alex and Leo. Leo lost it after he saw that the majin had killed the students. Leo Rushed him whirl Alex was Breaking down feeling useless. Leo was Beaten brutally, before the majin crushed his skull, whirl Alex just watched on feeling powerless. Alex saw his life flashing before his eyes and it was if something broke in him, as he realized he had nothing left to lose. His power spilled out he had no control over it. His body was bursting with power as he went beyond his limits he leaped at the majin and the ground he was standing on broke apart, with a sudden stop he hit the majin with the full extent of his power a black purple white and blue wave flew out from his hands and it was over. it burnt out his body leaving him with no energy left, but from what he saw it seemed like the majin was destroyed little did he know that the majin survived the attack. Alex was rushed into a hospital by his friend kai who somehow managed to get out of the building as it was being destroyed, but he was injured he lost one of his hands, but was determined to save his friend. Alex when into a coma from using up so much energy, it took him over a month to come out of it. His body had mostly healed and when he woke up the first thing he wanted to know was what happened to Kai the hospital told him that Kai was still in a coma. Alex likes to visit Kai whenever he is not training or helping someone out. Alex lives in his father’s house that was left to him when Leo died. Alex wants to start a school to train people to become stronger and to pass on the fighting styles his father created and learned.

      Note he does not know he is half saiyan he thinks he is human. He does not know that the majin is still alive. He does not know what happened to his mother. Leo learnt what a majin was from kingkai who talks to him from time to time. King kai explained how dangerous a majin can be.
      Things he likes to do: Help others out, Teach, spar with others, Work on the house his father left him and he likes to make friends.

      Discord: JamesCfer#4722

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  JamesCfer. Reason: Fixed what you said i should
    • #31616

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      Name: Alex or Al as his friends called him
      Gender: Male
      Race: Half-Saiyan
      Age: 17
      Personality: He is a kind person who always holds back in a fight not wishing to hurt anyone, but if someone hurts one of his friends he gives it 100% and does not play around. He is scared to lose anyone close to him, but when he lets out his full power he becomes full of himself.
      General Appearance: A black Gi that has a white mark around the lower chest area which is a mark of his rank from his farther school white meaning he has finished his training. His hair is normally down covering some of his face.
      Backstory: (his mother and father meet when Leo beat her is a fight that she was sent there to win and because she lost she wanted to know what made him so strong, she got close to him and fell in love then they had Alex.) Alex full name Alexander Leo Cfer He was born on a world far away his mother a saiyan was called away for a war when Alex was just a baby. (she never came back it is assumed she is dead) His father Leo a human taught at a school for martial arts training, and taught Alex in several different fighting styles. Alex was trained at Leo’s school and was one of the most untalented students at the school in those fighting styles, because of his foot work he likes to keep moving in a fight but the styles that were taught were made so that you would stop and have a moment to take in the situation, whereas Alex would watch the situation whirl moving. He was constantly bullied by the other students, because of this. His father was always kind to Alex, making him feel better when the students were bullying him. After a few years on his 14th birthday his father had decided to build a fighting style with Alex since he was not able to master the ones that already existed. His father knew that Alex Specialized in Speed. After about a month of learning this new fighting style he began to climb his way up in the school’s student ratings system. (the top 10 students get to fight in the yearly tournaments) The students began to respect him when he beat the 10th strongest student in the school, they began to treat his as an equal after that. Shortly after his 15th birthday Alex took place in the graduation tournament where the graduation event occurs it is the final testing ground for students in their final year of training. Alex made it to the final round of the tournament by using a technique that his father taught him to control, Leo called it power multiply (its true name is the Kaioken), it allows him to multiply his power by up to 10 times. (Leo learnt it from his master who learnt it from king kai after he had died protecting the Earth against some creature (no one knows much about). Leo’s Master was able to teach Leo the basics of the technique allowing him to multiply his power. Leo’s master was able to come back for 3 days because of what he did for the Earth. By multiplying his power, it leaves his body exhausted once it wears off. One day some pink creature came to the school. Leo called it a New Born majin. It looked just like a child, but the power coming off it was making Alex worried, because the power out classed his father. The majin raised its hand and with a white flash the school and all of Alex’s friends were gone all that was left was Alex and Leo. Leo lost it after he saw that the majin had killed the students. Leo Rushed him whirl Alex was Breaking down feeling useless. Leo was Beaten brutally, before the majin crushed his skull, whirl Alex just watched on feeling powerless. Alex saw his life flashing before his eyes and it was if something broke in him, as he realized he had nothing left to lose. His power spilled out he had no control over it. His body was bursting with power as he went beyond his limits he leaped at the majin and the ground he was standing on broke apart, with a sudden stop he hit the majin with the full extent of his power a black purple white and blue wave flew out from his hands and it was over. it burnt out his body leaving him with no energy left, but from what he saw it seemed like the majin was destroyed little did he know that the majin survived the attack. Alex was rushed into a hospital by his friend kai who somehow managed to get out of the building as it was being destroyed, but he was injured he lost one of his hands, but was determined to save his friend. Alex when into a coma from using up so much energy, it took him over a month to come out of it. His body had mostly healed and when he woke up the first thing he wanted to know was what happened to Kai the hospital told him that Kai was still in a coma. Alex likes to visit Kai whenever he is not training or helping someone out. Alex lives in his father’s house that was left to him when Leo died. Alex wants to start a school to train people to become stronger and to pass on the fighting styles his father created and learned.

      Note he does not know he is half saiyan he thinks he is human. He does not know that the majin is still alive. He does not know what happened to his mother. Leo learnt what a majin was from kingkai who talks to him from time to time. King kai explained how dangerous a majin can be.
      Things he likes to do: Help others out, Teach, spar with others, Work on the house his father left him and he likes to make friends.
      Discord: JamesCfer#4722

    • #31629

      Zyph
      Participant

      This has improved, although the lore of the role-play may change. Anyways, Everything looks well, I’m still a little curious about who is the mother of Alex whats her name, etc. and how did she meet Leo? I would also like to know more of who Alex is.

    • #31646

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      Name: Alex or Al as his friends called him
      Gender: Male
      Race: Half-Saiyan
      Age: 17
      Personality: He is a kind person who always holds back in a fight not wishing to hurt anyone, but if someone hurts one of his friends he gives it 100% and does not play around. He is scared to lose anyone close to him, but when he lets out his full power he becomes full of himself.
      General Appearance: A black Gi that has a white mark around the lower chest area which is a mark of his rank from his farther school white meaning he has finished his training. His hair is normally down covering some of his face.
      Backstory: (his mother and father meet when Leo beat her is a fight that she was sent there to win and because she lost she wanted to know what made him so strong, she got close to him and fell in love then they had Alex.) Alex full name Alexander Leo Cfer He was born on a world far away his mother a saiyan was called away for a war when Alex was just a baby. (she never came back it is assumed she is dead) His father Leo a human taught at a school for martial arts training, and taught Alex in several different fighting styles. Alex was trained at Leo’s school and was one of the most untalented students at the school in those fighting styles, because of his foot work he likes to keep moving in a fight but the styles that were taught were made so that you would stop and have a moment to take in the situation, whereas Alex would watch the situation whirl moving. He was constantly bullied by the other students, because of this. His father was always kind to Alex, making him feel better when the students were bullying him. After a few years on his 14th birthday his father had decided to build a fighting style with Alex since he was not able to master the ones that already existed. His father knew that Alex Specialized in Speed. After about a month of learning this new fighting style he began to climb his way up in the school’s student ratings system. (the top 10 students get to fight in the yearly tournaments) The students began to respect him when he beat the 10th strongest student in the school, they began to treat his as an equal after that. Shortly after his 15th birthday Alex took place in the graduation tournament where the graduation event occurs it is the final testing ground for students in their final year of training. Alex made it to the final round of the tournament by using a technique that his father taught him to control, Leo called it power multiply (its true name is the Kaioken), it allows him to multiply his power by up to 10 times. (Leo learnt it from his master who learnt it from king kai after he had died protecting the Earth against some creature (no one knows much about). Leo’s Master was able to teach Leo the basics of the technique allowing him to multiply his power. Leo’s master was able to come back for 3 days because of what he did for the Earth. By multiplying his power, it leaves his body exhausted once it wears off. One day some pink creature came to the school. Leo called it a New Born majin. It looked just like a child, but the power coming off it was making Alex worried, because the power out classed his father. The majin raised its hand and with a white flash the school and all of Alex’s friends were gone all that was left was Alex and Leo. Leo lost it after he saw that the majin had killed the students. Leo Rushed him whirl Alex was Breaking down feeling useless. Leo was Beaten brutally, before the majin crushed his skull, whirl Alex just watched on feeling powerless. Alex saw his life flashing before his eyes and it was if something broke in him, as he realized he had nothing left to lose. His power spilled out he had no control over it. His body was bursting with power as he went beyond his limits he leaped at the majin and the ground he was standing on broke apart, with a sudden stop he hit the majin with the full extent of his power a black purple white and blue wave flew out from his hands and it was over. it burnt out his body leaving him with no energy left, but from what he saw it seemed like the majin was destroyed little did he know that the majin survived the attack. Alex was rushed into a hospital by his friend kai who somehow managed to get out of the building as it was being destroyed, but he was injured he lost one of his hands, but was determined to save his friend. Alex when into a coma from using up so much energy, it took him over a month to come out of it. His body had mostly healed and when he woke up the first thing he wanted to know was what happened to Kai the hospital told him that Kai was still in a coma. Alex likes to visit Kai whenever he is not training or helping someone out. Alex lives in his father’s house that was left to him when Leo died. Alex wants to start a school to train people to become stronger and to pass on the fighting styles his father created and learned.

      Note he does not know he is half saiyan he thinks he is human. He does not know that the majin is still alive. He does not know what happened to his mother. Leo learnt what a majin was from kingkai who talks to him from time to time. King kai explained how dangerous a majin can be.
      Things he likes to do: Help others out, Teach, spar with others, Work on the house his father left him and he likes to make friends.
      How Leo met Alex’s mother. she was sent to destroy earth, but ran into an issue. This was shortly after Loe’s master had died. Leo was there when she arrived and he was ready to fight. she and Leo fought for nearly an hour, before Leo over powered her (using Kaiokenx10). She was unsure how he had beaten her, since her scouter said her base was stronger than his. So instead she had changed her mind. She wanted to understand what made him so strong. Leo asked her for her name, and she responded with Salaid. Leo laughed that sounds like a food we have here. Salaid responded with i pledge myself to you. Leo looked surprised and accepted it under one condition that she would not fight whirl on Earth. She accepted. Over the next few years they grew closer till then Alex was born. Salaid had his tail removed since he was a half breed. and she refused to show him any motherly love. Salaid was waiting for the chance to leave she didn’t want to have to deal with a half breed. So, when the msg was sent to her scouter, to return for a war. She was ready to leave. Leo didn’t want Alex to know that he was half saiyan so he kept it a secret so that he wouldn’t go looking for his mother.

      What type of person is Alex? Alex is a bit full of himself but never tells anyone his real power is. he will always fight alone unless there is no other way. he loves sparing and fighting people. he is kind to the less fortunate and will help just about anyone out. He hides a dark past which is why he likes to wear dark clothing he just feels more comfortable in them. He thinks everything happens for a reason, and every fight is a stepping stone for greater strength.

      Discord: JamesCfer#4722

    • #31647

      Zyph
      Participant

      This seems pretty good, although there’s some stuff that bug and perhaps a few grammar fixes. However, I’ll call this Accepted and you can rest easy.

    • #31615

      aKuMaXDA
      Participant

      Hey I wanna create a character too
      Gimme a week to get stuff sorted out

    • #31630

      Zyph
      Participant

      Don’t worry take your time.

  • #31604

    StormSlayerSS
    Participant

    BackStory: Resoza was born on the planet Erieza, He was the weakest from his older brother and was always a outcast as a child because of being born weaker than most. But he never gave up to become a fighter even if everyone said he could never be one. Them saying that would just fuel Resoza’s determination to prove them all wrong and he will aim to become the strongest. When he was around 8 he started training strength and speed by using weights and doing basic training such as pushups and gravity training intil he hit 10, Then he started training endurance by fighting people on his planet and doing sit ups when he hit 12, He soon learned his brother was accepted into the Freiza force. He never really hung out with his brother because his brother was always hanging around others, training, and just busying sleeping and by now he will never get to really truly know his brother, because they never really hung out. The times they hung out were only to fight he respected his brother, just because he didn’t think of him as a joke like the others did, because of being born with a weak power level. But he will never give up on trying to find his brother so he could understand why he was so different from the others that had thought of him as a joke. He decided to steal a space pod at the age of 16, because at the time it was forbidden for him to leave the planet because he wasn’t strong enough to face the universe, but still he did it anyway and went to other planets to try to track down his brother, find stronger opponents and find better training, he found many planets and fought many foes, such as Saiyans, Robots, Bounty hunters, and the strongest fighters of their planets they were tough to fight because of the difference in techniques and skills but he won most of the fights and barely lost because of most of the planets had primitive beings. When he turned 17 he soon found out that there were stronger people at a planet that he inspected they seemed so much stronger than him, he would think that his brother was there too so he decided to go train and make his brother impressed of the strength he has gained over the years. He found a planet that was seemingly gravity strong and had no inhabitants it was around x750 the gravity of normal, He was slower than a snail at this gravity but he still had determination in him to go on and persevere. Once he was able to move a bit he started doing simple training such as sit ups, push ups, and running around the planet over and over. So he trained like that in till he was 20 He became really strong but every once in awhile he inspected the planets warriors and had seen that they were also getting strong and he saw that he was just keeping up with their strength. He was equal with one of the strongest warriors on the planet so he finally decided to land on the planet and fight them, learn their ways train beside them, and look for his brother. But if he had to he would destroy them if they tried to kill him or injure him badly.

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  StormSlayerSS.
    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  StormSlayerSS.
  • #31607

    Name:Zadrick
    Gender:Male
    Race:Saiyan
    Age:75
    Personality:An Honest Person Calm Determined Courageous Impulsive Etc …
    He likes to work alone, he does not like people to help him.
    He does not have any type of fear against the enemy He also likes children and he is very proud.
    General Appearance:Wearing a black suit. He has a hood (He has his Super Saiyan 1) Black shoes Black hair (He’s a little old) He has muscles all over Body he likes to Train.
    Backstory:Her Story Begins When her mother is killed by a Saiyan, her mother was a saiyan so she was very weak,
    His father became super saiyajin when his wife died …
    Zadrick spent 10 years .. He was no longer afraid of anything He arouses his super saiyajin when he loses to Kraka a friend / rival, Kraka became Casey because he was weak, pass the fight he would die when it is near the end he arouses a Fury of a Super Saiyajin and He Defeats Kraka with His KameHameHa .. And He Is Alive Till Today!
    ay!

    • #31631

      Zyph
      Participant

      Denied

      First off, in the backstory you refer Zadrick as a “Her” many times. The backstory lacks content and quality. It shows nothing about who your character is. Also, did you read the Saiyan description? This is the hardest race to apply for, it’s not gonna be easy to join the role-play as a Saiyan. Anyways, this story didn’t make sense at all. It has so many plot holes, that got me lost. I don’t think its near enough of being qualified for a saiyan. This application has potential but you have to work on it. A lot. Like, so much that you become applicable for our standards or I suggest to pick an easier race.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Zyph.
  • #31609

    _ScribblezB94_
    Participant

    Name: Kiren
    Gender: Male
    Race: Half Saiyan
    Age:18

    Personality: Protective doesn’t like anyone getting hurt and a little straight forward

    General Appearance: My character will be wearing Goku blacks gi, Hair color white, no tail, blue eyes

    Backstory: Kiren was born a half-saiyan with his mother being human and his father being full blooded saiyan. He was raised as a normal human being his powers never been brought out the child didn’t know anything about it either. Then one day Kiren’s dad was out and it was just Kiren and his mother then two people broke into their house. The criminals were demanding they hand over all their money and valuable items, but Kiren’s mother disobeyed the demands and tried to fight back. It was useless trying to fight, The two guys grabbed her and pulled a gun out and aimed it at her head and… she was dead. Witnessing his mothers death he grew angry and was crying, (at this time he is 10 if your wondering) his anger grew then a strange feeling start flowing through his body then white aura formed around him. Kiren had awoken his hidden powers and he killed the two guys and vanished before police could get there. After that it was 4 years later Kiren is 14 and he became stronger threw his training with his dad they had been in hiding since the incident. Kiren knew almost everything about himself he knew he was half human and half saiyan a warrior race and that his dad was a survivor from a planet called Vegeta. Kiren’s dad then died protecting his son from a another race that tried to kill Kiren. as of now Kiren is 18 just graduated high school and is on his own knowing that both his parents are dead.

    Well I guess that’s the best I could do 😛 if there is anything I can fix and anything I can improve on

    My Discord id: ScribblezB94#8707

    • #31637

      Zyph
      Participant

      You need to add way more quality and content to your story, it doesn’t have to be as hectic as the saiyan applications. You need to show more about who your character is, what kind of training did he go though. What was the father’s reaction to his wife death, why did he decide to train Kiren? Why did another race want to kill Kiren? What did Kiren do after his father died? Anyways, this is not bad…but it’s not great. You need to check for grammar errors and add more commas too, also you misspelled some things, so you might wanna check your spelling. Anyhow, Good Luck with your application!

  • #31611

    cgamewinner
    Participant

    Name: Raian
    Age: 25
    Height: 6’2
    Race:Saiyan
    Gender: Male
    Personality: He can be calm at times, often staying back and observing from afar before attacking, has an alternate ego named spike which is a Rage filled personality with little to no reguard for life, he only comes out when Raian is put under major stress
    Appearance: Red gi with white undershirt, dark black hair and blue pants with red wristbands, if wearing scouter it would be red
    Origin: Raian was a saiyan warrior who was damaged severly in battle to the brink of death, instead of doing in the clasic healing pod he was put under expirmental treatments which succeeded in healing himself and much more, the healing pod he was in had special chemicals that the scientists were working on for years, healing him completely and mutated his cells, now allowing them to self regenerate, now having the slight healing factor he went out into battle more confident in his abilities since of the healing factor which even tho it heals him gradually it takes time anywhere between a few minutes to hours based on how bad the wound is, he escaped the explosion of planet vegeta by being off planet at the time, on another planet conquering it for frieza and when he heard of what happened to his home planet, the actual truth about it he went into hiding and vowed that he would avenge his fallen home race, he now hops form planet to planet, someone who would be a good allie but not someone to become an enemy with, him having made many comrades along his long journey across the galaxy

    Discord: Raian(ライアン)#2025

    • #31642

      Zyph
      Participant

      I’d suggest look at The Saiyan Applications, that been accepted. This needs more quality and content. You need to show more of who your character is. You need to add more information to it. It’s not bad, but it’s nowhere near our standards of being a saiyan in the roleplay. Anyways, Good Luck.

  • #31618

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    Name: Bat
    Gender: Male
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 12
    Personality: middle serious-joke-ish (a bit of Batman And Flash maybe :P) And he’s good And proud, but he can sometimes show his evil side (bit of majin Vegeta) and sometimes he likes researching, like scientists
    General appereance: Arcosian’s body 3 fully Black with White crystals and red eyes
    Backstory: He was born on a planet named Zaburu. His parents left him on this planet alone, so there wasn’t anyone who knew his father nor mother, but there always has been a guy that was caring him, this man’s name was Wint. Wint was like a father for him, because Wint knew how it is, his parents also left him on this planet, so he knew that pain. Wint was always helping Bat, in training, getting food, etc. Bat was training everyday, in morning, midday and in evening, he didn’t ever stop training. Arcosians on this planet always liked to destroy other planets, or just kill people on those. People from this planet were in war with planet Entorn, so they wanted to send to this planet their most skilled arcosian. They thought that Bat is the most skilled one, so they sent him. Bat had just 6 years and he did get a mission to kill everyone on planet Entorn, he was sent to this planet with spaceship that was in military base. But he sadly landed on military base of planet Entron, when people of this planet found him then they froze him, because they knew that there isn’t anyone on their planet to fight with arcosians, and they sent him to a random planet trough his spaceship, and this planet just happened to be earth. He landed on a mountain. When he landed, he was in ice. It was years before it unfroze, Bat left his spaceship, he started to think what’s is this planet, he checked trees, grass, water and sky, after all of that he found out that he’s on planet earth, so after this little research, he started training, gathering materials, and living a peaceful life on lanet. He travelled a bit and he found perfect terrain to build his house on, so he builded this house and he made a wheat farm. His house was made on plains, near river, so he had his farm next to his house, he also made farm of pigs, cows, sheeps, and he made a secret laboratory under his house, so he can experiment with everything that he will find, to be sure what it is, there wasn’t anything more that he did, just he made a farm of wheat, carrots and he also found potatoes. All of that taken him 6 months. But his peaceful life can change! Later on Dragon Block C Series!

    P.S. If there are still some grammar problems then tell me where 😛

    Discord: BatVenomPL#7017

    • #31737

      Abry
      Participant

      A quick question:- why did they leave him on that planet?

    • #31759

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      You may want to put a bit more info on what he does in his spare time.

    • #31766

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      I like the character, but you need to put in something explaining why he didn’t just leave. He has a Space craft right there so…

  • #31619

    StormSlayerSS
    Participant

    I decided to repost my application with my fixed backstory.
    Name: Resoza (Res-o-wa)

    Gender: Male

    Race: Arcosian

    Age: 20

    Personality:Is a determined warrior and stubborn fighter who will never give up till death, he gets angered really easily and doesn’t like being made a fool of, he has a soft side but doesn’t show it when in a fight. He can be cold hearted at times and can be confusing at times but isn’t the worst guy to be friends with, he really loves training and competition.

    Appearance: No clothes, But his colour scheme is Gold, Grey, PurpleBlue, Grey in that order through creating a Arcosian, His eye colour is Red, He has no mouth in appearance and has a white aura.

    Backstory: Resoza was born on the planet Erieza, He was the weakest from his older brother and was always a outcast as a child because of being born weaker than most. But he never gave up to become a fighter even if everyone said he could never be one. Them saying that would just fuel Resoza’s determination to prove them all wrong and he will aim to become the strongest. When he was around 8 he started training strength and speed by using weights and doing basic training such as pushups and gravity training intil he hit 10, Then he started training endurance by fighting people on his planet and doing sit ups when he hit 12, He soon learned his brother was accepted into the Freiza force through multiple of his brothers friends talking about it. He never really hung out with his brother because his brother was always hanging around others, training, and just busying sleeping and by now he will never get to really truly know his brother, because they never really hung out. The times they hung out were only to fight he respected his brother, just because he didn’t think of him as a joke like the others did, because of being born with a weak power level. But he will never give up on trying to find his brother so he could understand why he was so different from the others that had thought of him as a joke. He decided to steal a space pod at the age of 16, because at the time it was forbidden for him to leave the planet because he wasn’t strong enough to face the universe, but still he did it anyway and went to other planets to try to track down his brother, find stronger opponents and find better training, he found many planets and fought many foes, such as Saiyans, Robots, Bounty hunters, and the strongest fighters of their planets, they were tough to fight because of the difference in techniques and skills but he won most of the fights and barely lost because of most of the planets had primitive beings without much skill. When he turned 17 he soon found out that there were stronger people at a planet that he inspected they seemed so much stronger than him, he would think that his brother was there too so he decided to go train and make his brother impressed of the strength he has gained over the years. He found a planet that was seemingly gravity strong and had no inhabitants it was around x750 the gravity of normal, He was slower than a snail at this gravity but he still had determination in him to go on and persevere. Once he was able to move a bit he started doing simple training such as sit ups, push ups, and running around the planet over and over. So he trained like that in till he was 20 He became really strong but every once in awhile he inspected the planets warriors and had seen that they were also getting strong and he saw that he was just keeping up with their strength. He was equal with one of the strongest warriors on the planet so he finally decided to land on the planet and fight them, learn their ways train beside them, and look for his brother. But if he had to he would destroy them if they tried to kill him or injure him badly.

    If there is still anymore things you need to know about my character then please tell me so I can add it in. But I believe that this is enough detail for a Arcosian application and backstory.
    My discord – Storm#6832

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  StormSlayerSS.
    • #31643

      Zyph
      Participant

      We’re still deciding on your submission, so bear with us.

    • #31645

      StormSlayerSS
      Participant

      Okay thanks!

    • #31722

      StormSlayerSS
      Participant

      Have you decided yet?

    • #31753

      Zyph
      Participant

      Accepted, but your character may have some changes, due to the lore.

  • #31632

    Zyph
    Participant

    I’d suggest that if your applying for saiyan. Read the description and look at The Saiyan Applications, that been accepted.

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • #31638

      StormSlayerSS
      Participant

      Okay. glad I don’t have to go throug that trouble with arcosian.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  StormSlayerSS.
  • #31636

    OkaraTheGhoul
    Participant

    Name: Coldra

    Gender: Male

    Race: Arcosian

    Age: 23

    Personality: Very protective of himself and his friends, Can be very sensitive at times and towards people, and he can be really stubborn in most fights and hee sees good in people, but will do anything to become stronger and stop them from trying to do things for evil purposes. He has very low self esteem and doubts himself.

    General Appearance: No armor red eyes Red scouter Color Scheme: Grey, Light PurpleBlue, Red, Light PurpleBlue. Red aura

    Backstory:Coldra was born with a really high power level as a child he was a very abnormal child and was praised for his strength by his friends. He thought about his young sibling at times that was weaker then him, he could still become stronger than him and thought of him as competition instead of a joke like everyone else did. He trained a bit when he was 9, training such as weights and gravity but he was mostly sleeping and went through his life without much care because he was young he didn’t think about much other than sleep, hanging with friends and becoming stronger. When he hit 12 he was really strong compared the others, he was strong enough to join the Freiza force when he applied he was accepted when he turned 15, He decided to use the Frieza force for training instead of just blowing up planets and killing people, because he wasn’t in to it and he felt bad because he was still weak compared to Frieza, and had to watch his disasterous ways. He tried his best and trained a lot, became really strong and by the time he was 17 he met two others that were pure hearted like him, they’re names were Zagara and Garagin, Zagara has red skin and dark red dots all over with horns. Zagara was a arcosian like him and had purple gems, red skin, and gray plateing. They decided they were sick of seeing all the destruction and wanted to make a pure hearted force to fight the Frieza force so they all stole space pods and left the Frieza force. When they were in space they spotted a planet where they could buy a ship, that could help expand their crew, it was of reasonable size, they worked really hard to try to gain the money for the ship, the kind of jobs they did were simple mining for rare materials, hunting even though they didn’t like it, At the half way mark of how much they needed a year went by and one already gave up because it was so difficult to find anything and left in his space pod. The other left mysteriously he may had thought something went wrong or he had given up on trying because they barely got 75 percent of the money they needed. He was 21 years old when he finally had enough to get the ship he so desperately wanted, when he got it, it had a gravity room, a recovery room, and so much more than he had expected. He traveled really far and went to many different planets but most of them were ruined, he search for a innocent planet that wasn’t ruined by the Frieza force by the time he was 22 he found a planet where life was perfectly modern and not as violent as the rest. He was in his ship and the ship was on the planets moon, he was training in the ships gravity room to become strong enough to protect the planet with his life trying to make up for watching all the planets and people that were destroyed by the Frieza force. Around a year later he decided to make his presence known that he was there to protect, when he landed he was attacked by words and called a monster but he knew that they were just feared by him so he decided to go out hiding and protect them in secret. At this point the story continues from here.

    • #31640

      Zyph
      Participant

      This has improved, But I’m gonna point out a few things you missed. Like, you forgot to say how does Garagin looks like. What was the reason he joined the Frieza Force besides training. What did he do in his spar time, besides getting money for the ship. You may want to add a bit more of content and show more of who your character is.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • #31644

      OkaraTheGhoul
      Participant

      Coldra was born with a really high power level as a child he was a very abnormal child and was praised for his strength by his friends. He thought about his young sibling at times that was weaker then him, he could still become stronger than him and thought of him as competition instead of a joke like everyone else did. He trained a bit when he was 9, training such as weights and gravity but he was mostly sleeping and went through his life without much care because he was young he didn’t think about much other than sleep, hanging with friends and becoming stronger. When he hit 12 he was really strong compared the others, he was strong enough to join the Freiza force when he applied he was accepted when he turned 15, He decided to use the Frieza force for training, and figuring out their secrets, and fighting styles, instead of just blowing up planets and killing people, because he wasn’t in to it and he felt bad because he was still weak compared to Frieza, and had to watch his disasterous ways. He tried his best and trained a lot, became really strong and by the time he was 17 he met two others that were pure hearted like him, they’re names were Zagara and Garagin, Garagin has red skin and dark red dots all over with horns. Zagara was a arcosian like him and had purple gems, red skin, and gray plateing. Over time they decided they were sick of seeing all the destruction and wanted to make a pure hearted force to fight the Frieza force so they all stole space pods and left the Frieza force. When they were in space they spotted a planet where they could buy a ship, that could help expand their crew, it was of reasonable size, they worked really hard to try to gain the money for the ship, in the extra time Coldra trained to match the Frieza forces power, and he also talked with his friends about the progress they’ve made. The kind of jobs they did were simple mining for rare materials, hunting even though they didn’t like it, At the half way mark of how much they needed a year went by and one already gave up because it was so difficult to find anything and left in his space pod. The other left mysteriously he may had thought something went wrong or he had given up on trying because they barely got 75 percent of the money they needed. By the time he had the money he was really depressed and down but was willing to go on, He felt useless, and lonely because he couldn’t have stopped his friends from leaving him. He was 21 years old when he finally had enough to get the ship he so desperately wanted, when he got it, it had a gravity room, a recovery room, and so much more than he had expected. He traveled really far and went to many different planets, and in his spare time of traveling to it he was training for the inevitable to happen, such as meeting the Frieza Force. But most of them were ruined, he search for a innocent planet that wasn’t ruined by the Frieza force by the time he was 22 he found a planet where life was perfectly modern and not as violent as the rest. He wanted to make a difference and stop the Frieza force from ending life on this planet he found. They’re may have been a few strong opponents but they were no where near enough to protect themselves. He was in his ship and the ship was on the planets moon, he was training in the ships gravity room to become strong enough to protect the planet with his life trying to make up for watching all the planets and people that were destroyed by the Frieza force. Around a year later he decided to make his presence known that he was there to protect, when he landed he was attacked by words and called a monster but he knew that they were just feared by him so he decided to go out hiding and protect them in secret. At this point the story continues from here.

    • #31740

      OkaraTheGhoul
      Participant

      Name: Coldra

      Gender: Male

      Race: Arcosian

      Age: 23

      Personality: Very protective of himself and his friends, Can be very sensitive at times and towards people, and he can be really stubborn in most fights and hee sees good in people, but will do anything to become stronger and stop them from trying to do things for evil purposes. He has very low self esteem and doubts himself.

      General Appearance: No armor red eyes Red scouter Color Scheme: Grey, Light PurpleBlue, Red, Light PurpleBlue. Red aura

      Coldra was born with a really high power level as a child he was a very abnormal child and was praised for his strength by his friends. He thought about his young sibling at times that was weaker then him, he could still become stronger than him and thought of him as competition instead of a joke like everyone else did. He trained a bit when he was 9, training such as weights and gravity but he was mostly sleeping and went through his life without much care because he was young he didn’t think about much other than sleep, hanging with friends and becoming stronger. When he hit 12 he was really strong compared the others, he was strong enough to join the Freiza force when he applied he was accepted when he turned 15, He decided to use the Frieza force for training, and figuring out their secrets, and fighting styles, instead of just blowing up planets and killing people, because he wasn’t in to it and he felt bad because he was still weak compared to Frieza, and had to watch his disasterous ways. He tried his best and trained a lot, became really strong and by the time he was 17 he met two others that were pure hearted like him, they’re names were Zagara and Garagin, Garagin has red skin and dark red dots all over with horns. Zagara was a arcosian like him and had purple gems, red skin, and gray plateing. Over time they decided they were sick of seeing all the destruction and wanted to make a pure hearted force to fight the Frieza force so they all stole space pods and left the Frieza force. When they were in space they spotted a planet where they could buy a ship, that could help expand their crew, it was of reasonable size, they worked really hard to try to gain the money for the ship, in the extra time Coldra trained to match the Frieza forces power, and he also talked with his friends about the progress they’ve made. The kind of jobs they did were simple mining for rare materials, hunting even though they didn’t like it, At the half way mark of how much they needed a year went by and one already gave up because it was so difficult to find anything and left in his space pod. The other left mysteriously he may had thought something went wrong or he had given up on trying because they barely got 75 percent of the money they needed. By the time he had the money he was really depressed and down but was willing to go on, He felt useless, and lonely because he couldn’t have stopped his friends from leaving him. He was 21 years old when he finally had enough to get the ship he so desperately wanted, when he got it, it had a gravity room, a recovery room, and so much more than he had expected. He traveled really far and went to many different planets, and in his spare time of traveling to it he was training for the inevitable to happen, such as meeting the Frieza Force. But most of them were ruined, he search for a innocent planet that wasn’t ruined by the Frieza force by the time he was 22 he found a planet where life was perfectly modern and not as violent as the rest. He wanted to make a difference and stop the Frieza force from ending life on this planet he found. They’re may have been a few strong opponents but they were no where near enough to protect themselves. He was in his ship and the ship was on the planets moon, he was training in the ships gravity room to become strong enough to protect the planet with his life trying to make up for watching all the planets and people that were destroyed by the Frieza force. Around a year later he decided to make his presence known that he was there to protect, when he landed he was attacked by words and called a monster but he knew that they were just feared by him so he decided to go out hiding and protect them in secret. At this point the story continues from here.

    • #31768

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      This is Good. I would recommend giving a bit more info on the way he fights and the way he trains, but other than that it is good.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  JamesCfer.
    • #31770

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      Accepted

  • #31648

    Lyme
    Participant

    Name: Lyme
    Gender: Arcosian’s have no gender. (But I will refer to him as he)
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 23
    Personality: He is a monster who only likes to have power and control, but he has the patience to wait and plan out what his next move is.
    General Appearance: He has an advanced version of the armor frieza and his men, and the saiyans had, it comes with no shoulders. He has a version of the armor that is like pants. The color of his armor is Pink on the pecks and around the belly area, and brown on the belly. His sleeves are brown and is the same as his pant’s. His skin color is red where Frieza’s pink and purple be. And white on the other part of his body.
    Backstory: He is in the same clan as Frieza, but he wasn’t given any control of the universe because of his lack of power. Once Frieza had died (at least I believe in this story line he would already be dead) Lyme had went into action by first aggressively taking command of a small part of Frieza’s old army. Once word got out about Lyme’s actions, there was a revolution against him, and again because of his lack of power he had to back down, he had gone missing because of that but rumors say he is on a small planet known as Earth. He had lost his scouter but his armor is still intact. He has been plotting, to come back into control. Right now he is silently training, Getting stronger as the days pass. (I am hoping that in this story line in this server doesn’t make Arcosian training stupid op like in super) So far, he hasn’t come into contact with any particularly strong beings.
    Alignment: (Just thought it should be added) Evil
    Bp: (Again just thought it should be added) before training: 7,403. After training: 11,402 (and still slowly growing)

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Lyme. Reason: He was too old
    • #31650

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      I like your backstory, and although I’m not in charge of the decision making, or discussion itself, I do have a question.

      Why is he so weak, if he is indeed related to Freeza? Freeza and his brother are both incredibly powerful, as is their father. In fact, Freeza, compared to his father, had to be in his final form to have a power level of around 120(ish being from sources, I haven’t looked into it any more recently) million. His father was around that level in what seems to be 2nd form. His brother is around the same level, maybe a bit stronger. Please elaborate on why he isn’t as strong as his family. And although you refer to it as the same clan, I believe it is also the same family. If you mean same group, different father, that would explain it.

  • #31651

    Lyme
    Participant

    This is my reply to NeativeBoom.

    Just because he is in the same clan doesn’t mean he is right next to frieza and cooler by blood, and r was born as an abnormal you could say, also I made him weak another reason so that it would make sense for the lower level soldiers to be able to overpower him, I will probably add this stuff to the story, and I won’t make his starting power level stronger cause Bardock had the ability to take on hundreds of Frieza’s men with a bp of 10K. Tell me if you see other problems

  • #31652

    Lyme
    Participant

    OC* sorry I am typing on my phone rn xD

    • #31653

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Thanks for the explanation, what you said makes sense, and I’m excited to see the edited version of your story. That was the only issue I saw in your story, and once that was cleared up, it made plenty of sense.

  • #31654

    Lyme
    Participant

    Kay,
    Also for Arcosians you should make it to where they could always go into any form they want, ((except 5th+)) but they can only control it depending on their bp
    Also I would like to know how far this role play will go, will it go to gods, or maybe beyond? I would rather have he max bp near the end be Ssj Goku first time, but that is a personal preference, I hope the rp goes well, and I will upgrade my Oc tomorrow

  • #31657

    Abry
    Participant

    Ok, I have never done this before, but I guess I should try.

    Name: Abry
    Gender:Male
    Race: Saiyan
    Age:25
    Personality: An extremely talkative dude, he always wants others to know what he is thinking apart from enemies. He is extremely overconfident, to the point where he will almost NEVER show you his complete power, if you’re lucky, maybe 50%. He is very hasty to rush into battle and can be very rude and insulting to people he doesn’t like.
    General appearance: He always wears a green undershirt and a gi coloured red. He wears blue trousers and black-and-yellow boots, like Vegeta’s. He has many small cuts and injuries all over his body, the most prominent scar on the left side of his head, spanning his ear and top of the back of his neck. He also as a hole on his right shoulder where he was injected.(More on that in a sec)
    Backstory:(What age is this exactly?Like I think Goku vs. Frieza was age 762.I can base or change my story accordingly)He was born and brought up on a planet near Earth. However, the Frieza Force came and started ransacking it, finding it useless and the people pathetic.As a last resort, the people of the planet decided to inject some unsafe chemicals into him. He got quite strong, but the overall results were not as expected(so, in a way, he is failed medical experiment). It enhanced him in many ways(not as much as expected), but it also caused him to occasionally lose control and go in a bout of rage, where he would destroy all he saw and everyone he saw, kind of like being a great ape, but always uncontrollable. It also hampered with his quick thinking and often made him eager to rush into battle(thus explaining his personality). He also became emotionally unstable, getting upset or angry over the smallest things (explaining why he’s so rude to people he doesn’t like). He also had a lust for battle, whereas earlier he used to be a quiet person(I’m sorry, lots of stuff that should have been in personality is here, but since his personality was greatly affected by this, I decided to put it here). He was born a natural fighter. At that time he was five. He tried to stand up to the Frieza force but they were too many for him. The scar on the side of his head was given by a soldier who had a laser gun. The laser barely missed him. He managed to knock out the soldier and steal his escape pod. Later he finds out that the force had come to the planet specially to capture him, as he was one of the last saiyans. While escaping, the planet exploded, leaving him with many shrapnel marks on the ship and his body. The pod was specifically programmed to go to the nearest planet in case of an emergency, which was Earth. But the force did not stop chasing him so easily.Five years later they tracked him to Earth and said they had captured his family. They threatened to execute them if he did not surrender. He could not let his family die, so he surrendered. But as soon as he stepped down, they killed his parents in front of him. He watched their bodies fall to the ground as his hands were tied up with extremely strong bonds. He felt a huge surge of power and was filled with rage. He broke his bonds easily as the enemies stepped back. Then he noticed a yellow light coming from around him. He had achieved the legendary form known as the Super Saiyan. He easily killed all the enemies and annihilated their force completely. He was only 10 at the time. As time went by he started experimenting around with his powers, such as ki control. Even without a master to guide him, he managed to reach a BP of 12.5 million. He trains every day, having nothing else to do, and no one close enough to actually be a friend, he just talks to people occasionally, like Kami the guardian of Earth(or whoever it is at that time) who showed him a new training the place, the Hyperbolic Time Chamber, and Mr. Popo, the guardian’s companion. Nowadays, he is trying to re-enter that form that he got when his family died.
    (Also, the fact that Abry went Super Saiyan at ten may be surprising, but then again, Gohan went SSJ TWO at the age of 11)
    So thanks for reading, notify me on discord, I am Rhodes#3124 or just notify me here.
    Thanks again!
    -AbryCreator

    • #31661

      Abry
      Participant

      Oh and when I mean boots like Vegeta’s I mean the kind of model or style he wears, not like his in the colour sense.

    • #31666

      Abry
      Participant

      Ok I’m SO sorry, but I set the BP too high, so I’m asking, what would be a good/moderate BP level for my character?I’m totally new to this so thanks for bearing with me.

    • #31671

      Sam Noé
      Participant

      Well I ain’t the one supposed to answer you, but there’s a lot of chance that you won’t start off with Super Saiyan. And yeah Gohan went SSJ2 aged 10 but that was after a whole life of fight and training and a year in the HTC. So if your Saiyan has been sent to another planet he must be a low-class, but with the experiment, I’d say a BP of 10.000-15.000 should be good.

    • #31692

      Abry
      Participant

      Ah, but I DID mention he had been training inside and outside the Chamber from when he was five till he turned ten(I said he met Kami who showed him the place), also, Goten turned Super Saiyan at the age of seven fighting CHI-CHI so can you see what I mean? Abry turned SSJ when they killed his parents (much like Goku turning SSJ when Krillin died)

    • #31694

      Lyme
      Participant

      There is a theory that because Goten and Trunks parents were super saiyans, they had super saiyan blood in their veins, making it easier for them to obtain the form

    • #31695

      Abry
      Participant

      But five years of HBTC training should have paid off….(also the rage from his parents’ death?)

    • #31698

      Abry
      Participant

      And Sam, he wasn’t SENT OFF, he was born there, as I mentioned. And he went to Earth of his own accord, so you can interpret that any way you like. He was also enhanced(a bit, maybe 0.5x)with that stuff

    • #31709

      Zyph
      Participant

      This is a pretty good story, although it has some flaws. First, as Lyme has said previously. Your character may come off as “overpowered”, and on top of that he already has super saiyan. Yes, I said you need a genuine reason to transform Super Saiyan, but I meant it in the roleplay,and we can’t have you already knowing how to transform already in the begining. Achieving won’t be easy for Saiyans/Half-Saiyans. I’d suggest instead of him turning into a super saiyan, make him have a burst of power and not make him so powerful, though he can be averagely strong. I would like if you could add more to his life on Earth,and don’t let it be so vague, and show more of Abry.

      Note: I’m gonna assume, Abry is the vegetable pun of Arbi.

    • #31711

      Lyme
      Participant

      Zyph-Senpai has noticed me ;o

      also I upgraded my oc

    • #31717

      Abry
      Participant

      Edited backstory:-
      Ok so, here it goes:-
      He was born and brought up on a planet near Earth called Arbi. However, the Frieza Force came there and started ransacking it, finding it useless and the people pathetic.As a last resort, the people of the planet decided to inject some unsafe chemicals into him. He got quite strong, but the overall results were not as expected(so, in a way, he is failed medical experiment). It enhanced him in many ways(not as much as expected), but it also caused him to occasionally lose control and go in a bout of rage, where he would destroy all he saw and everyone he saw, kind of like being a great ape, but always uncontrollable. It also hampered with his quick thinking and often made him eager to rush into battle(thus explaining his personality). He also became emotionally unstable, getting upset or angry over the smallest things (explaining why he’s so rude to people he doesn’t like). He also had a lust for battle, whereas earlier he used to be a quiet person(I’m sorry, lots of stuff that should have been in personality is here, but since his personality was greatly affected by this, I decided to put it here). He was born a natural fighter. At that time he was five. He tried to stand up to the Frieza force but they were too many for him. The scar on the side of his head was given by a soldier who had a laser gun. The laser barely missed him. He managed to knock out the soldier and steal his escape pod. Later he finds out that the force had come to the planet specially to capture him, as he was one of the last saiyans. While escaping, the planet exploded, leaving him with many shrapnel marks on the ship and his body. The pod was specifically programmed to go to the nearest planet in case of an emergency, which was Earth. But the force did not stop chasing him so easily.Five years later they tracked him to Earth and told him that they had captured his family. They threatened to execute them if he did not surrender. He could not let his family die, so he surrendered. But as soon as he stepped down, they killed his parents in front of him. He watched their bodies fall to the ground as his hands were tied up with extremely strong bonds.A tear fell from his eyes onto the ground. He screamed very loudly. He felt a huge surge of power and was filled with rage. He broke his bonds easily as the enemies stepped back. He realised that the serum injected into him was doing its work, increasing his power to 1.5x its original value. He easily killed all the enemies and annihilated their force completely. He was only 10 at the time. As time went by he started experimenting around with his powers, such as ki control. One day he met the guardian of Earth, Kami. Kami showed him a place where he could train, known as the Hyperbolic Time Chamber. At first, he finds it difficult to train there, but as time goes by, it gets easier for him. Even without a master to guide him, he managed to reach a BP of 40 thousand, though when extremely enraged it rockets to 60 thousand(like when his parents died). He trained every day, for 15 years, inside and outside the Chamber, having nothing much to do. 0Occasionally he talks to Kami and Mr. Popo. He tries to learn new techniques by teaching himself. Right now, he knows a basic attack with energy. He prefers to fight with his hands though. Nowadays he is looking for a new opponent to test himself and find out his limits. He would also like a friend, but he’d rather not admit that.
      (How’s this?)

    • #31720

      Zyph
      Participant

      This is better. Although, I would like to know what happen, how was his life, what did he do during the five years.

    • #31718

      Abry
      Participant

      Note:- You are right Zyph sir, Abry is the pun of Arbi.

  • #31662

    Lyme
    Participant

    Name: Lyme
    Gender: Arcosian’s have no gender. (But I will refer to him as he)
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 23
    Personality: He is a monster who only likes to have power and control, but he has the patience to wait and plan out what his next move is.
    General Appearance: He has an advanced version of the armor frieza and his men, and the saiyans had, it comes with no shoulders. He has a version of the armor that is like pants. The color of his armor is Pink on the pecks and around the belly area, and brown on the belly. His sleeves are brown and is the same as his pant’s. His skin color is red where Frieza’s pink and purple be. And white on the other part of his body.
    Backstory: He is in the same clan as Frieza, but he wasn’t given any control of the universe because of his lack of power. He had a lack of power because he was born an abnormal, and also because he wasn’t close to blood, to Frieza and the others in the clan. Once Frieza had died (at least I believe in this story line he would already be dead) Lyme had went into action by first aggressively taking command of a small part of Frieza’s old army. Once word got out about Lyme’s actions, there was a revolution against him, and again because of his lack of power he had to back down, he had gone missing because of that but rumors say he is on a small planet known as Earth. He had lost his scouter but his armor is still intact. He has been plotting, to come back into control. Right now he is silently training, Getting stronger as the days pass. (I am hoping that in this story line in this server doesn’t make Arcosian training stupid op like in super) So far, he hasn’t come into contact with any particularly strong beings.
    Alignment: (Just thought it should be added) Evil
    Bp: (Again just thought it should be added) before training: 7,403. After training: 11,402 (and still slowly growing)

    • #31697

      Lyme
      Participant

      also there is the fact that you are just way to over powered, and also your not supposed to start with the ability to go ssj

    • #31699

      Abry
      Participant

      You CAN with a valid reason, also i decreased BP to 70,000

    • #31700

      Lyme
      Participant

      To be honest, if this is the start of the rp, he still seems a little bit too overpowered. But I have to admit, the story was very well done. and you should make it so instead of super saiyan, he got stronger through a great change in emotion (Saiyans get that effect as well, only saiyans hide their emotions a whole lot more then humans)

    • #31701

      Abry
      Participant

      Actually, he can’t control super saiyan, it just has happened once to him, with no actual probability it WILL again, he hasn’t mastered it or anything, he’s just experienced that amazing power once. Also, I won’t go super saiyan as it is in the rp unless that kind of stuff happens.

    • #31702

      Lyme
      Participant

      His power level seems to still be a little bit to high I mean, the villain in the beginning would be around 50K or at least that would make the most sense

    • #31703

      Abry
      Participant

      But, well, he has been training for 15 years AFTER the super saiyan incident, so(according to me) his BP could be around that?(Sorry this is the first time I’ve ever done this so sorry for the huge amount of edits)

    • #31705

      Lyme
      Participant

      It took goku most of his life to get to less then half of Raditz bp, and also if he went into the HTC he would be alone, which is a lot less efficient then being with someone else

    • #31707

      Lyme
      Participant

      THIS IS THE EDITED VERSION OF LYME
      (Sorry just wanted to make sure you could see the difference)

      Name: Lyme

      Gender: Arcosian’s have no gender. (But I will refer to him as he)

      Race: Arcosian

      Age: 23

      Personality: He is a monster who only likes to have power and control, but he has the patience to wait and plan out what his next move is.

      General Appearance: He has an advanced version of the armor frieza and his men, and the saiyans had, it comes with no shoulders. He has a version of the armor that is like pants. The color of his armor is Pink on the pecks and around the belly area, and brown on the belly. His sleeves are brown and is the same as his pant’s. His skin color is red where Frieza’s pink and purple be. And white on the other part of his body.

      Backstory: He is in the same clan as Frieza, but he wasn’t given any control of the universe because of his lack of power. He was born into the Frost Demon Clan expected to be one of the strongest of the clan. He was born with a power level of only 4,603. He had a lack of power because he was born an abnormal, and also because he wasn’t close to blood, to Frieza and the others in the clan. Once Frieza had died (at least I believe in this story line he would already be dead) Lyme had went into action by first aggressively taking command of a small part of Frieza’s old army. Once word got out about Lyme’s actions, there was a revolution against him, there was a great battle that lasted for days, he had to run away because he was exhausted, he had gone missing because of that but rumors say he is on a small planet known as Earth. He had lost his scouter but his armor was also broken. He has been plotting, to come back into control, to get his revenge on those who had revolted. Right now he is silently training, Getting stronger as the days pass. (I am hoping that in this story line in this server doesn’t make Arcosian training stupid op like in super) So far, he hasn’t come into contact with any particularly strong beings. But he believe’s that on Earth he will find someone who isn’t as weak as dirt. He has been on planet Earth for a few years now, around 4 years to be exact.
      Alignment: (Just thought it should be added) Evil
      Bp: (Again just thought it should be added) before training: 11,402. After training: 23,392 (and still slowly growing)

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Lyme.
    • #31713

      Zyph
      Participant

      It’s a bit improved, but it needs a lot more content. Take examples from the Acrosian Application that have been accepted.

      Note: This is the second reply

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • #31716

      Lyme
      Participant

      I have finished it again, tell me if it is enough content, or if it needs more quality

    • #31761

      Zyph
      Participant

      Also, I may need your discord to add you to our discord.

    • #31763

      Lyme
      Participant

      Discord: Idioticdemon105 #3847

    • #31704

      Zyph
      Participant

      You may want to add a lot more content to the backstory, and explain more on who Lyme is.

    • #31706

      Abry
      Participant

      And um…Zyph sir, how’s mine?(Sorry, I’m a bit impatient ;-;)
      (Note to Lyme:- Stop the conversation here, do it in my original post’s replies)

    • #31710

      Zyph
      Participant

      It has been replied to.

    • #31712

      Lyme
      Participant

      BTW the oc above this message is the upgraded version

  • #31663

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    Hey! Check my last application!

  • #31686

    NegativeBoom
    Participant

    Kinda making this post to remind people this is here, still don’t have enough people. Not even 1 single Majin, and I really want this to have some more people. The current numbers we have are very little, and this few people isn’t enough (at least in my book) for a decent RP.
    Good Luck to those who plan on applying/making a new application!

  • #31687

    Lyme
    Participant

    He hasn’t denied or accepted my oc yet, and if it had any big problems, it was my first oc for dbc (Note put that in the oc)

  • #31691

    Lyme
    Participant

    I am just asking, have you guys started or done anything for the rp? if not, I would like to know what is taking a long time, sorry if I sound rude, I am just really excited for this

    • #31693

      Zyph
      Participant

      Sorry, I’ve been busy with some stuff, I’m seeing the new applications now.

    • #31696

      Abry
      Participant

      Roger that.

  • #31715

    Lyme
    Participant

    THIS IS THE SECOND EDITED VERSION OF LYME
    (Sorry just wanted to make sure you could see the difference)

    Name: Lyme

    Gender: Arcosian’s have no gender. (But I will refer to him as he)

    Race: Arcosian

    Age: 23

    Personality: He is a monster who only likes to have power and control, but he has the patience to wait and plan out what his next move is.

    General Appearance: He had an advanced version of the armor frieza and his men, and the saiyans had, it comes with no shoulders. He has a version of the armor that is like pants. The color of his armor is Pink on the pecks and around the belly area, and brown on the belly. His sleeves are brown and is the same as his pant’s. His skin color is red where Frieza’s pink and purple be. And white on the other part of his body. But after it was destroyed he just was naked.

    Backstory: He is in the same clan as Frieza, but he wasn’t given any control of the universe because of his lack of power. He was born into the Frost Demon Clan expected to be one of the strongest of the clan. He was born with a power level of only 4,603. He had a lack of power because he was born an abnormal, and also because he wasn’t close to blood, to Frieza and the others in the clan. Once Frieza had died (at least I believe in this story line he would already be dead) Lyme had went into action by first aggressively taking command of a small part of Frieza’s old army.
    Once word got out about Lyme’s actions, there was a revolution against him, there was a great battle that lasted for days, he had to run away because he was exhausted, he had gone missing because of that but rumors say he is on a small planet known as Earth. He had lost his scouter and his armor was also broken. He has been plotting, to come back into control, to get his revenge on those who had revolted. Right now he is silently training, Getting stronger as the days pass. (I am hoping that in this story line in this server doesn’t make Arcosian training stupid op like in super) So far, he hasn’t come into contact with any particularly strong beings. But he believe’s that on Earth he will find someone who isn’t as weak as dirt. He has been on planet Earth for a few years now, around 4 years to be exact. He has killed many humans who had stumbled upon him, be it children, the elderly, women, he didn’t care. all he wanted was to gain power. One time a group of thugs had wandered into his area, when they found him they told him about how he was a legend, and how they came to him for power. Amused with how he had become a great entity to the world, he had taught the thugs basic ki training. The thugs had thought themselves to be gods thanks to this, but they still listened to Lyme. Lyme after a little while told the thugs to go around and start taking over the world. He had told them to tell him how it went once they completed the task. He was angry to hear that they were very easily defeated by the normal weaponry that humans had. He thought that the humans weapons were a lot less advanced, and that they had less effective tools and such. He had done a little bit of research on the human race and was amused by them. He plans to turn Earth into his own planet, and teach the humans enough about ki and training to where he can start an attack on what was left of Frieza’s army. (which was barely still not disbanded).

    Alignment: (Just thought it should be added) Evil

    Bp: (Again just thought it should be added) before training: 11,402. After training: 23,392 (and still slowly growing)

    Note I want my oc to be the starting villain, but be like Vegeta and learn there are more effective ways to deal with stronger beings, and groups.

    • #31719

      Zyph
      Participant

      It’s better, but I’d suggest you elaborate more on how he escaped and go to earth. Add more content to his landing and life on Earth, don’t let it be so vague.

  • #31723

    Abry
    Participant

    Even more edited backstory:-
    Ok so, here it goes:-
    He was born and brought up on a planet near Earth called Arbi. However, the Frieza Force came there and started ransacking it, finding it useless and the people pathetic.As a last resort, the people of the planet decided to inject some unsafe chemicals into him. He got quite strong, but the overall results were not as expected(so, in a way, he is failed medical experiment). It enhanced him in many ways(not as much as expected), but it also caused him to occasionally lose control and go in a bout of rage, where he would destroy all he saw and everyone he saw, kind of like being a great ape, but always uncontrollable. It also hampered with his quick thinking and often made him eager to rush into battle(thus explaining his personality). He also became emotionally unstable, getting upset or angry over the smallest things (explaining why he’s so rude to people he doesn’t like). He also had a lust for battle, whereas earlier he used to be a quiet person(I’m sorry, lots of stuff that should have been in personality is here, but since his personality was greatly affected by this, I decided to put it here). He was born a natural fighter. At that time he was five. He tried to stand up to the Frieza force but they were too many for him. The scar on the side of his head was given by a soldier who had a laser gun. The laser barely missed him. He managed to knock out the soldier and steal his escape pod. Later he finds out that the force had come to the planet specially to capture him, as he was one of the last saiyans. While escaping, the planet exploded, leaving him with many shrapnel marks on the ship and his body. The pod was specifically programmed to go to the nearest planet in case of an emergency, which was Earth.He spent the peaceful time there learning of its customs, what the people looked like, what grew and lived on the planet, what people there did, why they did so etc. He went to something called a “school”, and even made some friends there! However he left it within a year because it didn’t strike him as something useful, sitting in a room on a chair with a table, reading books and learning about what was around them! He didn’t need to do that, he was a good enough observer. He left his friends later as well, when they asked him where he lived and who his parents were. So, after all this, he went around exploring new places and enjoying himself. He didn’t stay anywhere for more than a day, always traveling, exploring. In time, he began to understand the geography, layout, and most things about the planet except why the people there didn’t have tails. Whenever someone asked him about his tail, he wrapped it around his waist and replied, “It’s a belt.” For a while, life looked good. Eating, punching exploring, eating. But those moments weren’t to last. Five years after he had landed on Earth, the Frieza force tracked him to Earth and told him that they had captured his family. They threatened to execute them if he did not surrender. He could not let his family die, so he surrendered. But as soon as he stepped down, they killed his parents in front of him. He watched their bodies fall to the ground as his hands were tied up with extremely strong bonds.A tear fell from his eyes onto the ground. He screamed very loudly. He felt a huge surge of power and was filled with rage. He broke his bonds easily as the enemies stepped back. He realised that the serum injected into him was doing its work, increasing his power to 1.5x its original value. He easily killed all the enemies and annihilated their force completely. He was only 10 at the time. As time went by he started experimenting around with his powers, such as ki control. One day he met the guardian of Earth, Kami. Kami showed him a place where he could train, known as the Hyperbolic Time Chamber. At first, he finds it difficult to train there, but as time goes by, it gets easier for him. Even without a master to guide him, he managed to reach a BP of 40 thousand, though when extremely enraged it rockets to 60 thousand(like when his parents died). He trained every day, for 15 years, inside and outside the Chamber, having nothing much to do. 0Occasionally he talks to Kami and Mr. Popo. He tries to learn new techniques by teaching himself. Right now, he knows a basic attack with energy. He prefers to fight with his hands though. Nowadays he is looking for a new opponent to test himself and find out his limits. He would also like a friend, but he’d rather not admit that.

    (So now it’s been edited, is it goodacceptable?)

    • #31752

      Zyph
      Participant

      It’s improved, but I wanna warn you some things may change for your character. But besides, everything looks, good a well explain backstory. There still some flaws, but I’ll let you reset easy and call this Accepted

    • #31764

      Abry
      Participant

      Thanks!
      Also I’m fine with changes, as they are the only constant thing in this world 😀

  • #31724

    Noobly25000
    Participant

    Name: Mosan
    Gender: Male
    Race: Half-Saiyan
    Age: 17
    Alignment: Good
    Personality: Mosan is somewhat hyper and joyful rarely getting stressed or angry and usually stays calm. Only in rare cases does he actually get angry and that is only in tense situations such as the lives of his family at stake or his friends but that never happens as until recently he hasn’t even been much of a fighter. He can also become angered or bitter when he thinks of the possible relationship he could have had with his father if he was still alive. He makes up for this “possible relationship” with his Step-Father who he views as his real father as he is the only father figure he has had in his life. Over all Mosan values life seeing it as “The most important thing in the world” and as “Beautiful.” He enjoys reading books and learning as he sees knowledge as power and along with that he just enjoys being able to show off to others he’s genius and feeling superior and many other reasons or feelings he can’t explain while indulging in the act of learning. He lacks the saiyan motive drive to fight yet he also enjoys fighting for sport or as a game. Overall he sees himself as a good person yet he can be quit arrogant or stuck up about how great he sees himself boasting about his hair, dress style, and anything else he can really find to gloat about. This could possibly be a result of his saiyan heritage or his saiyan bride. This leads sometimes in fights to his lose as he gets to cocky about his ability.
    General Appearance: When fighting in tournaments he uses the stereotypical orange Gi as a good friend of his Step-Fathers trained with the Turtle Hermit Master Roshi and gave it to Mosan’s Step-Father who in turn gave it to Mosan as this was intended as a birthday gift for him on his 10th birthday. He is usually seen wearing the Orange Star High School Uniform as it is the school he attends. He has a tail yet disguises it as a belt around his School Uniform to keep people from seeing him as “a freak of nature” as his mother put it into words. His hair style consists of a messy hair style and average saiyan black hair color yet his hair functions and looks similar and works just like a humans. His eye color is the stereotypical black saiyan Eyes.
    Backstory: (Switching into first person now) To fully explain I’ll have to go back to the beginning, before I was even born. My mother Yoguri explains it like this when I ask about my father. And not my Step-Father Jean Everyone knows about around were I live I’m talking about my real father Lotuce “Your father? Well… Lets just say he was an interesting man. You see he.. Wasn’t exactly like all of us here.” Of course I question what she means by “All of us here.” She responds with the same old thing that doesn’t really explain anything “Well he was from out of town” And then moved onto the “now I have things to do please go work with your father (my step-father as a side note) out on the field I’m sure he needs your help.” Yep that’s right “Field” we live on a farm. I’m some what of a germaphobe so you can imagine what it’s like for me living on a farm. Any ways that’s not the point of this. My mother never explains anything about my father besides his name and the life they used to live together. Long story short after my mom became pregnant with me my biological father Lotuce left my mother. He was never seen again after that. A few years later my mom I guess you could say “remarried” and Married my New Father or Step-Father Jean. He was pretty good at martial arts and wanted me to get into it. I did it for a few years and then all of a sudden stopped. Jean wasn’t very happy about that. I then indulged my self in books and reading becoming fond of all the story’s and adventures I would go on in my head. I am now nearing 17 and switching high schools to Orange Star High School. I won’t be living with my parents as its to far away for them to drive me every day so I will finally be able to get off the farm with no more bugs and no more stinky animals. And surprisingly Jean has convinced me to get back into fighting so maybe I’ll start doing that in my free time. I’m excited to see the possible adventures I will have and new friends I will make! Nothing could possibly go wrong!
    Side notes: Ok so you might have some questions about Lotuce and a few other things which I will clear up in this section as my character doesn’t know a lot about the saiyans or really anything as even his mother knows very little but she stills knows more then Mosan. For one Lotuce is a saiyan that had been outcast from planet vegeta as he was seen as “to soft” to fit into the army therefore surviving the destruction of planet vegeta. later landing on earth and falling in love with my mother. When he found out he had made her pregnant he fled not wanting to take care of this hybrid species he had created and I’m still deciding on his final fate. Even though Mosan had a tail he has never actually transformed into a great ape not even aware of the power the rests within the tail and simply not wanting to get it removed because he is stubborn, paranoid, afraid of possible consequences, and because he thinks it would hurt and finds it to be a wast of time and effort. He also finds it useful for grabbing things at times. Overall I think that’s about it. Thanks for reading and hope you like my post. Sorry if it isn’t very action packed like most posts as I want most of the story building to take place in the roleplay. Along with the fact that I’m trying to get across that my character is more or less an average person besides the fact that his father is part of a very powerful alien race. That’s it and thanks for reading.

    • #31725

      Abry
      Participant

      So I got a couple of questions:-
      What have you been doing these years? Just martial arts, with a side schooling, or absolute scholar? When do you train? How much? How strong are you?(in BP)
      Also, what else do you do? Got any friends? Talkative, shy or irritating?
      Never been in any serious fight? With someone your level?
      Losing fights? To whom? Humans? How? With your heritage, how does that happen?
      That’s all I wanted to know.
      (Sorry if I asked stuff that’s written in the post, but I’m assuming this stuff isn’t…)

    • #31726

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      He is not to strong he is an average battle power of 5,000 (pretty easy to achieve because of his heratige) he doesn’t train to much and only does it for fun after all his schooling things are done. He has fought against a few namekians and they are the only ones able to beat him in a brawl when he gets to cocky. He does not have any friends as that is why he is excited to be going to orange star high school to gain friends and with growing up on a farm how could he have any friends really. He was pretty far away from the cities and no children his age lived around him. Sorry about all that probably should have cleared that up to begin with.

    • #31756

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      While reading yours, I’ve noticed a bit of a contradiction… You state Mosan “lacks the saiyan drive for fighting, but enjoys to fight as a sport”. These two traits are opposites. This is confusing me.
      To the backstory, lets jump right to the one thing that confused me.

      Going to Lotuce, why did he not want to raise the hybrid child? What were his issues with a hybrid saiyan? Do these issues play into Mosan’s personality? Does he have subconscious issues with the idea of a person only being partially human? Elaborate some more on this please.

      Besides those 2 things, I’d say yours is fairly good.

    • #31757

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      What I mean by “lacks saiyan drive to fight” I mean that he doesn’t enjoy fighting to cause actual harm. This is why he does it for a sport as he does enjoy showing off as stated before. Lotuce on the other hand was afraid of the outcome of what could come of a
      Hybrid spieces and it was out of fear he left. He might have also found being half saiyan as insulting the saiyan race as he saw it as “infecting the bloodline.” So it was also out of shame he left that he let himself become in love with a human.

    • #31758

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      Also how this plays into My Characters personality is that he feels somewhat unloved and feels that he might not have been good enough for his father leading to some self-doubt.

    • #31772

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      Still unclear if I have been accepted but my discord is Noobly25000 #2677

    • #31773

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      I really like your application, and your character. I think you have a really interesting story, and I’d like to see you added into the RP. I’m going to ask Zyph about adding you in.

    • #31779

      Zyph
      Participant

      The story, is pretty elaborated. It answered some of my unanswered questions at the end. Though, I would like you to explain elaborate more on Mosan, as a character.

    • #31782

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      So for more character development I’m just going to do a personality addon and not have to make you read basically the same thing just with extra things. Not much to talk about the backstory except that I came up with a final destination for Lotuce. He was eventually caught by Frieza Force and executed. Now onto more of my character and how he acts around people and his personality as a whole.
      Personality addon: Even though he is arrogant and stuck up he is still very much a kind person and would risk his life even for his worst enemy unless it would cost more lives to be lost and this enemy was an actual threat. Although he does value life he will take the life of another if it means sparing countless others although this is always his last resort and wouldn’t even dare think of taking the opponents life unless it came down to a last resort. When first meeting people he is extremely shy not talking a lot and making sure he gets to know them before saying anything that would make him look stupid and is worried about first impressions. Once he gets to know them however his personality completely switches becoming extremely happy comfortable saying nearly anything depending on the person and his relationship with them and being extremely hyper much to their annoyance. He will do almost anything for his friends and even people he doesn’t know excepting nothing in return but to know he did something good. He is although extremely cocky as stated before and has high expectations for himself but when something goes wrong he has extreme self-doubt. He has never been in a real actual fight (although this will change I’m hoping in character eventually). His favorite subjects in school are Science, History, and English as he enjoys learning how things work for Science, he enjoys learning about events that he was not present for in History and enjoys the writing portions of English. Some hobbies of his include martial arts, learning about his real father (although he has gotten almost nowhere with this one) obviously learning and schooling, playing video games, reading books, and reading mangas. All around he tries to live a normal life besides his saiyan strength. (hoping this also changes as I want to get more into the action but leaving that for the actual roleplay and leaving room for more character development.)
      I think that about covers his full personality besides the things I mentioned in the original personality post. Thanks again for reading this.

    • #31786

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      I like it! I’m gonna say that you’re Accepted!

      I need your discord please.

    • #31787

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      Discord is Noobly25000 #2677

  • #31727

    Noobly25000
    Participant

    Changing BP to 1,000

  • #31730

    Ikari Shinji
    Participant

    Name: Ikari, Shinji
    Gender: Male
    Race: Human
    Age: 24
    Personality: Shinji is quiet and contemplative, a reflection of his harsh training to become a master samurai, he generally spends time alone and is generally passive. He is respectful towards others and a complete lone wolf.
    Looks: Wears black and red armour with white linen on the left side and unpainted metal to the left of the chest piece.
    Backstory: A 13-year-old Shinji strolled down the barely lit alleyway he always did to get to and from school. He enjoyed seeing the art people drew on the sides of the buildings. There was a painting of a soldier that always drew his eye, Shinji would wonder what it would be like to be out of the front lines fighting for his country. Shinji slowly made his way down the long alleyway without a care in the world, observing the art closely until someone came up behind him. “Hey kid, what’ye lookin’ at?” The mysterious person asked him. “I was looking at the one of th—“ Shinji was stopped by a boot planted wholesomely in his back. The boot kicked forward and Shinji flew directly forward, his face scraping against the asphalt. “HEY! What was that for?” Shinji barked at him. “Oh, that? That was because I WANTED too!” He replied. The figure malevolently walked up to Shinji and placed his boot on his phase, gradually increasing the downward force. Shinji’s body stressed in pain, and tears ran down his cheek as the man tortured him. “Stop this madness Kitako!” A voice roared out from the edge of the alley. “And why should I do that old man?” Kitako smiled as he replied. At the edge of his vision, Shinji saw a flash fly towards him and blood hit the ground in front of his eyes. Shinji’s eyes shook in shock of what he just saw, his innocence, wiped from him in mere seconds. The old man who appeared to had saved him grabbed his collar and pulled him up with ease. “What brought you here boy?” He spoke in a grouchy tone. “I…I walk this path every day…I…I walk it to get home, I like the art…” Shinji stuttered. The old man dinted his brows and stared at Shinji. “Hmm, you will come with me boy…Don’t argue, just follow!” He ordered. The old man marched to the edge of the alley and signalled for Shinji to follow. Shinji was almost entranced to follow him, he stood up slowly and marched towards the man. Shinji clasped his hand and they both disappeared from thin air.

    “Where am I?” Shinji asked, taken back by how he was instantly moved from his home city to a secluded place hidden away by tall trees atop a secluded peak. “This is Satsuma, an ancient Samurai school for the Bushido ways, here, I will teach you the ways of the Samurai, you will be my successor and you will continue the samurai way, after I am gone.” The man said convincingly to Shinji. Shinji gazed at the man. As young boy would to his own father. “Yes. I will do this, I will continue your legacy.” Shinji said almost in a trance like state.

    11 years later

    “That man was like a father to me…He taught me all I know and more…He fed me, watered me and sheltered me…all…all so I could be the one to inherit his power…his skill.” Shinji thought to himself looking over the recently buried body of his master. “I will continue your legacy master, I will bear this power, and this secret with my life.”

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Ikari Shinji.
    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Ikari Shinji.
    • #31765

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      We need more information on the training he goes through. Also his fighting style, and what this power is.

    • #31767

      Zyph
      Participant

      As, stated by JamesCfer, elaborate more on this power and what kind of training did he go through? What did he do during those 11 years? What is his motive of being a samurai? You need to elaborate more on who your character is.

    • #31792

      Ikari Shinji
      Participant

      Name: Ikari, Shinji
      Gender: Male
      Race: Human
      Age: 24
      Personality: Shinji is bright and bubbly, but for the time being, quiet and contemplative as his master, who was like a father to his just died. He generally spends time alone and is generally passive. He is respectful towards others and a complete lone wolf.
      Looks: Wears black and red armour with white linen on the left side and unpainted metal to the left of the chest piece.
      Backstory: A 13-year-old Shinji strolled down the barely lit alleyway he always did to get to and from school. He enjoyed seeing the art people drew on the sides of the buildings. There was a painting of a soldier that always drew his eye, Shinji would wonder what it would be like to be out of the front lines fighting for his country. Shinji slowly made his way down the long alleyway without a care in the world, observing the art closely until someone came up behind him. “Hey kid, what’ye lookin’ at?” The mysterious person asked him. “I was looking at the one of th—“ Shinji was stopped by a boot planted wholesomely in his back. The boot kicked forward and Shinji flew directly forward, his face scraping against the asphalt. “HEY! What was that for?” Shinji barked at him. “Oh, that? That was because I WANTED too!” He replied. The figure malevolently walked up to Shinji and placed his boot on his phase, gradually increasing the downward force. Shinji’s body stressed in pain, and tears ran down his cheek as the man tortured him. “Stop this madness Kitako!” A voice roared out from the edge of the alley. “And why should I do that old man?” Kitako smiled as he replied. At the edge of his vision, Shinji saw a flash fly towards him and blood hit the ground in front of his eyes. Shinji’s eyes shook in shock of what he just saw, his innocence, wiped from him in mere seconds. The old man who appeared to have saved him grabbed his collar and pulled him up with ease. “What brought you here boy?” He spoke in a grouchy tone. “I…I walk this path every day…I…I walk it to get home, I like the art…” Shinji stuttered. The old man dinted his brows and stared at Shinji. “Hmm, you will come with me boy…Don’t argue, just follow!” He ordered. The old man marched to the edge of the alley and signalled for Shinji to follow. Shinji was almost entranced to follow him, he stood us slow and marched towards the man. Shinji clasped his hand and they both disappeared from thin air.

      “Where am I?” Shinji asked, taken back by how he was instantly moved from his home city to a secluded place hidden away by tall trees atop a secluded peak. “This is Satsuma, an ancient Samurai school for the Bushido ways, here, I will teach you the ways of the Samurai, you will be my successor and you will continue the samurai way, after I am gone.” The man said convincingly to Shinji. Shinji gazed at the man. As young boy would to his own father. “Yes. I will do this, I will continue your legacy.” Shinji said almost in a trance like state. The old man placed his palm on Shinji’s forehead and bleached his mind of his old memories of his family and old life.

      Shinji’s intense training began at the age of 15, his master at first teaching him how to use his Ki. “Shinji, can you feel it? The life force that binds us all together, you and I?” His master spoke to him. “What do you mean? I don’t feel anything other than the usual wind, the blazing sun, that sort of thing. “Reach within yourself Shinji, find your Ki! You must do this to begin your training.” The old man said attempting to encourage Shinji. “rrrrr!” Shinji tensed his muscles in an attempt to unleash his Ki, but it was all for nothing as he ultimately failed. “Shinji! You’re going at it all wrong! First, you must sense it, THEN! You must unleash it. You have a long way to go as my apprentice. You cannot begin your training until you find a way to unlock your Ki. Speak to me again when you have done this, until that day, dinner is at sundown.”
      Long months went by as Shinji tried everything to find his Ki. He sat, for hours at a time, meditating, trying to sense this inner power his master spoke of. Until, one, fateful day. Shinji sat out, among the trees on the mountains peak, on a ledge, overlooking the open fields bellow. Shinji sat, meditating, and then, he felt something within him. At first Shinji wasn’t sure what it was, but then, within moments, he felt it. Shinji jumped up. “AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!” He roared at the top of his lungs, and small amounts of energy began to pulsate from his palms until eventually his whole hands were engulfed in this silver energy. His master heard this and appeared miraculously in front of Shinji. “you have done it Shinji, you have unlocked your Ki! You don’t know how proud I am of you…now, take my hand, and begin your training.”

      They appeared in front of Satsuma, the master having used instant transmission. “Shinji, your first lesson, is too learn how to manipulate your Ki. You must learn to send it to different parts of your body. You don’t have much Ki, some would say this is a disadvantage, but, if you master this technique, it will not be so, it will be an advantage over any foe, no matter how strong.” The master told Shinji. “But, how can it be an advantage, they’re more powerful than me, so therefore they would win…right?” Shinji questioned “Shinji, once you master this technique, these questions and more will be revealed.” His master explained. And so, Shinji trained day and night for three months before he even got to a point that he could hold his key in one spot. “Now, Shinji, let me explain, you can hold your key in one spot…Now you must master the ability to use it to add strength to your blows.” The master explained. “Try punching me.” He commanded. Shinji clenched his fist and punched his master with all his strength. “How’s that!” Shinji asked with a cheeky tone. “Good Shinji, you are strong, but! Try now, punching me with your Ki released in your fist.” The Master suggested. Shinji released all his key and smashed his master. The master was staggered… “HA! See what I’m talking about now?” He asked. “HOLY SHIT!” Shinji was amazed at what strength he truly had. “I…I have that much power? You’ve got to be kidding me! This…this is amazing!”
      “Yes Shinji! YES! I think you are ready to begin your training to become a true samurai. Do you think you are ready?” The Master asked out of pure amazement at how strong Shinji had become. “I…I…YES! I am ready!” Shinji roared back. “We begin tomorrow at dawn, prepare yourself Shinji, this is no easy task…”

      Dawn struck and the Master waited in the courtyard for Shinji. “You’re 10 seconds late Shinji…tomorrow it will be 0 seconds.” The master sternly told him. “Yes Sir.” Shinji replied. The Master, holding a wooden katana in each hand, through the left blade to Shinji. Shinji reached his arm out to catch but it slipped from his grip and landed on the ground. “Tomorrow you will catch it.” The Master told him. “The art of the blade is one of old times, but unlike to popular belief is far from outdated, now, block!” He told him. The Master struck blow for blow, each strike staggering Shinji and breaking his guard. “Eventually, you will use your Ki to strengthen your arms and eventually my strikes will not stagger you or break your guard…understood.” The Master spoke. “Yes Sir.” Shinji replied. The two trained until the end of the day. This training continued until Shinji mastered the art if the Katana. “Good Shinji! Yes! GREAT! You have become an excellent swordsman! And now that you have mastered the art of the Katana, I will teach you how to use your Ki to quicken and strengthen your blows, it’s only taken you three years after all. You are 18 now correct?” The Master questioned. “That’s right master, I am 18, it’s only taken me five years to get this far…Now! Teach me this way to make my attacks faster, I’m eager to learn.” Shinji insisted. “Alright, slow down there kiddo, now. You must focus your Ki in your power arm and use it speed yourself up, making blows faster, and as you are about to hit, put all your Ki into your hands and strengthen the blow by however much you can. Try it on me.” The Master instructed. Shinji did as he said, he focused his Ki on his arms and his strike became almost eight time faster. Their blades clashed in a spark of power. “Holy shit!” Shinji exclaimed. “How can I put all my Ki into my fists and strengthen my strike in that split-second window, it seems almost impossible.” Shinji complained. “Patience is Ki young Shinji…” “….” “That was a bad pun sir.” Shinji cringed. “BUT! It is true, it will take much patience to master this technique, but once you have, your training will almost be complete, and there will be only one more thing for me to teach you, now, can you master this technique?” The Master questioned “You’re on old man!” Shinji extatically replied.
      Each day for two more years there was a clash of blades and an exchange of trash talk and laughter in the courtyards. Shinji doing his best to master this almost impossible technique and the Master making some smart wisdom filled comment after Shinji failed another 1000 times. But there came a day when the Master fell ill. He insisted on continuing to train with Shinji even with his illness, and after another three years of training, there came a point when he could not even walk. Shinji took care of his Master and continued to practice the technique, although for half the time he would have usually. “Shinji…” The Master whimpered. “Come here…” Shinji made his way to his master’s bedside. “Help me up would you.” Shinji place his masters arm around his shoulder and helped his up. “I’ll be alright for now, go fetch my katana.” The Master ordered. Without saying a word, Shinji went and found his masters old Katana and brought it to him. “You have one shot at this Shinji, I only have enough strength left to grant you this one chance, this one chance to prove to me that you are a true Samurai.” His Master speaking in a soft voice told him. “but, Ma-“ Shinji was interrupted. “Do this Shinji, show me, you are a successful apprentice, give a dying man his wish, would you?” The Master spoke and readied his guard. Shinji readied his blade, took a deep breath…he could hear his heart beat as the room fell dead silent. And then…Shinji struck.

      His Master was thrown back, smashing through ten walls and landing on his back in the courtyard. “MASTER!” Shinji screamed and ran to his master, reaching him in less than a second. “Shinji, *cough* you did it, you mastered the technique, and you even used your Ki to run extremely fa*cought* *cough*st…You don’t know how proud I am of you Shinji, now come close, there is something I must tell you before I die.” The Master spoke.

      He told Shinji his secret and Shinji reeled back. He fell to his knees and cried as the only family he ever knew died before his very eyes. Shinji picked up the body of his master and carried it to the peak of the hill. Shinji dug a deep grave and placed his masters body with his Katana in hand in the grave and filled it.
      “That man was like a father to me…He taught me all I know and more…He fed me, watered me and sheltered me…all…all so I could be the one to inherit his power…his skill.” Shinji thought to himself looking over the recently buried body of his master. “I will continue your legacy master, I will bear this power, and this secret with my life.”

      His Power is his Ki and the techniques taught to him by his master

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Ikari Shinji.
  • #31736

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    So will you check my application!? please ;-;

    • #31738

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      give him time he will check it when he gets a chance 2

  • #31739

    Lyme
    Participant

    THIS IS THE SECOND EDITED VERSION OF LYME
    (Sorry just wanted to make sure you could see the difference)

    Name: Lyme

    Gender: Arcosian’s have no gender. (But I will refer to him as he)

    Race: Arcosian

    Age: 23

    Personality: He is a monster who only likes to have power and control, but he has the patience to wait and plan out what his next move is.

    General Appearance: He had an advanced version of the armor frieza and his men, and the saiyans had, it comes with no shoulders. He has a version of the armor that is like pants. The color of his armor is Pink on the pecks and around the belly area, and brown on the belly. His sleeves are brown and is the same as his pant’s. His skin color is red where Frieza’s pink and purple be. And white on the other part of his body. But after it was destroyed he just was naked.

    Backstory: He is in the same clan as Frieza, but he wasn’t given any control of the universe because of his lack of power. He was born into the Frost Demon Clan expected to be one of the strongest of the clan. He was born with a power level of only 4,603. He had a lack of power because he was born an abnormal, and also because he wasn’t close to blood, to Frieza and the others in the clan. Once Frieza had died (at least I believe in this story line he would already be dead) Lyme had went into action by first aggressively taking command of a small part of Frieza’s old army.
    Once word got out about Lyme’s actions, there was a revolution against him, there was a great battle that lasted for days, he had to run away because he was exhausted. He had to steal a basic issue pod, and he had checked all the coordinates and had found a small planet, full of small power levels, called Earth. He had lost his scouter and his armor was broken. Once he had landed people of Earth had come to him, but the second they saw what was in the ship they all freaked out. Lyme was also freaked out because he was a little delusional at the time. (He had to kill so many soldiers.)So he just outright killed all the humans there. His life on the planet wasn’t so hard, he could kill animals with ease, and cook them with his Ki. He has been plotting, to come back into control, to get his revenge on those who had revolted. Right now he is silently training, Getting stronger as the days pass. (I am hoping that in this story line in this server doesn’t make Arcosian training stupid op like in super) So far, he hasn’t come into contact with any particularly strong beings. But he believe’s that on Earth he will find someone who isn’t as weak as dirt. He has been on planet Earth for a few years now, around 4 years to be exact. He has killed many humans who had stumbled upon him, be it children, the elderly, women, he didn’t care. all he wanted was to gain power. One time a group of thugs had wandered into his area, when they found him they told him about how he was a legend, and how they came to him for power. Amused with how he had become a great entity to the world, he had taught the thugs basic ki training. The thugs had thought themselves to be gods thanks to this, but they still listened to Lyme. Lyme after a little while told the thugs to go around and start taking over the world. He had told them to tell him how it went once they completed the task. He was angry to hear that they were very easily defeated by the normal weaponry that humans had. He thought that the humans weapons were a lot less advanced, and that they had less effective tools and such. He had done a little bit of research on the human race and was amused by them. He plans to turn Earth into his own planet, and teach the humans enough about ki and training to where he can start an attack on what was left of Frieza’s army. (which was barely still not disbanded).

    Alignment: (Just thought it should be added) Evil

    Bp: (Again just thought it should be added) before training: 11,402. After training: 23,392 (and still slowly growing)

    Class: Spiritualist

    Note I want my oc to be the starting villain, but be like Vegeta and learn there are more effective ways to deal with stronger beings, and groups.

    • #31741

      Lyme
      Participant

      I meant to put third time edited

    • #31754

      Zyph
      Participant

      Everything looks great, all I need from you is to elaborate why and how did he take over a small part of Frieza’s army. What were/are his motives.

  • #31744

    Zyph
    Participant

    I have glance over the new applications, they will get a response asap.

    • #31749

      StormSlayerSS
      Participant

      Did you already decide on my application, or no because I’ve waited a whole day after you said you’re still deciding.

    • #31751

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      He won’t be on for most of today, so please just bear with him. He’ll respond when he can.

  • #31755

    Lyme
    Participant

    THIS IS (hopefully) THE LAST EDITED VERSION OF LYME
    (Sorry just wanted to make sure you could see the difference)

    Name: Lyme

    Gender: Arcosian’s have no gender. (But I will refer to him as he)

    Race: Arcosian

    Age: 23

    Personality: He is a monster who only likes to have power and control, but he has the patience to wait and plan out what his next move is.

    General Appearance: He had an advanced version of the armor frieza and his men, and the saiyans had, it comes with no shoulders. He has a version of the armor that is like pants. The color of his armor is Pink on the pecks and around the belly area, and brown on the belly. His sleeves are brown and is the same as his pant’s. His skin color is red where Frieza’s pink and purple be. And white on the other part of his body. But after it was destroyed he just was naked.

    Backstory: He is in the same clan as Frieza, but he wasn’t given any control of the universe because of his lack of power. He was born into the Frost Demon Clan expected to be one of the strongest of the clan. He was born with a power level of only 4,603. He had a lack of power because he was born an abnormal, and also because he wasn’t close to blood, to Frieza and the others in the clan. Once Frieza had died (at least I believe in this story line he would already be dead) Lyme had went into action by first aggressively taking command of a small part of Frieza’s old army. The reason for this is because of his passion for control, and power. The way he did it was by fear, he was much stronger then the average soldier but under the power of the soldie’s,r such as Vegeta, Cui and so on. His objective was to gain supreme control of the universe, or atleast a good part of it. Once word got out about Lyme’s actions, there was a revolution against him, there was a great battle that lasted for days, he had to run away because he was exhausted. He had to steal a basic issue pod, and he had checked all the coordinates and had found a small planet, full of small power levels, called Earth. He had lost his scouter and his armor was broken. Once he had landed people of Earth had come to him, but the second they saw what was in the ship they all freaked out. Lyme was also freaked out because he was a little delusional at the time. (He had to kill so many soldiers.)So he just outright killed all the humans there. His life on the planet wasn’t so hard, he could kill animals with ease, and cook them with his Ki. He has been plotting, to come back into control, to get his revenge on those who had revolted. Right now he is silently training, Getting stronger as the days pass. (I am hoping that in this story line in this server doesn’t make Arcosian training stupid op like in super) So far, he hasn’t come into contact with any particularly strong beings. But he believe’s that on Earth he will find someone who isn’t as weak as dirt. He has been on planet Earth for a few years now, around 4 years to be exact. He has killed many humans who had stumbled upon him, be it children, the elderly, women, he didn’t care. all he wanted was to gain power. One time a group of thugs had wandered into his area, when they found him they told him about how he was a legend, and how they came to him for power. Amused with how he had become a great entity to the world, he had taught the thugs basic ki training. The thugs had thought themselves to be gods thanks to this, but they still listened to Lyme. Lyme after a little while told the thugs to go around and start taking over the world. He had told them to tell him how it went once they completed the task. He was angry to hear that they were very easily defeated by the normal weaponry that humans had. He thought that the humans weapons were a lot less advanced, and that they had less effective tools and such. He had done a little bit of research on the human race and was amused by them. He plans to turn Earth into his own planet, and teach the humans enough about ki and training to where he can start an attack on what was left of Frieza’s army. (which was barely still not disbanded).

    Alignment: (Just thought it should be added) Evil

    Bp: (Again just thought it should be added) before training: 11,402. After training: 28,792 (and still slowly growing, I decided to make him a bit stronger because I want him to be the villain of the story) Second Form (Little Control): 48,946 (I decided to add it so he could be stronger as a villain, and I mean second form, aka a tiny bit taller)

    Class: Spiritualist

    Note I want my oc to be the starting villain, but be like Vegeta and learn there are more effective ways to deal with stronger beings, and groups.

    • #31760

      Zyph
      Participant

      Well, it could use some grammar fixes. But I’ll let it slide.

      Accepted

    • #31762

      Lyme
      Participant

      Discord is Idioticdemon105 #3847

  • #31777

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    Name: Bat
    Gender: Male
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 12
    Personality: middle serious-joke-ish (a bit of Batman And Flash maybe :P) And he’s good And proud, but he can sometimes show his evil side (bit of majin Vegeta) and sometimes he likes researching, like scientists.
    General appereance: Arcosian’s body 3 fully Black with White crystals and red eyes
    Backstory: He was born on a planet named Zaburu. His parents left him on this planet alone, so there wasn’t anyone who knew his father nor mother, but there always has been a guy that was caring him, this man’s name was Wint. Wint was like a father for him, because Wint knew how it is, his parents also left him on this planet, so he knew that pain. Wint was always helping Bat, in training, getting food, etc. Bat was training everyday, in morning, midday and in evening, he didn’t ever stop training. Arcosians on this planet always liked to destroy other planets, or just kill people on those. People from this planet were in war with planet Entorn, so they wanted to send to this planet their most skilled arcosian. They thought that Bat is the most skilled one, so they sent him. Bat had just 6 years and he did get a mission to kill everyone on planet Entorn, he was sent to this planet with spaceship that was in military base. But he sadly landed on military base of planet Entron, when people of this planet found him then they froze him, because they knew that there isn’t anyone on their planet to fight with arcosians, and they sent him to a random planet trough his spaceship, and this planet just happened to be earth. He landed on a mountain. When he landed, he was in ice. It was years before it unfroze, Bat left his spaceship, he started to think what’s is this planet, he checked trees, grass, water and sky, after all of that he found out that he’s on planet earth. He also found out that steering pannel of his space ship was broken and he didn’t know how to repair it. So after this little research, he started training, gathering materials, and living a peaceful life on lanet. He travelled a bit and he found perfect terrain to build his house on, so he builded this house and he made a wheat farm. His house was made on plains, near river, so he had his farm next to his house, he also made farm of pigs, cows, sheeps, and he made a secret laboratory under his house, so he can experiment with everything that he will find, to be sure what it is, there wasn’t anything more that he did, just he made a farm of wheat, carrots and he also found potatoes. All of that taken him 6 months. When he had some free time then he was training (his training is mostly pounching and trying to dodge own ki blasts, but sometimes it’s just meditating), and researching more about this planet. But his peaceful life can change! Later on Dragon Block C Series!

    Discord: BatVenomPL#7017

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  BatVenomPL.
    • #31780

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      After reading through your application, I’d like thank you for improving your old one. I’d suggest going through and fixing some grammatical errors.

      I’d like to ask, how did he find out he was on Earth? You just said that he checked “trees, grass, water, and sky”. How did that tell him he was on Earth? Many planets have “trees, grass, water, and sky”.

      How come he built a laboratory under his house? What was the need for it? Why was it specifically there?

      How old was he when he went to Entorn? How long was he in space? Why did they not launch him into the nearest star?

      What made him the most skilled fighter? Why was he the best for his mission?

      What made him, as an arcosian, a very large threat to the people of Entorn? Why would a specialist be needed to handle his kind?

      My most important, and solid question: If nobody there was able to handle him, how did they freeze him? If he was too powerful, or dangerous for him, what did they do to freeze him? What stopped him from breaking free? This is the largest of plot-holes in his backstory. It leaves a feeling of question, on how he even managed to survive.

      If you explain this information, it might improve your chance of acceptance.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  NegativeBoom. Reason: There were more questions I had, after writing the original
    • #31797

      BatVenomPL
      Participant

      1. He knew it by colors
      2. “he made a secret laboratory under his house, so he can experiment with everything that he will find
      3. “Bat had just 6 years and he did get a mission to kill everyone on planet Entorn,”
      4. for couple of days
      5. Ships have auto protection from flying onto a star
      6. “Bat was training everyday, in morning, midday and in evening, he didn’t ever stop training.” unlike other arcosians from this planet
      7. They froze him just when he landed so he couldn’t even leave his spaceship

      If there are grammar errors then tell me where, because I can’t find those

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  BatVenomPL.
    • #31802

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Denied

      Here’s why:

      1. Once again, there are MANY planets with Green, Blue, etc… The colors cannot tell you what planet you’re on. You sound like he dropped a gallon of LSD. Explain where he learned of Earth. There is no special class teaching about that one planet named “Earth”.

      2. Great explanation, no issues there.

      3. It seems you can’t simply write that “He was six years old.”

      4. My issue with this statement is this: E = MC^2
      You’re claiming that he traveled in space for only a couple of days.
      That is faster than the speed of light. He, the Earth, and everything nearby would be gone.

      5. A frozen ship cannot control the direction it is heading. Not to mention, that is WAY too convenient.

      6. While it is better than originally stated, it still makes no sense. Just because you train everyday, doesn’t mean you’re the most skilled. For one, he was only 6 years old. I’ll give Goku the credit on this part. You can’t train at maximum efficiency if you train everyday. You have to take time to rest. This would imply that the other Arcosians would be more skilled.

      7. Still a major plot hole. For one, even if they froze the ship, someone who is apparently too strong to fight can punch through Ice. If he were frozen, he could use his energy to break the Ice. Arcosians are known as “Frost Demons”. How come they froze a “Frost Demon”?

      You’re going to be denied unless you can answer these questions with Reasonable answers.

    • #31804

      BatVenomPL
      Participant

      1. He saw it’s name on the spaceship screen (?)
      4. Ok this can be two years 😛
      and how do you know how far from earth was planet Entron?
      5. They froze only Bat, not entire spaceship
      6. ok he trained 5/7 days in a week
      Also he was risking his body to make it more resistant
      Arcosians from planet Zaburu were making tournaments to check who’s the most skilled and it was always Bat
      7. They froze him with special freezing beam, not only from cannons and guns, but also from ki, and this ice was ki powered from everyone who was in this base (you remember all spirit bombs? so something simmilar)

      P.S. Please let me in, I’m the one who made the most applications!

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  BatVenomPL.
    • #31810

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      1. You stated the control panel was broken, and usually, at least in any space ship I’ve heard of, the control panel is where you can find the name.

      4. Planet Entorn cannot be within the Sol system. Even at the speed of a Saiyan pod, traveling from an inhabited planet to Earth in a couple of days is impossible. That is how I know.

      5. Once again, this too convenient for Bat to have a “no flying into stars function” built in, and if it did, why did they not disable it?

      6. Why would they have tournaments? They have scouters? And making his body more resistant is fine, but once again, you’re just making this up as you go, without thought.

      7. Ki powered freezing beams?.. Now we all know you’re pulling this out your ass. Ki is a form of energy. Ki is generally known as a VERY hot energy. This is literally impossible.

      P.S. The most responses doesn’t mean the best. Your responses lack quality, and break lore quite intensely. We will let you in, if you can fix these problems.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  NegativeBoom.
    • #31827

      BatVenomPL
      Participant

      1. Controlling part was destroyed, not the screen!
      5. Because they didn’t see a ship like this before so they couldn’t disable it 😛
      6. Ok he can train 1/2 a day in 4 days in a week
      And remember: scouter means NOTHING in dragon ball world, so they needed tournaments to know which one is the best, and again REMEMBER: power levels mean NOTHING
      7. Eis Shenron? 😛 (I know that GT is uncannon… but with GT we’ll have ssj4 in the mod so…)

    • #31833

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      1. Better than nothing I supposed, but still a horrible answer.

      5. WAY too convenient for him, once again. There is only a 1% chance that they have never seen this type of ship before. Let’s take this: Goku, he’s not very intelligent outside of battle. He’s managed to work an alien ship on his own without any instruction. So claiming that these people aren’t capable of figuring out how to work his ship is essentially your Doctorate in pulling shit out of your ass.

      6. You literally changed the time he trained, all because I said you were pulling it out of your ass. And now you’ve pulled more.
      A side note: Power Levels have a MAJOR meaning in the early parts of Dragon Ball Z. Especially the start. While we do know that people can hide their power, it all gives us some knowledge of a general power. For example, Vegeta, upon scanning the Earthlings, recognized they were hiding their power. So he had Nappa plant Saibamen. Why? To draw the Earthlings full powers. These tournaments sound like an excuse to say he was an incredible fighter, when the truth is, it’s just more ass pulling.

      7. Using a Character’s name is not going to answer a question. For one, Eis Shenron’s power wasn’t natural Ki. It was corrupt energy from the Dragon Balls. Then we go onto the fact that it’s GT. He was one of the WORST parts of GT. In fact, there are only two things good from GT. SSJ4, the best part, and ACTUAL use for almost EVERY character. To even try to use “We’re getting SSJ4 from GT” as a way to validate this response shows that you’re incapable of answering questions about your character, and their story. To even further this, you’re suggesting that Eis Shenron should be a valid answer to the statement of “Ki powered FREEZE RAYS” is impossible. Eis Shenron practically used magic. Ki is an energy, revolving around it’s real world name of Chi. To claim that MAGIC from GT is an answer is an insult to anyone who understands Dragon Ball, Dragon Ball Z, and any other canon material (not including Super, as it has many issues, similar to GT, but on a lessened scale). Come back when you can write an actual story, with original ideas, and are able to answer questions without practically insulting us by suggesting that “Because GT is giving us SSJ4” that we should consider “Eis Shenron” as an answer.

      You are DENIED.

  • #31794

    Ikari Shinji
    Participant

    Name: Ikari, Shinji
    Gender: Male
    Race: Human
    Age: 24
    Personality: Shinji is bright and friendly, but for the time being, is quiet and contemplative and spends all of his time alone as he is grieving the death of his master who was the closest thing to family he ever had after his mind was bleached.

    Looks: Wears black and red armour with white linen on the left side and unpainted metal to the left of the chest piece.

    Backstory: A 13-year-old Shinji strolled down the barely lit alleyway he always did to get to and from school. He enjoyed seeing the art people drew on the sides of the buildings. There was a painting of a soldier that always drew his eye, Shinji would wonder what it would be like to be out of the front lines fighting for his country. Shinji slowly made his way down the long alleyway without a care in the world, observing the art closely until someone came up behind him. “Hey kid, what’ye lookin’ at?” The mysterious person asked him. “I was looking at the one of th—“ Shinji was stopped by a boot planted wholesomely in his back. The boot kicked forward and Shinji flew directly forward, his face scraping against the asphalt. “HEY! What was that for?” Shinji barked at him. “Oh, that? That was because I WANTED too!” He replied. The figure malevolently walked up to Shinji and placed his boot on his phase, gradually increasing the downward force. Shinji’s body stressed in pain, and tears ran down his cheek as the man tortured him. “Stop this madness Kitako!” A voice roared out from the edge of the alley. “And why should I do that old man?” Kitako smiled as he replied. At the edge of his vision, Shinji saw a flash fly towards him and blood hit the ground in front of his eyes. Shinji’s eyes shook in shock of what he just saw, his innocence, wiped from him in mere seconds. The old man who appeared to have saved him grabbed his collar and pulled him up with ease. “What brought you here boy?” He spoke in a grouchy tone. “I…I walk this path every day…I…I walk it to get home, I like the art…” Shinji stuttered. The old man dinted his brows and stared at Shinji. “Hmm, you will come with me boy…Don’t argue, just follow!” He ordered. The old man marched to the edge of the alley and signalled for Shinji to follow. Shinji was almost entranced to follow him, he stood us slow and marched towards the man. Shinji clasped his hand and they both disappeared from thin air.

    “Where am I?” Shinji asked, taken back by how he was instantly moved from his home city to a secluded place hidden away by tall trees atop a secluded peak. “This is Satsuma, an ancient Samurai school for the Bushido ways, here, I will teach you the ways of the Samurai, you will be my successor and you will continue the samurai way, after I am gone.” The man said convincingly to Shinji. Shinji gazed at the man. As young boy would to his own father. “Yes. I will do this, I will continue your legacy.” Shinji said almost in a trance like state. The old man placed his palm on Shinji’s forehead and bleached his mind of his old memories of his family and old life.

    Shinji’s intense training began at the age of 15, his master at first teaching him how to use his Ki. “Shinji, can you feel it? The life force that binds us all together, you and I?” His master spoke to him. “What do you mean? I don’t feel anything other than the usual wind, the blazing sun, that sort of thing. “Reach within yourself Shinji, find your Ki! You must do this to begin your training.” The old man said attempting to encourage Shinji. “rrrrr!” Shinji tensed his muscles in an attempt to unleash his Ki, but it was all for nothing as he ultimately failed. “Shinji! You’re going at it all wrong! First, you must sense it, THEN! You must unleash it. You have a long way to go as my apprentice. You cannot begin your training until you find a way to unlock your Ki. Speak to me again when you have done this, until that day, dinner is at sundown.”
    Long months went by as Shinji tried everything to find his Ki. He sat, for hours at a time, meditating, trying to sense this inner power his master spoke of. Until, one, fateful day. Shinji sat out, among the trees on the mountains peak, on a ledge, overlooking the open fields bellow. Shinji sat, meditating, and then, he felt something within him. At first Shinji wasn’t sure what it was, but then, within moments, he felt it. Shinji jumped up. “AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!” He roared at the top of his lungs, and small amounts of energy began to pulsate from his palms until eventually his whole hands were engulfed in this silver energy. His master heard this and appeared miraculously in front of Shinji. “you have done it Shinji, you have unlocked your Ki! You don’t know how proud I am of you…now, take my hand, and begin your training.”

    They appeared in front of Satsuma, the master having used instant transmission. “Shinji, your first lesson, is too learn how to manipulate your Ki. You must learn to send it to different parts of your body. You don’t have much Ki, some would say this is a disadvantage, but, if you master this technique, it will not be so, it will be an advantage over any foe, no matter how strong.” The master told Shinji. “But, how can it be an advantage, they’re more powerful than me, so therefore they would win…right?” Shinji questioned “Shinji, once you master this technique, these questions and more will be revealed.” His master explained. And so, Shinji trained day and night for three months before he even got to a point that he could hold his key in one spot. “Now, Shinji, let me explain, you can hold your key in one spot…Now you must master the ability to use it to add strength to your blows.” The master explained. “Try punching me.” He commanded. Shinji clenched his fist and punched his master with all his strength. “How’s that!” Shinji asked with a cheeky tone. “Good Shinji, you are strong, but! Try now, punching me with your Ki released in your fist.” The Master suggested. Shinji released all his key and smashed his master. The master was staggered… “HA! See what I’m talking about now?” He asked. “HOLY SHIT!” Shinji was amazed at what strength he truly had. “I…I have that much power? You’ve got to be kidding me! This…this is amazing!”
    “Yes Shinji! YES! I think you are ready to begin your training to become a true samurai. Do you think you are ready?” The Master asked out of pure amazement at how strong Shinji had become. “I…I…YES! I am ready!” Shinji roared back. “We begin tomorrow at dawn, prepare yourself Shinji, this is no easy task…”

    Dawn struck and the Master waited in the courtyard for Shinji. “You’re 10 seconds late Shinji…tomorrow it will be 0 seconds.” The master sternly told him. “Yes Sir.” Shinji replied. The Master, holding a wooden katana in each hand, through the left blade to Shinji. Shinji reached his arm out to catch but it slipped from his grip and landed on the ground. “Tomorrow you will catch it.” The Master told him. “The art of the blade is one of old times, but unlike to popular belief is far from outdated, now, block!” He told him. The Master struck blow for blow, each strike staggering Shinji and breaking his guard. “Eventually, you will use your Ki to strengthen your arms and eventually my strikes will not stagger you or break your guard…understood.” The Master spoke. “Yes Sir.” Shinji replied. The two trained until the end of the day. This training continued until Shinji mastered the art if the Katana. “Good Shinji! Yes! GREAT! You have become an excellent swordsman! And now that you have mastered the art of the Katana, I will teach you how to use your Ki to quicken and strengthen your blows, it’s only taken you three years after all. You are 18 now correct?” The Master questioned. “That’s right master, I am 18, it’s only taken me five years to get this far…Now! Teach me this way to make my attacks faster, I’m eager to learn.” Shinji insisted. “Alright, slow down there kiddo, now. You must focus your Ki in your power arm and use it speed yourself up, making blows faster, and as you are about to hit, put all your Ki into your hands and strengthen the blow by however much you can. Try it on me.” The Master instructed. Shinji did as he said, he focused his Ki on his arms and his strike became almost eight time faster. Their blades clashed in a spark of power. “Holy shit!” Shinji exclaimed. “How can I put all my Ki into my fists and strengthen my strike in that split-second window, it seems almost impossible.” Shinji complained. “Patience is Ki young Shinji…” “….” “That was a bad pun sir.” Shinji cringed. “BUT! It is true, it will take much patience to master this technique, but once you have, your training will almost be complete, and there will be only one more thing for me to teach you, now, can you master this technique?” The Master questioned “You’re on old man!” Shinji extatically replied.
    Each day for two more years there was a clash of blades and an exchange of trash talk and laughter in the courtyards. Shinji doing his best to master this almost impossible technique and the Master making some smart wisdom filled comment after Shinji failed another 1000 times. But there came a day when the Master fell ill. He insisted on continuing to train with Shinji even with his illness, and after another three years of training, there came a point when he could not even walk. Shinji took care of his Master and continued to practice the technique, although for half the time he would have usually. “Shinji…” The Master whimpered. “Come here…” Shinji made his way to his master’s bedside. “Help me up would you.” Shinji place his masters arm around his shoulder and helped his up. “I’ll be alright for now, go fetch my katana.” The Master ordered. Without saying a word, Shinji went and found his masters old Katana and brought it to him. “You have one shot at this Shinji, I only have enough strength left to grant you this one chance, this one chance to prove to me that you are a true Samurai.” His Master speaking in a soft voice told him. “but, Ma-“ Shinji was interrupted. “Do this Shinji, show me, you are a successful apprentice, give a dying man his wish, would you?” The Master spoke and readied his guard. Shinji readied his blade, took a deep breath…he could hear his heart beat as the room fell dead silent. And then…Shinji struck.

    His Master was thrown back, smashing through ten walls and landing on his back in the courtyard. “MASTER!” Shinji screamed and ran to his master, reaching him in less than a second. “Shinji, *cough* you did it, you mastered the technique, and you even used your Ki to run extremely fa*cought* *cough*st…You don’t know how proud I am of you Shinji, now come close, there is something I must tell you before I die.” The Master spoke.

    He told Shinji his secret and Shinji reeled back. He fell to his knees and cried as the only family he ever knew died before his very eyes. Shinji picked up the body of his master and carried it to the peak of the hill. Shinji dug a deep grave and placed his masters body with his Katana in hand in the grave and filled it.
    “That man was like a father to me…He taught me all I know and more…He fed me, watered me and sheltered me…all…all so I could be the one to inherit his power…his skill.” Shinji thought to himself looking over the recently buried body of his master. “I will continue your legacy master, I will bear this power, and this secret with my life.”

    His power is his Ki and the techniques taught to him by his master.

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  Ikari Shinji.
    • #31796

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      This is really good. 9/10 i can’t really see an issue with it.

    • #31801

      JamesCfer
      Participant

      ACCEPTED!

  • #31813

    DaikoGdo
    Participant

    Name: Lisonja
    Gender: Female
    Race: Majin
    Age: 20
    Personality: Sweet and innocent, always trying to cheer the ones around her. Even if she dislikes someone she’ll always try to see the good in them and, if possible, attempt to befriend them.
    General Appearance: Light green “skin”(if that’s what majins have), a short antenna on the back of her head and short curls on the front.(the skin ill be using and a picture of it in game)

    Backstory: Long ago, back when Buu had just been awakened again, a magician named Kibefeus, who was the same race as bibid and babidi, admired his strength and the chaos he caused. He wanted to have a creature similar to Buu in power and personality that he could control so that he would be the one to cause destruction and finally gain control over the galaxy.

    So he spent decades trying to create majins in his lab/home. After thousands of failures and misshapen things, just as he was nearing the end of his lifespan he made one last creature, everything was going well, he would finally have a strong majin for him and him only.

    However, what came out was Losinja, at first he thought to himself ” this doesn’t look or act like Buu, but maybe it has similar power to him”. With that, he ran multiple tests and challenges to see just how strong Losinja was and… she was weak. Very weak. Disappointed but having run out of the resources needed to try again, Kibefeus used her as a simple servant instead of a havoc generating-monster, that is until he was about to die. Having grown attached to her, he decided that the best course of action would be to send her somewhere so she could live her own life as a free being.

    And that’s what he did, with his last remaining strength, he sent her to the nearest peaceful planet in a cocoon, so that she could arrive safely. While inside the cocoon, she would be unconscious, almost as if she was in a deep sleep.

    Losinja eventually arrived on Earth and explored the planet, befriending many creatures and animals. That isn’t to say that she didn’t miss her old master, but she understood his motive for sending her there. She built a house similar to Buu’s house( she didn’t use any real living beings unlike buu) and now lives there.

    Peace doesn’t last forever sadly, and upon a having a group of bandits try to kill her to steal her belongings, Losinja soon realized that if she didn’t grow stronger, she would perish sooner or later. Thus began her journey towards learning Martial Arts from watching old tapes that she found in a garbage dump( in this instance, she learned martial arts just like buu learned Goku’s Kamehameha just from watching him). Some time later, after seeing what some would do to appease their own wishes, Losinja decided that the world needed someone to help spread good across the land. So began her journey to become strong enough to defend earth.

    • #31814

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Thank you for applying!

      We’ve been waiting for someone else to apply for Majin for a while.

      Your backstory is VERY original! That’s a major plus, I just have some questions about your character. These questions will help us determine if you’re accepted or not.

      My first question has to do with Kibefeus.

      In your backstory he seems to do a complete 180 in his personality. What caused him to go from wanting to be a universal havoc wreaking wizard, to kind and caring to the creature that was such a disappointment to him?

      My second question is about why he sent her to Earth.

      You say he sent her to the NEAREST peaceful planet. If you would elaborate on where he was relative to the Earth, since I can’t say it’s impossible for Earth to be the most peaceful planet nearby, I also would like to see some verification.

      *I’m very happy to see a peaceful Majin, who only wants to protect.
      *Curious about her name, no issue with it, just curious.
      *Where does she live? If she managed to find tapes in a garbage dump, she must be near a city or town.
      *The bandits try to kill her, how weak is she, this implies that she is at a power level of less than at least 200.
      *How did she get out of her cocoon? As we’ve seen, it requires a certain amount of energy, depending on the beings power. Or you can rupture it from the outside.

    • #31816

      DaikoGdo
      Participant

      Thanks for the quick response!
      To elaborate:
      1. After making so many failures and aging, one would just get tired after a while, plus, he was getting old, too old for his own good, those tendencies slowly faded away experiment after experiment and he was getting weaker and weaker.
      2. We are never truly told where babidis/bibidis homeworld is, but because babidi had an underground base with many floors in it, I just kinda assumed that his home wouldn’t be too far, I guess I should’ve elaborated on that sooner, just felt like out of all nearby planets Earth would have a lesser chance of killing Lisonja.
      *Lisonja is a Portuguese word that can mean sugar.
      *I meant to elaborate on where she lived, guess I forgot, but it is near a village, similar to the one Oolong was terrorizing.
      *I didn’t mean that the bandits were a threat to her, just that they tried to hurt her, but her power is at most somewhere above Raditz, below Nappa. If that’s too weak, I will gladly change it.
      *Once again, I should’ve used a different term, however, I suppose it could’ve been ruptured from the impact(think of a Saiyan pod crashing) while Kibefeus’ magic prevented any wounds.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 3 weeks ago by  DaikoGdo. Reason: spelling
    • #31818

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Thank you for answering the questions.
      These answers are completely believable, as far as I’m concerned. With the second question, you made a valid point.

      Interesting name basis.

      All your other answers are also really good, and thought out answers, it seems.
      Accepted

      I just need your discord.

    • #31819

      DaikoGdo
      Participant

      Thank you, the discord is Coxinha#0315.I look forward to the day when the server launches!

  • #31821

    Shiny
    Participant

    Hello! I’d like to start off saying that this is my first time doing something like this, but I’d like to use this opportunity to better my storymaking skills and have fun at the same time.

    Name: Shin
    Race: Half-saiyan
    Age: 11

    Personality: Acts polite, but not too friendly. Shin is the opposite of naïve, and not very trusting of others, but if you manage to befriend him, he would easily entrust his life to you.

    General Appearance: Black hair, wears a brown jacket with a dark green undershirt. On his left wrist, he has a special dark green wrist guard, like what Goku wears sometimes. The wrist guard has a metal lever with a mechanism that, when pulled, releases a large explosion of ki that is slowly siphoned from Shin to act as a last resort.

    Backstory: Shin’s father was an alcoholic deadbeat saiyan who always had other women with him. Shin’s mother loved him very much, but Shin’s dad was the opposite. He regularly abused Shin. Shin’s father initially arrived on Earth because he had heard from scouts that the planet had people that looked like saiyans, but were much weaker. He would proceed to take advantage of his own strength to have his way with anyone and everyone. One day, Shin grew tired of his life and left. In the dead of night, Shin, age 7, ran and ran and didn’t stop. By the time he had stopped running, hours had passed, and he had no idea where he was. He decided that he would get stronger, as the only thing he had ever learned from the countless abuse sessions was that strength was everything. He raised himself in the woods, fending for himself, and stealing from nearby villages and landfills when necessary. He was never officially trained in martial arts, but instead learned in a way similar to Gohan when he was four.

    So, I’m sure there will be questions for me to answer. I will respond to them as soon as I can. I hope I’ll be accepted, or able to change anything needed to be accepted.
    Discord: shinyrayquaza1 #3253

    EDIT: Shin yearns for the day he can finally meet his father again, and give him the beating of a lifetime. He also regrets running away and leaving his mother behind, but knows that the only thing that kept his mother with his father was himself, and since he was gone he believed his mother would leave as well.

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Shiny.
  • #31824

    NegativeBoom
    Participant

    To start off, your name, while it is a nice name, is taken by an actual character in Z. Specifically the Supreme Kai. His name is actually Shin. With that out of the way, let’s get to your general appearance.

    Specifically the wrist guard. Where did he get it? How was it made?

    Now, Shin’s father.
    Saiyans work for the Freeza Force. How did his father manage to get away from the Freeza force, and pretty much hide on Earth? How come nobody came looking for him, in the 7 years that he had been alive, before running away?

    You say he learned, similar to how Gohan learned, would you mean by learning to live off the land without help? Or do you mean how Gohan learned to fight, which was through 6 months of intense training with Piccolo.

    I’d also like to ask you to look at other applications that were accepted.
    Specifically Half-Saiyan. I’m not saying you can’t be a Half-Saiyan, but we do have three already. We’re trying to push for an influx of other races, specifically maybe more Namekians.

    This does not mean that you won’t be accepted with your current character, just that there is a chance we won’t accept due to the number of Saiyans and Half-Saiyans we currently have.

  • #31826

    Shiny
    Participant

    Alright, I knew that I was forgetting quite a bit there.

    First off, frick I forgot about Shin. How about… Tupin! (Pun of turnip, btw)

    Now, as for the wrist guard, Tupin stole it from a nearby village’s supplies, probably belonging in a militia of sorts. If this idea won’t work, I am content with dropping the idea as a whole.

    Now, as for the father, he was a failure of a warrior, as he refused to cooperate. He was left to die on a planet full of smugglers, gang wars, and crime. He eventually managed to buy a ship from a dealer, however the dealer was shady, and sure enough the ship crash landed on Earth after the ship shot off course in space. From there, I’ve already posted what in my original post.

    When I said similar to Gohan, I meant he learned to live off the land without help.

    I hope this is good enough, and if not I am certainly willing to change it!

    • #31835

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Hello again! Thanks for answering the questions, and I really appreciate it that you’ve thought out your responses.

      There is one issue, but this is more of just overall.

      We’ve decided that your application doesn’t have quite the quality, or content that we’d like to see for a half-saiyan. I hope to see you apply for a different race, but if you don’t that’s okay.

      (Just so that people who are lazy don’t question too much.) Denied

  • #31834

    Raiton
    Participant

    Name: Crimson

    Age: 16

    Race: Half-Saiyan

    Alignment: Good but can participate in rage blinded revenge.

    Personality: Caring, Funny, Determined. Loves meeting new people and enjoys having a nice group of friend to work, train and ultimately relax together, Crimson is very calm person when it comes down to it and his level headedness for the most part also has the potential to make him an effective leader. Loves to train but doesn’t always feel the need to put his training to the test.

    Appearance: Short, Spiky White Hair. A slender muscular build standing around 6’1. GI, a basic martial artist black top and white pants with a red belt, red wrist weights and red boots given made for him by his mother when he turned 16. He has crimson red eyes which is where he got his name.

    Backstory: (Since I’m not sure if we follow the original DBZ storyline or making our own I am applying this to a new custom scenario. I can edit it to fit the DBZ lore if necessary. But I am trying to interfere with original DBZ lore as little as possible.)

    Crimson is the son of Raiton, a Saiyan who came to Earth before Crimson’s birth. Raiton who was on the planet on “business” was sidetracked when he met Crimson’s mother Kana. The two fell in love instantly when Raiton noticed that Kana herself was a martial artist and she convinced Raiton to not fulfill his mission that was in short to terminate the planet. The couple lived in a secluded mountainside near Southwest Forest where Kana proceeded to humanize Raiton, in time the two had a son named Crimson.

    But as time wore on Raiton grew irritated with what his life had become, on Planet Vegeta he was a commander, well renowned and of respectable stature and with his scouter had been able to keep track of what Saiyans back home had been accomplishing. This made Raiton angry that he was now stuck on Earth with a wife whom he was losing love for and a child who did not have that Saiyan instinct and drive to fight which disgusted Raiton. This all came to fruition when Crimson was seven years old and Raiton had pushed him to near death in training and Kana intervened calling Raiton “insane” for pushing such a young child that was his own son so far at such a young age. Raiton, after another argument later abandoned his family saying that “he’d be back.”

    When he was fourteen he entered his first Tenkaichi Budokai Tournament (Since it’s an alt. story I don’t know which number tournament) and won. His mom who was now in her late forties had retired from fighting and was content with watching her son grow as a fighter, she helped him grow and become a more spiritual fighter and unlocking his ki. He had a (Crimson *wink wink*) Red Aura which he would spend the next year harnessing.

    A year after the World Tournament, Crimson’s mother made for him the gi that he wears now as a birthday present. Raiton arrived back on Earth a few weeks later, early on evening to try and convince Kana to let Raiton come with him in order to learn the “true ways of the Saiyan” as he frequently put it through their discussion and Kana refused. The argument turned violent when Crimson ran outside to defend his mother. Raiton shot Kana with a ki blast killing her. This caused Crimson to erupt into a fit of rage and turn into a False Super Saiyan and lay down a Grade A smackdown on Raiton and in a ki struggle ended up killing his father. Although the strain that the False Super Saiyan gave on his body left him unconscious when he woke up he packed his valuables and left his home in order to find the balance between human kindness and Saiyan strength so that no one close to him would ever be hurt again.

    Hope this was good enough I’ve been waiting for a DBC RP Server for the longest time.
    Discord: Crimson #2312

    • #31853

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      I’m apologizing in advance for making you wait a while for an answer, but we’re currently trying to get other races, that aren’t Saiyan or Half-Saiyan. I’m sorry for making you wait, simply to be denied

  • #31837

    BatVenomPL
    Participant

    Name: Bat
    Gender: Male
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 12
    Personality: middle serious-joke-ish (a bit of Batman And Flash maybe :P) And he’s good And proud, but he can sometimes show his evil side (bit of majin Vegeta) and sometimes he likes researching, like scientists.
    General appereance: Arcosian’s body 3 fully Black with White crystals and red eyes
    Backstory: He was born on a planet named Zaburu. His parents left him on this planet alone, so there wasn’t anyone who knew his father nor mother, but there always has been a guy that was caring him, this man’s name was Wint. Wint was like a father for him, because Wint knew how it is, his parents also left him on this planet, so he knew that pain. Wint was always helping Bat, in training, getting food, etc. Bat was training half a day and four days in a week. Arcosians on this planet always liked to destroy other planets, or just kill people on those. People from this planet were in war with planet Entorn, so they wanted to send to this planet their most skilled arcosian. Their scouters tracked for strongest Power Level and it seemed to be Bat, so they sent him. Bat was six years old and he got a mission to kill everyone on planet Entorn, he was sent to this planet with spaceship that was in military base. But he sadly landed on military base of planet Entron, when people of this planet found him, so then they used fast their own Dragon Balls to froze him, because they knew that there isn’t anyone on their planet to fight with arcosians, and they sent him to a random planet trough his spaceship, because his spaceship had an built in star protection made just to don’t land on a star. Bat was flying for two years, then he landed on earth earth. He landed on a mountain. When he landed, he was in ice. It was one year before it unfroze, Bat left his spaceship, he started to thinking what is this planet, so he checked the screen to see what planet is he on, after all of that he found out that he’s on planet earth. He also found out that steering pannel of his space ship was broken and he didn’t know how to repair it. So after this little research, he started training, gathering materials, and living a peaceful life on lanet. He travelled a bit and he found perfect terrain to build his house on, so he builded this house and he made a wheat farm. His house was made on plains, near river, so he had his farm next to his house, he also made farm of pigs, cows, sheeps, and he made a secret laboratory under his house, so he can experiment with everything that he will find, to be sure what it is, there wasn’t anything more that he did, just he made a farm of wheat, carrots and he also found potatoes. All of that taken him 6 months. When he had some free time then he was training (his training is mostly pounching and trying to dodge own ki blasts, but sometimes it’s just meditating), and researching more about this planet.

    Discord: BatVenomPL#7017

    • #31840

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      I do recall telling you “Come back when you can write an actual story” last time.

      You’ve gone from your story being 0.5/5 stars to being 0.01/5 stars.

      What species lives on Planet Entorn?

      Once again, you’ve brought back the convenient “No Flying Into Stars” function.

      Also, please put your application through a grammar check.
      Don’t check it yourself, have a website do it for you. I cannot begin to tell you how horribly this was written.

      At this point, there is about a 99.99% chance you will be denied without chance to be considered again. If you do not create an application that is satisfactory to even be considered, let alone be accepted, then why even apply?

      If I read your next application, and find it to be at the same level as this, your previous applications, or worse than this you will be automatically declined for the rest of forever. This is my only warning to you, I have tried, and tried again to get a decent application out of you.

  • #31842

    Shiny
    Participant

    Alright! So, I’m not even gonna bother pushing with my old character, because that would probably be a waste of time! Here goes!

    Name: Kori
    Gender: Male
    Race: Frieza’s Race
    Age: 21
    Personality: Somewhat harsh and not afraid to get violent, but is trusting of friends. Kori is cunning, and will try to get himself out of bad situations where he knows he can’t win with violence, however if it comes down to it, he will always be ready to fight. Generally much nicer than most of his race, but that isn’t saying much.
    General Appearance: Skin tone similar to Frieza’s, but with an orange complimentary color rather than purple.

    Backstory: Kori was born to Emperor Toketsu of the South Galaxy. He ruled with an iron fist, and Kori grew up with a lavish lifestyle, where he was sheltered and told that none compared to him and his father. However, the empire commanded by Toketsu was filled with hunger, strife, poverty, and suffering. Kori didn’t know of the suffering outside of his sheltered life until one fateful day. Kori was 10 at the time. A group of rebels had become so massive that they started to believe they had a chance against Toketsu in a fight. They broke into Toketsu’s luxury home on the Capitol planet Groden. Kori was in a nearby room, and saw every single rebel killed at the hands of Toketsu. Because of the attack, Kori caught a glimpse of the outside world. Kori was shocked at the state of the city around him, as he had grown up within the walls of Toketsu’s luxury mansion. Toketsu did his best to make Kori forget about what he saw, but when Kori turned 14, he decided to leave. He was already at the age of rebellion, 14, and he was living a mentally troubling life in the mansion. He had had enough, and knocked out all of the guards at the front gate of the mansion. When he broke outside, he saw that the state of the city had worsened. Filled with mixed emotions that he couldn’t figure out, Kori ran. He flew off, beyond the atmosphere of Groden. By the time Toketsu had discovered that Kori was missing, it was too late. Kori flew through space, being able to survive as an arcosian. Eventually, he encountered a black hole. It was a weak, small black hole, but it was still a black hole. Unable to escape the pull of the black hole, Kori was pulled in. It then transported to the opposite side of the universe, the North Galaxy. He just so happened to be near Earth, and saw that it looked like it had life on it. Perplexed as to how he was in a completely different place from where he was mere moments ago, he decided he would settle down on Earth for the time being. The time being ended up being seven years. Kori met a small village in the deep woods. He somewhat assimilated into the village, making a few friends and getting an education, but he never truly become one of the villagers before disaster struck. The village was raided by bandits while Kori was off in the woods, gathering food for himself. When he came back, it was too late. The bandits had killed everyone and set fire to the village. In a fit of rage, he murdered the bandits not just in self-defense, but in cold blood. He was 17 at the time. From that day onward, Kori decided not to make friends so easily. He lived in the woods off of the land for the next four years, until… (This is the part where I pray that this is good enough to get me accepted, even if I have to change it a bit. If so, then this is where the backstory ends and the story begins)

    Well, I hope this is good enough! If not, I am happy to edit it!
    Discord: shinyrayquaza1 #3253

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Shiny.
    • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Shiny.
    • #31847

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      After some short discussion, we do have some questions regarding the Black Hole.

      That being… How did it send Kori to the Northern Galaxy? While I do understand that dragon ball does pull our leg sometimes with this sort of thing, a black hole would literally rip Kori apart. The gravity of a Black Hole is so intense, not even light can escape it. If anything, you might want to change this plot point, to a more.. believable event.

  • #31845

    Shiny
    Participant

    Oh by the way, when will the server/RP start? No I’m not impatient, I haven’t been accepted atm, I’m wondering how much time I have to come up with a good character/story before the RP starts, Thanks!

    • #31848

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      The start is still TBD. We are currently setting up for the first arc of our story, and I don’t know how long it’ll be till we finish. At least a few days I would say.

  • #31849

    Shiny
    Participant

    Alright, so the black hole was pretty unbelievable tbh, the whole transport thing is going off of a theory that many people have regarding black holes, which is that they act as worm holes. I’ll try to think of something better. Thanks for the feedback!

  • #31850

    Shiny
    Participant

    Backstory: Kori was born to Emperor Toketsu of the East Galaxy. He ruled with an iron fist, and Kori grew up with a lavish lifestyle, where he was sheltered and told that none compared to him and his father. However, the empire commanded by Toketsu was filled with hunger, strife, poverty, and suffering. Kori didn’t know of the suffering outside of his sheltered life until one fateful day. Kori was 10 at the time. A group of rebels had become so massive that they started to believe they had a chance against Toketsu in a fight. They broke into Toketsu’s luxury home on the Capitol planet Groden. Kori was in a nearby room, and saw every single rebel killed at the hands of Toketsu. Because of the attack, Kori caught a glimpse of the outside world. Kori was shocked at the state of the city around him, as he had grown up within the walls of Toketsu’s luxury mansion. Toketsu did his best to make Kori forget about what he saw, but when Kori turned 14, he decided to leave. He was already at the age of rebellion, 14, and he was living a mentally troubling life in the mansion. He had had enough, and knocked out all of the guards at the front gate of the mansion. When he broke outside, he saw that the state of the city had worsened. Filled with mixed emotions that he couldn’t figure out, Kori ran. He flew off, beyond the atmosphere of Groden. By the time Toketsu had discovered that Kori was missing, it was too late. Kori flew through space, being able to survive as an arcosian. He eventually realized that he needed a ship, or else he wouldn’t get very far. He landed on desert planet and searched around until he eventually came across a group of people who were about to leave the empire once and for all. Kori knew that he would be recognized if he just strolled up to the planet, so he stole some fabric and fashioned a cloak for himself. He approached the group of men, and asked to join them. They hesitantly agreed, however they feared he was a spy for Toketsu. When they asked to see under his cloak, Kori stopped for a moment, thinking, and eventually showed the men his face. Begging to let him join them, Kori got down on his hands and knees. The men agreed, but only of Kori would be locked up in a cell on their ship. Kori gladly agreed. The men then took off, and flew away as far as they could. They were already at the outskirts of the empire, but they happened to be reaching the end of the galaxy. They decided to fly ahead into the Northern galaxy. They flew farther and deeper into the universe. Eventually, however, they began to fear Kori. Paranoid, they commanded him to leave the ship. He agreed, and left the ship. He had already gone far enough. When he left the ship, he noticed a nearby planet. The planet just so happened to be Earth. He decided to stay there for the time being. The time being ended up being seven years. Kori met a small village in the deep woods. He somewhat assimilated into the village, making a few friends and getting an education, but he never truly become one of the villagers before disaster struck. The village was raided by bandits while Kori was off in the woods, gathering food for himself. When he came back, it was too late. The bandits had killed everyone and set fire to the village. In a fit of rage, he murdered the bandits not just in self-defense, but in cold blood. He was 17 at the time. From that day onward, Kori decided not to make friends so easily. He lived in the woods off of the land for the next four years, until… (This is the part where I pray that this is good enough to get me accepted, even if I have to change it a bit. If so, then this is where the backstory ends and the story begins)
    Well, I hope this is good enough! If not, I am happy to edit it!
    Discord: shinyrayquaza1 #3253

    • #31851

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Thank you for writing a new, and better explanation of how he reached Earth.

      I’ve read through the new section, and I think your character definitely meets our standards for Arcosians. I’ll give you the stamp of approval.
      Accepted

  • #31859

    Shiny
    Participant

    Alright! *Shonen jumps* That’s relieving! I hope this RP turns out well! And thanks for the feedback!

  • #31874

    Alex Flore
    Participant

    By personal reasons i can’t buy Minecraft at this moment,so i use the ,,alternative” version.If i have a cracked account,could i still possibly play if my future request would be accepted?

  • #31875

    Alex Flore
    Participant

    Name: Cleric
    Gender: Male
    Race: Half-Sayan(lab experiment)
    Age: 15
    Personality:Cleric is a person with deep rage for the lost of his dear teacher and brother.,he has a strong determination,to be strong enough to fight his creator.(reason in backstory)and also,after his teacher death,he is a hard bonder.
    General Appearance: In the past he used to wear a purple gi,but now he wears a dark gi,with dark pant’s and white shoes.He has Green medium long hair,and brown eyes.,his skin color is white,.
    Backstory: After the deafeat of Cell,the Z Fighters thinked that was the last threat to the earth,that there were no more android or experiments,but that’s wrong,there were just a single experiment left.The Project HB.Named by the Genius : Doctor Gero.After his own son’s death,at the hands of Goku.Doctor Gero,fell in a depression,he just wanted revenge,more than that he just wanted his son back.But he couldn’t do that.After the many battles Goku has fought on earth,Doctor Gero nano bot’s took samples of the blood of Goku.Until he he could rewrite the dna of a fetus.After many tries.His creation finnaly gave him heart beats,he knowed that he succeded,he knowed that he could finnaly have his son back.But before that,he must get his revenge back,so he initiated the android plan.
    Fasforward 10 months ( the child is in a human incubator)
    After his failure,he knowed he couldn’t do anything else,so before he realesed #16 #17#1
    He pressed the button that ejected his son,in a well calculated area where he could live.
    -Live my son,live and get my well deserved revenge!
    That’s what he thought
    The Beginning of Cleric’s life.
    After being ejected in that ,,safe’’ area,cleric finnaly opened his eyes,to see the sun,the sky,the land.
    To feel the wind,the grass…
    But Cleric’s eyes widened after seeing a large creatures groaning at him.Clleric beggined to cry.
    But why?Why that creature exist’s?wasn’t that area safe?Well it seems after his fight with Vegeta and Goku.The large ki blasted thrown,created earthquake’s that,distrupted the A,I of the Tank,and the location was changed,
    Resuming
    After he beggined to cry,the creature were more closely to cleric,with every move he took….
    But wait,what was that sound….a swoosh..!
    A cut in the wind maybe?No that was a sword sound someone killed the creature.
    It was a white haired Woman.He looked at the baby who was crying,and he reminded her of her own child.
    Without a single explanation,he took that baby,he raised him,he trained him,as her own child.
    After 15 years later,a pink monster beggined terrorizing people,he was out of control.And some Yellow haired guys were fighting him,what a mess,thinked Cleric.
    After a surpisingly sudden earthquake,he,his mother and brother were scared,about what happened,
    After some time later,they saw a big pinked ball made from energy coming at the earth,oblirerating them to pieces,but after a moment.He woke up.thinking where his mother and brother are,he had a reflex to look in the sky,it was her mother face.
    He hear only few words.
    -Be brave,we are good here
    And her face,vanished in the air as the same with her voice.
    After that Cleric…beggined to cry in sadness.But he stoped,he found another task to do.To find his past.
    He took upon him a journey,so he will get stronger.After some time,he heard a rumor about a witch who could reveal someone’s past.He thinked that this is his chance,so he searched and searched about this witch.Until he found her.But wait,there is a price to pay,if you want know your past.Cleric didin’t have a choice so he payed his home land.The witch look upon her crystal ball,and what he saw,what he saw is unbelievable,he gave Cleric the ball to see for itself,after he saw that Clerc fell in his knees and he beggined to scream….at the moment….his aura bursted out of him.
    What is this !?
    He aksed himself….after he told the witch what happened,the witch kindly explained him the meaning of Ki.Then he found a way to know more about this.To go to the kami’s lookout.

    Well this is how I end it,the rest with the lookout,I will do it if I will be in roleplay !

    Discord : Cleric#1848

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Alex Flore.
    • #31882

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      This is… an abomination. Have you not read the characters that were accepted? I do recall expecting something that is:
      A. Believable
      B. Original
      and C. Well written

      This is completely unbelievable, due to the idea that Dr.Gero used Goku’s blood to create this child, and not his own. Not to mention that Gero had been creating Androids since BEFORE his son died (I.E. Android 8 [Eighter]). You also never mentioned where his other half came from.

      Your character is unoriginal in concept. Android 16 is Dr.Gero’s homage to his dead son. Your character is a partial saiyan copy of android 16. I’ve come up with an official “race name” for this… bullshit – to be frank. “Bio-Saiyadroid”. Better than “Half-Saiyan (Lab Experiment)”.

      This a poorly written application, with the other issues stacked into it, just making it worse. You lack grammatically correct sentences, and poor plot development. Your dialogues are also poorly written. The pace of your story is insane, and your jump to the Buu, just to do nothing within the plot that was worthwhile. This is not even worth reading, and will give most people a headache.

      Your application is DENIED.

    • #31888

      Alex Flore
      Participant

      I understand the reasons i was denied.
      Thanks for pointing out my mistakes,so i can improve them.
      I will try to improve my grammar first then i will look on the story too.
      Thanks for being reasonable with your answer.
      Well,i will try better next time 😀

    • #31896

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Before you even consider reapplying, get yourself a PREMIUM MC Account. We will not allow CRACKED users to even be considered. It doesn’t matter how good or bad your application is, if you’re not even an owner of a premium MC account.

    • #31889

      Abry
      Participant

      You might wanna apply for namekian, majin or maybe human, since we have had a large influx of saiyan/half saiyan applications recently. Also, about you being a bio-saiyadroid, you might wanna do some research before suggesting all this. Make sure people can believe your story/it doesn’t warp any KNOWN dbz facts.
      Just a couple suggestions. Best of luck for your next application!
      Peace out.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Abry. Reason: Added best of luck line
  • #31878

    Zyph
    Participant

    Announcement
    Two new races, will be added soon to the server.

    The Shinjins and Demons. Keep a lookout for the description for them.

  • #31892

    Raiton
    Participant

    Ok if the problem was race for my character I will re-apply as an Arcosian and change the backstory
    if I need to be another race for diversity and change other subjects in his story please let me know and I’ll gladly change what I need to.

    Name: Arctyc

    Age: 16

    Race: Arcosian

    Alignment: Good

    Gender: Male

    Appearance (1st form I’m assuming): Black “skin” with white bio armor and icey blue to complement it

    Personality: Caring, Funny, Determined, Has a gentle heart and will not kill or do harm for no reason.

    Backstory:

    Arctyc was never determined to try and be the tyrant ruler that his father Yce ruler of part of the East Galaxy (That had not been destroyed by Broly and closer to the North Galaxy where a trip there is slightly more feasible) had wished, this had turned into a rift in their relationship from when Arctyc was young. Arctyc also was a “late bloomer” in terms of being able to transform. He was stuck at his minimal form while his peers were near mastering the second form like most did at the age of 13. This disgusted Yce and only wished to push his son more and more, hoping that once he transformed he would gain a bloodlust and thirst to get stronger, he refused to let his son be a disappointment.

    Not seeing progress and not wanting to lose momentum in helping his son grow into a soon to be ruler, one day Yce took Arctyc on a trip to a planet on the other side of the North Galaxy called Earth. Yce took a Human and told Arctyc to “Make waste of this disgusting Earthling!” Arctyc stood dejected of the whole situation and refused saying that “He’s done nothing wrong, why must I hurt him father?” Yce demanded Arctyc once more to “Kill this horrid creature!” Arctyc responded with “Father, you are being the horrid creature, he has done nothing wrong, I refuse to hurt any being that has not done something to me!” Yce let the Human go and the two left and went back to the wasteland where they had left their space pods. As Arctyc was about to get in his space pod, Yce shot the pod with a ki blast blowing it up. Arctyc responded with “But why father!?” Yce said “If you are not willing to rule with an iron fist, you are no son of mine and you are not worthy to even return home.” Yce backhanded Arctyc sending him flying into a boulder nearby.

    Yce abandoned his son and flew back to the Northern part of the Eastern Galaxy. Arctyc, once he got his bearings knew that it was futile to fly through space and get back home, his father no longer wanted anything to do with him, so he went back to the village with the human his father threaten named Kato. Kato was a martial artist in his late thirties who agreed to let Arctyc stay with him and train him as much as possible since Arctyc had spared his life. Arctyc has spent the last year getting custom to life on Earth and training so he never felt as weak as his father had made him feel as well as vowing to protect the Earth that had now, for the most part, had accepted him.

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    • #31897

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      I’m very sorry to be running you through hoops on what race you can be…

      I’ll go ahead and let you know that your application is a very nice one, as it stands, but we’re need some more diversity.

      Here’s what we have:

      Saiyans – 3
      Half-Saiyans – 3
      Arcosian – 4 (One seems to be inactive, but it is our most populated race at 5 accepted characters).
      Majin – 2 (I ended up switching to a Majin variant, known as the Genjin. That is why you only see one accepted Majin in the applications as of right now).
      Namekian – 1
      Human – 2 (We have 1 accepted character who is inactive, making it 3, but 2 active).
      Shinjin (Race of the Kai’s and Kailike people, recently added) – 0
      Demon (Race of beings such as Dabura, Mira, and Towa, recently added) – 0

      The guidelines for Shinjin and Demon are going to be released here in the near future, and the other races are already set with guidelines. We hope to see you apply for a new character, with a new race, here in the near future!

    • #31907

      Raiton
      Participant

      🙁 Okay I’ll make a new character when I get more time or after the guidelines for the new races are released.

  • #31898

    NegativeBoom
    Participant

    In order to allow people to see another Majin application, I am posting my character I’ve switched to on here. The following took me about 3 hours to create the initial idea, and another 5 hours to come up with a backstory for. By no means does any applicant need to have this length, or level of content. We simply ask for a coherent, believable, and creative story. We also ask that you do not make your character insanely powerful to start. There was one character, Icey, who was accepted. We decided that the x1 mil gravity isn’t feasible for the start of our RP.

    Anyways, here goes:

    Name : Genjin Dakuhato

    Gender : N/A (Refer to as He, since it is masculine looking)

    Age : “Records state that Dakuhato first began appearing about 4500 years ago, but evidence leads to suspect that it is actually at least 10 thousand years old.” – Guide to Unknown Beings

    Race : Majin variant – Genjin (Shadow Majin – Examples include Hirudegarn)

    Alignment : Pure Evil

    Personality : Dakuhato is a trickster by definiton. He enjoys making everyone suffer. He will torment anyone he pleases, and is a extremely threatening being. His very presence is able to send chills down your spine. He will not refuse a fight, and is keen to kill those he battles. If he is in danger, he is not afraid to vanish and escape.

    Origin of Dakuhato : To understand Dakuhato, we must first jump back to roughly 5 million years ago. This will take us to the first moment where Majin Buu (Kid Buu) was reining terrorupon the universe under control of Bibidi. With every planet that Majin Buu destroyed, he would absorb some of that energy. He would then leave. However, after many millenia of destruction, this leftover energy began to build up. Although not much from an individual planet, the combined energy of some 200 million planets, and their people came together. This power alone was incapable of forming anything on it’s own. This energy would sit here and condense for nearly 5 million years, eventually starting to form some semblance
    of a living being. The being began to take shape about 11 thousand years prior to the events of Dragon Ball. Within 1 thousand years of Dakuhato taking shape, he finally formed into his first state of existance. A Human-Like being that wasn’t entirely ethereal. This being was filled with the ultimate level’s of hatred, and malice. A sense of grief, and anger filled the being. The being had no physical properties, making it impossible for it to fight. The being did notice however, that it could inhibit the bodies of living beings, and take control. Dakuhato enjoyed this freedom to jump from body to body, but eventually grew bored of it. It had been 6500 years since it first formed. Dakuhato knew he was able to communicate without a
    body, and so it began to torment the greatest scientist it could find. Dakuhato demanded the scientist and his team to construct a body for him. The scientist began to construct the body, knowing that he would die if he didn’t. After about 30 years of development, the first prototype was ready. The entire body was made of a Katchin skeleton, which could be turned into gas if willed by Dakuhato. The flesh was an Ooblek-like substance (Ooblek is a non-newtonian substance that is liquid like until force is applied, his flesh is similar to Ooblek, but retains
    it’s solid state unless he needs to deform into a gas). The eyes were made with a similar crystal to the one shown in DBS, which was meant to power the time machine. Dakuhato was filledwith delight, as he inhibited the body. His first action was to test it out. Dakuhato vanished to a nearby city, and began to slaughter the people. The militia of the city quickly arrived to take him down.

    The militia pumped thousands of rounds into Dakuhato’s body, but to no avail. Each shot would fly to the center, and then out the other side. The holes would reform, leaving no trace. Amused, Dakuhato began to deform and reform next to his many opponents. With each time he reappeared, another person would die. Eventaully, Dakuhato began to notice an error in the body.The seemingly perfect material his flesh was made of began to harden. His flesh was turning to stone, and eventually crumble. Dakuhato was enraged. He rose to the sky and poured a large
    amount of energy into a blast. The blast crashed into the city, leaving it a ruin of what it was before. He returned to the scientist who developed his body for him. He demanded a new material for his flesh. The scientist once again delved into study to form a new flesh. After another 20 years of research the new body was developed. The scientist discovered that the Katchin was causing the flesh to solidify as the bullets that struck would bounce off. The scientist removed the Katchin skeleton, and opted out for the entire body being made of the same
    material, minus the eyes. Dakuhato once again tested this body out, and was delightfully surprised with his results. The body was perfect for Dakuhato, and thus, the scientist was useless. Dakuhato destroyed the man, and his lab, preventing anyone from learning of his body’s composition.

    We now jump to about 4400 years into the future.

    Dakuhato largely remained in the Eastern Galaxy. Each year a new planet would fall under his control. This would continue until around age 730. In age 730 Dakuhato was faced with a large force of enemies. The combined power of these enemies would reach a power level of around 900 thousand. Dakuhato wasn’t very strong compared to this force, with a powerlevel of around 150 thousand. The enemies quickly defeated Dakuhato, and forced him to flee. They chased him to the edge of the Galaxy where he decided to flee away from the Eastern part of the Universe. Dakuhato would continue to flee until around age 735, where he would make his way into the Sol System (Our star!). Dakuhato crashed down onto the planet Earth, after doing some far out investigation. He concluded that the Human race would be a great start of his new found empire. He would control all of North Galaxy, starting with Earth. If it was the last thing he did. Dakuhato would go into hibernation until age 760 where he awoke after 25 years of sleep. He would then begin his conquest of planet Earth in age 761 – after figuring out where to start.

    Power Levels (In Order): (5 Million Years Before Age) 4,000, (11000 YBA) 12,000, (4500 Years Before Dragon Ball) 100,000 due to the gathering of power from many different species. (100 Years Before DB) 150,000 which then drops to 3,500 after using most of his power to flee. (Age 760, post hibernation) 7,500.

    General Appearance : Dakuhato’s flesh-like material is a dark purple (according to a Chakra guide purple represents extrasensory perception, inner wisdom, and evokes intuition). His crystal eyes are yellow (in the Chakra guide yellow is representing “mental activities, itillect, personal power, and will”). He wears white pants, with a green belt. No shoes.His Aura is black (Black represents anger, hatred, malice, etc… Hence why pure-blood saiyans have black hair. That is a trait of the species.)

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  • #31901

    Alex Flore
    Participant

    Name: Cleric
    Gender: Male
    Race: Human
    Age: 15
    Personality: He has a very strong determination to achieve his dream,shy|(reason in backstory)and if he need’s to,he would play the hero.
    General Appearance: He has a Black leather Jacket,black pant’s and white shoes.He has green hair and brown eyes,and he has a sword.
    Backstory: Year 772
    It all started when Cleric was just seven years old, in the Hill Village Holgar.
    The Village was full of prosperity,and the people who lived in it,were living a decent life.
    Cleric’s family was composed only by him and his mother,since his dad left him,and he didin’t have no brothers or sister,and because of that he needed to help his mother more than a 7 year’s old kid would.
    His mother was a calm,and lovely person.He loved Cleric more than anything,and she didin’t want her child do that much work,but even if she tried to stop Cleric from doing work,she couldn’t because Cleric was a very stubborn kid.
    In a Sunday,where every villager was relaxing,Cleric was out in the Village,in his favorite place : The Tavern.Why you ask?
    Well for Cleric,he just liked the company of The Adult’s Especially a Man,since his dad left him when he was just 3.
    As Cleric entered the Tavern,he was greeted.As he is their special ,,guest” .
    Cleric stood at his usual chair,where he could see everything that is happening.
    The bartender,as usually offered Cleric some juice.
    Cleric Kindly accepted that offer.
    After some time,a group of 2 individuals entered the tavern,the seemed odd.
    One of them was a small ,,child” with a simple white face,and 2 red dot’s on his cheeks.
    The other one,was a tall man,with white skin,and…what is that,another eye?Cleric thought for himself.
    As the 2 strangers aproached the bartender,they asked gently,where they could buy some food,and clothes.
    The bartender wanted to tell them,but Cleric rushed in their conversation.
    He offered to help them,as he knew the village.
    The two of them agreed to be helped by Cleric and they carry on.
    Cleric asked them who are they,and where they are from.
    Cleric heard another 2 odd names,Chaotzu and Tien….hm Chaotzu..that sounds like food to me,Cleric Taught.
    They told Cleric they were training for most of their lives,and that they travelled the world,to seek new methods of training.
    After Cleric showed them the market,the 2 strangers thanked Cleric.And they beggined to look for their needs.
    Cleric leaved the strangers with a goodbye,and run off home,to tell his mother everything about these strangers.
    His mother at first didin’t believed him,three eyes?I would like to see that!his mother said.
    Now it’s night,so Cleric went to bed.He needs to have energy for tommorow.
    After he woke up,his mother gived him the breakfast,and told him to eat it fast,because they are going to check their Fruit Trees.
    Cleric joyfull eated his meal and he put his shoes on,and was the first to go out of the house.
    After some time,they arived at their Field,where plenty of Fruit Trees were planted.They seemed to grow pretty good.Cleric wanted to take one apple from his favorite tree,but he was stoped by his mother seeing a hill on fire,that was the signal if bandits were to attack the village.Both of them run as fast as they could back to the village,only to be captured.
    The bandit’s took control of the village,as Cleric saw a old man,beaten up by the thugs,he rushed to his aid,but he was stoped by one of the bandit’s grabed him,and throwed him in the ground,he was pretty hurt,but thanks to working since a early age,he didin’t took lethal damage.
    The bandit,laughted and pointed at his mother.And he said,to his leader if he could take her as his woman.
    The woman looked horrified at the laughting of the bandit.As the bandit aproached,in a flash someone punched him in the stomach,making him to faint.It was this tall stranger from yesterday.The bandit leader looked at him and said.
    -Boys end this freak.
    After the thugs rushed at the tall stranger,he beated them,in a mere second.He then told the leader,if he wanted to try what the fainted thugs did.The leader backed off,and rushed to the exit of the village.But this stranger,appeared from nowhere in the face of the leader and punched him,making him faint.
    The Stranger then leaved the villagers to take care of the bandit’s who layed on the ground.
    Cleric with all his power,stood up and thanked him.The stranger looked at the child,and said to him that he has potential,and he shouldn’t waste it being a farm boy.Then he leaved the village for good,never being spoted again.
    In that moment,Clerc’s perspective of Life Changed,and since that day,his dream was to be strong like that man.
    Time-Year 779
    Time passed,and when he reached 14 years old,he and his mother,argued that,when Cleric will have 14 years old,he would leave the Village,to train..
    This was the moment Cleric was the most happiest person in his life,but the saddest too,because he could follow his dream,but he will leave everything he cares here,in this village.
    His mother told him to do not worry about that,and he gave him a backpack,with all Cleric will probably need in his Journey.
    Cleric,leaved the village,making Some of the villagers to cry,but not his mother,his mother was happy that he could live his dream.

    Cleric,wanted to search a place to train,a place to learn everything about what did that man did.
    Early his journey was hard,running from creatures,hiding from bandits,he didin’t lived the life he used to in Holgar.After crossing alot of new villagers and cities,he found a House in the top of a hill,wich was 1 killometer away from a village.He didin’t had much food left,so he wanted to see if he could ask from the fammily of that house.As he wanted to enter,somone stoped him,and asked him,what he was doing there.He turned his back,and saw an old man.He told the gezer that he only wanted to ask for food,since he didin’t had much left.The old man invited him,in his house.The two of them beggined a conversation.And Cleric Told his dream,of being as strong as that strange warrior.
    The Old Man,spaced out for a moment.Cleric asked what happend,and he told him,that he knows what that man did,he explained Cleric,that the stranger was using his life energy knowed as Ki.Cleric asked him,where does he knows that.The Old Geezer told him that from his old deacesed master,Mutaito.A shocked Cleric,standed up,and begged him,if he could train him.At first the old geezer refused,so he throwed Cleric out of his house,but Cleric stayed in front of his house for days,and finnaly the old man,accepted him as his pupill and since that he trained him.After a year of training,he told Cleric that he doesn’t have anything to teach him,so if he want’s to know anything more,he should go to his next destination,The Talking Cat Korin.
    Cleric,was shocked and sad at same time,realising he would leave his master,and he would talk to a talking cat.
    The master wished Cleric good luck on his next journey.
    The journey to be more powerfull
    The journey to Korin.

    Sorry for my grammar,it’s not my first language,and i try to be better at it.

    Discord Cleric#1848

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Alex Flore.
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    • #31906

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      You stated that you’re a cracked user previously. We do not allow cracked.
      Auto-Denial

  • #31913

    Raiton
    Participant

    Okay third time’s the charm, I’ll go for a Namekian this time I guess.

    Name: Taiko

    Age: 22

    Race: Namekian

    Personality: Some would say he is too confident for his own good, sarcastic to a fault. But Taiko is ultimately a caring person who works hard and is always up for a little competition.

    Appearance: Wears traditional Demon Clan attire along with a cape. Same basic green based skin like most other North Galaxy Namekians but has gray/black instead of red.

    Backstory: Born into the warrior clan he was a known fighting prodigy from around age 8 or 9. He trained under the most of the Elders from different villages across the planet and had even gained a reputation as the Defender of the Planet, this was brought to fruition after defeating several grunt soldiers who had come to Namek in what was perceived to be an invasion. After several years of little to no growth in his BP (roughly 12,000 if acceptable but I believe it is feasible since the BP of grunt soldiers is around 10,000) he grew complacent and gathered the Namekian DragonBalls and wished for 1. A spaceship, 2. Directions to a planet that had the most skilled fighters in the galaxy and 3. Teach him the most commonly spoken language on the planet and left.
    He arrived on Earth when he was 19 and has spent the last 3 years getting used to his new Earth lifestyle.

    • #31914

      Raiton
      Participant

      For some reason I am unable to edit but wanted to change “grunt soldiers” to gangs of space pirates that were around the strength of Frieda soldiers that attacked Namek

    • #31936

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      To be fair, I do understand that Namekians are one of the 2 easiest races to achieve. However, your application, primarily the backstory, is way too short. (I would define too short as me being able to copy and paste your entire application into discord, which has a 2k character limit).

      You could make at least a paragraph out of each plot point there is, and I would recommend doing so. We just want to see a more developed character than what you have so far.

    • #31955

      Raiton
      Participant

      Here is my revised application

      Name: Taiko

      Age: 18

      Race: Namekian

      Personality: Some would say he is too confident for his own good, sarcastic to a fault. But Taiko is ultimately a caring person who works hard and is always up for a little competition. Also enjoys seeking danger but can think logically and reasonably. Likes meeting new people and also tries to accept criticism well when training with more experienced fighters. However, he does have strong resentment and feels as though he needs to prove himself and that he has a chip on his shoulder, for some unknown reason he feels like he when things get tense he is not worthy enough to be on a battlefield even though he is clearly capable.

      Appearance: Wears traditional Namekian Warrior attire along with a cape. Same basic green based skin like most other North Galaxy Namekians but has gray/black instead of red.

      Backstory:

      Born into the warrior clan he was a known fighting prodigy from around age 8 or 9. He has only been the second born Namekian fighter born after Nail. He trained under 2 of Elders from different villages across the planet. He started his planet wide training endeavor with the order of the Elder Moori (Father of Dende and Cargo). Moori trained Taiko while he was from the ages of 8-10 teaching him to fly and the basics of ki and how to sense and control it. Once he was aware of the fundamental usage of ki he went to Elder Tsuno (The Elder Vegeta kills in Z) whom had the most Warrior Clan members in one village on the planet. It was there where he would spend days on the normally serene planet training and learning how to become a better Warrior in order to defend his planet, but he was ambitious and always knew he wanted more. After becoming a more advanced warrior through training with Elder Tsuno and his temporary mentor Xylo, Taiko had become the most promising young warrior other than Nail. he was a flawless fighter which was rare for the Namekians on such a peaceful and passive planet not many were born with the drive to get stronger at the age of 15 (with the a BP of around 6,000)

      When he was 16 he started to train with Nail. Nail became his new master and Taiko looked up to him as an older brother. Together they helped each other grow as warriors and this would cause Taiko to occasionally get overconfident in his abilities and Nail would keep him in check reminding him that the strongest one on the planet was still him and not Taiko. Also that if Taiko was ever going to be a great warrior he would need to learn to defend against threats to the serine Namekian way of life. This was put to the test when that same year 4 space pirates landed on Namek with the idea of taking them back to their own planet in order to then be able to use them at their leisure. Nail was on his way to the threat when he was stopped by Taiko. “I can do this no problem!” Nail contested his over confidence by saying that Taiko was nowhere near ready or capable to fight this group. Nail and Taiko went to ELders Tsuno and Moori so Taiko could try and convince them that he should fight in the defense of the planet but instead they turned him down saying that “You are the future! We cannot lose you now! We will need you later. Nail is more than capable to handle this himself. He is older, faster, stronger and battle ready.” Nail swiftly dispatched of the space pirates and Nail was granted not only the title of the strongest Namekian, he was also given the sacred job of guarding Lord Guru. Taiko felt as though his own mentor had robbed a opportunity for him. It had nothing to do with the title, or the chance to protect the Grand Elder but he felt as though Nail never fully trusted his abilities. He was not even mad at Nail, but himself because it must have been his fault that he was not “battle ready” like Nail. He decided that he would leave the planet and in order to prove himself to his race, who did not fully disown him but he felt never fully accepted him, he would show them that he could be just as strong, just as dependable, if not more so than Nail.

      When he was 17 he asked the Grand Elder to unlock his hidden potential, with no real reason the Elder was skeptical but eventually did grant his wish because he felt bad for the way Taiko had been treated. With his BP now around 11,500 after his potential was unlocked Taiko had started his quest to leave Namek. Without telling the Elders why he needed the DragonBalls he was able to gain them from him and went as far as possible from any village and called on Porunga where he wished for 1. A spaceship, 2. Directions to a planet that had the most skilled fighters in the galaxy and 3. Teach him the most commonly spoken language on the planet and left leaving no trace of where he went or why. (Arriving 2 years before the Dead Zone events while the Earth was in a time of peace) Taiko has spent the last two years on Earth learning from afar and training using the multiform technique, he studied human culture, and more importantly martial arts waiting for the day his new home would be in danger so he could do everything he could to help it.

    • #31961

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Revised is an understatement to say the least lol

      Anyways, great work. A really well written story, and you explain your character’s drive very well. You’re going to make a great addition to our group, thanks for applying.
      Accepted

    • #31962

      Raiton
      Participant

      Thank you I can’t wait! ? I realized that I did not include my Discord with my newer applications.

      Discord: Crimson #2312

  • #31919

    Rin
    Participant

    Name: Rin Hikaru
    Gender: Male
    Race: Half-Saiyan
    Age: 17
    Personality:Rin Acts well around other people and races and loves meeting new friends. He has a very strong passion about fighting only to save people or things, Sparring is also a good hobby of his. He also likes eating cookies as it is one of his favorite deserts. Rin tries to hide his race so saiyans don’t see him as a half-breed but as a human. He tries to stop unessicary fighting and fighting that causes massive destruction. He hopes one day that someone can finally help the world from all the destruction and keep people from not liking someone for there appearance, and race.

    General Appearance: He has a Black shirt and a time capsule jacket along with some black pants. He has spiky white hair from his mother’s side and has black eyes and a black aura, no tail.

    Backstory: A Saiyan named Rugu crashed into a planet named Earth and grew up, Went to school and met a girl named Airi and later got married and had a good life and later had a kid. They Chose to name the kid Rin After Rugu’s best friend before he crashed into Earth. Rin Was born with White hair from his mother and black eyes from his father. He gained a black aura after being trained a little at age 3. He later went to school at age 6 and got picked on by some saiyans (Referring to the other applicants) there because he was a half-breed. He got bullied by the same saiyans all through out school and dropped out after 9th grade. His dad trained him to become stronger so he could stand up for himself and not be bullied all the time for his race. He kept sparring with his father for a whole year trying to become stronger so no one could hurt anyone because of there race or appearance. His dad taught him the technique fly so he could explore more of the world by himself. At age 15 Rin Started his journey
    finding new people and friends stopping all the things people done to him when he was younger.
    A month into his journey He later found a mentor called Daiki to teach him to handle his ki a bit more to use the basic ki blast and told him there is a legendary transformation that Saiyans and Half-Saiyans can go. Rin’s mentor died a few months later after his training. Rin Looked up to his mentor even after he died trying to reach the legendary transformation he was talking about, so he could finish the training he was given before Daiki died. Rin Went to his mentor’s funeral and flew off back on his journey a month later. He kept going on his journey Hopefully finding new friends and new races to meet. He found a few humans and spoke to them that gave him a cool jacket and a new black shirt. He started training his Ki, powering up ki blasts and trying to form waves and different shapes that form ki hoping that was the secret of learning that new transformation. He could form little waves and a disk every so often but not that much other then little blasts. He spent 5 months trying to master ki control and he could form large blasts, waves and disks out of ki. He still couldn’t find out what causes the transformation that Daiki was talking about. He went back flying on his journey trying to find new saiyans that know anything about the transformation. He found a Human that new how to use ki and seemed pretty strong. He sparred with him for 3 months gaining strength, speed, endurance, and Ki. He later defeated the human then said his goodbye and left to find more friends and sparring partners. a few weeks after sparring he met a Human picking and fighting a arcosian just because they were different. He flew down there and tried to stop the human from hurting the arcosian. With the arcosian hiding the human started a fight with Rin so Rin fought back. He defeated the opponent saving the namekian after getting hurt and brought him back to his home. His family was so happy they offered him money but Rin refused and left. Continuing his journey he traveled back to his father seeing if he knew anything about his the transformation. His father said he knew something about it and that it was called a super saiyan. He said the only way to reach it is through intense amount of training and pinned up rage inside. Rin asked to spar with his father training him. Rin did this for about a year until he said that he didn’t want to rely on his Dad to get him through his training. Rin went on back to his Journey at the age of 17 he is continuing his journey now.
    Discord Client #3476

    • #31930

      Sam Noé
      Participant

      I ain’t supposed to answer you but I’ll try to give some advices to make it even better while I’m passing by.

      First you should get the others appliants’agreements to involve them in your story.
      Then you should elaborate a bit more his relation with Daiki since it’s an important person in his developpement. Maybe you should do the same with the human he sparred with.
      Also Rugu seems to be an average Saiyan warrior. Every saiyan knew the SSJ legend but only a few really believed it to be true. What pushed him to trust this childish legend ? How Daiki knew about it ?
      Finally putting a bit more words in his fight against literally racism could be good, show the depths of his motivation.

      All of this appart, very few but not annoying little grammar mistakes, and the story is good, well written, but I’m sure it’d be even better if you went a bit more in depth.

    • #31940

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      We’re currently asking for more of other races, besides Saiyan, Half-Saiyan, and Arcosian. Please choose a different race, this will help you be more likely accepted. As of right now, we’re currently denying the 3 races mentioned, until we have plenty more diversity.

      Sorry for the disappointment.

  • #31931

    Name: Shivero
    Gender: Male
    Race: Arcosian
    Age: 26
    Personality: He is quite noble and kind towards others but can be quick to anger. He is willing to take in other peoples opinions and ideas but there is a certain point to which he will draw the line. He is also very proud of his race, excluding Frieza who gave his race a poor reputation.
    General Appearance: He has pinkish red skin, white bio armour and blue gems. He chooses to only wear his bio armour and nothing else and wears a blue scouter.

    Backstory: Shivero was born on the home planet of the arcosian, around when Frieza was in his early childhood years. As he grew older he learned of Frieza and him conquering vast quadrants and galaxies in the universe. As a result it meant that their race as a whole were seen as evil and destructive and when he would walk around in markets on other planets he would be shouted at and sometimes beaten for something that he didn’t do.
    As a result of this Shivero decided to make it his mission to gain back the respect of his race and his people in order to create a better image for themselves. Everyday Shivero would train on planets of varying levels of gravity slowly training himself to become powerful enough to one day stand up to Frieza and for him to answer for his crimes. Although eventually word got to him that Frieza had been defeated by a Saiyan on planet Namek, and was killed along with his father and brother on earth by another saiyan. Rushing to get to earth Shivero would try to confront the being powerful enough to challenge Friezas power and challenge the two saiyans himself, as he felt it was his duty to rid the universe of Frieza and bring back the reputation of their race, not theirs. He then continued to train harder and harder, meeting some of the universes greatest mortal martial artists. Then when he felt he was ready he headed to earth, but to his surprise majin Buu had been revived and was reaking havoc upon the universe and on earth. In fear and rage of not being able to challenge the saiyans, Shivero flew to the furthest corner of the universe in order to escape the destruction brought about my majin buu. Years later a tournament deciding the fate of the earth of universe 7 by challenging universe 6 had begun, and through word of mouth, people said that an arcosian from universe 6 was participating called Frost. Shivero was curious to see whether the arcosians of this universe were like that of Frieza or not. At first he was pleased to hear that Frost was seen as a hero in universe 6, but after the tournament ended word got out the Frost was a fraud and caused the disasters in which he later on stopped to gain reputation. Furious at what his race was seen as across both universes Shivero swore to go to universe 6 to confront Frost in order to bring justice to the arcosian race in universe 6 aswell.

    • #31941

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Please read our requests for diversity, we have too many arcosians to accept more as of recent.
      Sorry.

  • #31937

    Zyph
    Participant

    Announcement

    The descriptions for Shinjins and Demons, are done. You may now apply for either race.

    Shinjin: are the beings born in the world of the Kai’s, born from the fruit of a Kaiju tree. Those who are born from a golden fruit can live for millions of years, while those who aren’t, live for around 75,000 years. Their powers range from levels of King Kai, at 3,500, to the power of beings like Zamasu who are closer to the limits of Goku and Vegeta. They’re also able to use maagic similar to Majins and Demons, unlike other races.

    Demons: Members of the Demon Realm race tend to be more powerful than average, and are generally shown to possess exceptional potential skill in magic, and fighting power. The inhabit the Demon Realm, living for thousands of years. They are pretty much 100% evil in nature, however not all are violent.

    Good Luck, to the applicants applying for these two races

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Zyph.
  • #31942

    NegativeBoom
    Participant

    In order to help people write their backstories, and prevent them from going past Z, or too much of it, I’m writing this announcement.

    Here is the general basis of our RP’s timeline:
    Start
    Dead Zone
    End
    ???

    To put it into words, we’re starting in the Dead Zone, without a clear stopping point in the story. We will go through the Buu Saga, so count on that.

  • #31952

    BlazingGale
    Participant

    Name – Izanami
    Gender – Female
    Race – Demon
    Age – 138

    Chaotic Neutral

    Personality – She’s used to be sadistic, evil, and kills anyone she thinks is annoying, but has grown a softer side since certain events. While she still keeps her slightly sadistic trait, she’s now more merciful to her opponents.

    General Appearance – I’ll make a skin real soon, I’m just way too lazy after writing the backstory, not gonna lie.

    (Before I start the backstory, I’m unsure of if you’re going to involve the movie characters. If you are, you can replace Cooler with Frieza.)

    Backstory – Izanami was born in the demon realm, like most demons. Her father, Azrael, was one of the top demons, and while that would usually gain lots of respect, many, including Izanami herself, despised him because, unlike just about every other demon, he wasn’t as ruthless as other demons. While most demons would kill on the spot, he would show mercy to his opponents. While most demons tended to drag fights out to make their opponent suffer, he would end the fight as soon as possible. It was almost as if he didn’t like fighting, and Izanami hated that. What she hated more, was that demons would give her the cold shoulder as well just because she was his daughter. She was infuriated that she would be shuned for something completely out of her control. So, to get her mind off those stupid demons, she would train. While her father was unlike any other demon, he was still strong, so she asked him to help her in her training. Her father was a very busy demon, however, so he was only able to give Izanami the basics, and a little more beyond that. Izanami had grasped magic, ranging from fiery attacks, to slight knowledge in lightning. Her father had also taught her how to use a sword, which was her only way of close range combat. Throughout their training, Izanami had grown closer to her father then she had wanted to admit, and was starting to appreciate him for who he was.

    But that all changed one day. Although Izanami’s opinion of her father had changed, other demons opinions haven’t. While Izanami didn’t know of this, the king of the demons would purposely send her father into fights where he had a clear disadvantage, such as sending him to distant planets to face armies. But one day, it had become too much for even him, and he died in a fight against a warrior named “Cooler”. A demon had approahced Izanami and told her that her father died in a fight, nothing more. Izanami, infuriated, and, although she refused to admit it, even to herself, heartbroken at the death of her father, was determined to find out what had caused her father to die. She knew how strong he was, and doubted that some random fight would be the end of his life. She sneaked into the king of the demons mansion, where they held discussions between the highest ranked demons, which her father had been in, and vaguely told her about. Managing to keep her power level low, she successfully made it past security and to the discussion room, where she pressed her ear at the door and listened in. She overheard them talking about how they “Ridded Azrael once and for all.” and “Although he had potential, there’s no way he could stand against someone like Cooler.”. Izanami, blind with rage, bust into the room, and said “I swear I’ll end all you miserable demons one day! And that bastard Cooler too!” and ran out of the room as fast as she could, blurring past the guards.

    But the king was quick to react, and sent his security after Izanami. Luckily, not many demons knew what has just transpired, so only a select few were after her. She ran and ran, not bothering to look where she was going, as long as it was away from the demons chasing after her. She knew that eventually, she would get cornered, or get tired, so she had to think of a plan quick. She headed towards the area would demons would leave to do a mission of sorts. They would make giant door like entrances to other planets, and keep it open until they were finished with their mission. Finding a few open doors, and demons preparing to leave, she rushed past them and entered one at random. She had never been through one of these doors before, and it wasn’t a pleasant experience. She could only see pitch black, it felt like she was moving at absolutely incredible speeds, and it seemed to feel like time was stopped while she was moving. After what felt like an eternity, she exit through the other side, and immediately looking backwards, she could see the kings security about to enter the door as well, but before they could, she quickly shut the door, and the moment it closed completely, the door vanished, as if it was never there at all. Now knowing she had escaped, she fell onto her back, and let out a sigh of relief.

    After a moment of relaxation, Izanami got up, and looked around. Although she hated all those damn demons, she was still one herself. She was disgusted by what she saw. She was in an open, grassy area, there were a decent amount of flowers all around here, and the place was damn bright! She wondered where all that light was coming from. She looked up, and got nearly blinded at the sight of the sun. It didn’t physically hurt, but it definitely bothered her. Deciding to try and ignore it, she walked. No particular destination in mind, except maybe somewhere indoors where she could avoid this sun. She was ready to start a new life, with only two goals in mind. Kill all of the demons, and kill this “Cooler”. Those plans weren’t going to be easy, as she had no idea how to get back to the demon realm, and had no idea what this “Cooler” even looked like. So for now, she was going to get stronger.

    While she hated having to be social, she knew she’d have to. To learn a bit about this new, unknown world, and what it’s like, she was going to have to ask someone. So her main priority was to look for some sort of.. place where lifeforms were. She got more and more frustrated as days passed, and all she could find were endless trees and other useless junk. Until, one day, she found a girl, being attacked by three dumb looking men with swords. She couldn’t sense any ki from them, which confused her. At first she didn’t much care, but she then realized that these were the first lifeforms she had encountered during the days she had been here. So, deciding to help the girl, she approached them.

    As soon as the three had turned around, it was too late. One had already been shot with a blast of fire, effectively killing him. One was quickly decapitated while the last one, too stricken with fear to move, died a.. slow death. The girl looked even horrified, which left Izanami confused. She had just saved this girls life. Why was she scared? She should be thanking her! Just when Izanami was about to yell at the girl for being so ungrateful, the girl had stammered out a “Thank you..”. Although Izanami was just thinking about how she should be thanking her, she shrugged off her thanks, and asked.. well.. demanded that the girl tell Izanami about this world, which left the girl now confused, but still complied.

    Izanami learned quite a bit from the girl, who revealed herself to be named Eve. She was on a planet called Earth, which a race called humans resided in. She learned about all sorts of things that humans would have learned about at a young age, such as: Day and night. In the demon realm, it was always fairly dark, so something as simple as that was a new concept to her. Next, these humans didn’t seem to have ki. It seemed rather strange. Did that mean humans can’t fight? That’s rather.. pathetic. What demons were gonna be sent to this planet in the first place? She learned lots of basic things about the planet, and, after lots of persistance from Eve, Izanami told her a bit about herself as well, about how she was a demon, which scared Eve for a moment, and what her world was like. All in all, she was pleased. She now knew properly where she was, and now she was ready to spend all her time training.. Or, that’s what she was planning on doing. As Izanami was about to leave Eve, never to see her again, as far as she was aware, Eve asked something that shocked Izanami slightly.

    “Train me!” Eve yelled out as Izanami was walking away. Izanami thought she heard wrong. She understood why some ki..less human wanted training from her, a demon, but.. She’s a demon! Didn’t this girl knew that Izanami didn’t kill her only because Eve assisted her a bit? It was a completely ridiculous question. But something about her.. Or maybe, something about what she asked.. It tempted Izanami. Was it that she wanted a student of her own? Or it just because Eve is the first human she’s ever met? Her response surprised Eve, and, in all honestly, it even surprised herself.

    “Fine.” Izanami said with a smirk. “But I’m gonna work you to the ground, so you better be ready.” She didn’t know what complied her to agree to such a ridiculous request, where she had nothing to gain and Eve had much to. But she wasn’t going to back out now.

    It started off slow.. and frustrating. Since Eve barely had any ki to go off of, it was hard to explain how to use it, or how to even find it. Humans couldn’t seem to be able to use magic either, so Izanami had to fall back to basic ki techniques, which she didn’t have many of. One thing they did together, however, was learn martial arts. Eve had led Izanami close to a city, and since Izanami felt like they wouldn’t accept a demon there, ‘even though they wouldn’t even know if you didn’t say anything’ as Eve said, she still went and got a few books on basic martial arts. Izanami thought it’d be useful as while demons may know basic punching and kicking, having a proper martial arts style may be something not many demons would actually have, as they usually resorted to weapons, and if she’s going to be learning martial arts, she might as well learn it with Eve. While Izanami and Eve were training, Eve decided that Izanami should find a place to live, even if she didn’t need to sleep. Izanami seemed annoyed by the idea, but Eve’s persistance got to her once again, and evantually, she agreed. It didn’t work out very well at first. Izanami’s first place was to just find a really nice house, kill the people living in it, and claim it as her own. Eve panicked at the idea, and suggested they just make something simple ‘in the woods or something’, to which Izanami yelled at her for treating her ‘like some sort of animal’, and that they didn’t have time to waste on making a house when they could be training. Eventually, they just gave up on the idea, but Izanami still said she’d consider it.

    4 years later, Izanami had turned Eve, now 18 years old, into a decent fighter, while growing a decent amount stronger herself. They had changed in personality over the years. Eve had grown a backbone, taking a bit off Izanami, and gets a tad too overconfident when fighting. Izanami, taking a bit off Eve, has grown a tiny bit soft.. friendlier, you could say, although she wouldn’t admit it. She was still kind of.. rude, sadistic, evil..ish. But she has her moments of softness, even if she always tried to hide it. Eve, feeling satisfied with how much stronger she had gotten, thanked Izanami for all she’d done, and that she was going to head back to her hometown. Izanami felt a bit.. sad, at her departure, but Eve said Izanami could visit her anytime in Orange Star City, to which Izanami tried to brush it off and be all cool, saying “Hmph.. Maybe I can finally start to focus on my own training.”. Her words may have played of that she was annoyed, but by the smile on her face, and Eve now being able to know what she truly means, Izanami truly considered Eve a friend. They went seperate ways, and Izanami started her own training, still devoted to her plans of killing the demons and Cooler, but now, she wasn’t obsessed on it.

    (That’s it! If there’s anything you’d like me to go into more detail on, let me know!)

    Discord – Blaze#6271

  • #31953

    NegativeBoom
    Participant

    This is a really good character, and very surprising, as it’s our first Demon applicant. Your use of every major character is also very impressive. The content, and quality is all very good. The few grammatical and spelling errors are made up for by the overall application, and it’s story. Your character uses the description of the Demon race to it’s advantage, to create a believable story. Your character’s drive has no flaws, as most people would indeed be pissed if their parent was sent off to die.
    Accepted!

  • #31954

    Rin
    Participant

    How long do you think it will be until you accept Half-Saiyans again?

    • #31964

      Sam Noé
      Participant

      I’d advise you to adapt your story to an other race appart from Saiyans, Halfies and Arcosians.
      We’ve got almost no Namekians and Majins for now and not much Humans, you may also give a try to Shinjin and Demons but you’ll certainly need a whole new story, really well thought and written.
      As stated before the Saiyan/Halfies ratio must be kept low. And they certainly won’t be accepted until more applications from other races are accepted.

    • #31974

      Zyph
      Participant

      As Sam, previously stated we’re not accepting Saiyan/Half-Saiyan, application (Although, I might make an exception for a Saiyan Application,but it has to be good.). I’d suggest anyone who’s gonna apply for the roleplay, apply for the races stated above. We’re closing in into three slots left, for the time being. (Since, the server is hosted)

  • #31976

    Luki
    Participant

    Name:Saori (middle name) Nusa
    Gender: Female
    Race: Half-Saiyan
    Age: 5
    Personality: Sweet , Kind , caring , willing to help anybody
    General Appearance: Long black hair , crystal blue eye color , pale skin .She likes to wear baggy clothes , generally a t-shirt ( Which i use a Kami’s weight t-shirt at 0 ) and pants (in this case trunks’ pants or videl’s ) and some shoes (whatever xD)
    Backstory: One time , thousands of years ago , there was a wise specie who suffered a genocide . This specie was very very advanced technologically , their planet got unhabitable . They did in like the Wall-e movie , they made a space arc to save themselves . They promised themselves to never let anymore species to die , they come to visit ANY planet they encounter and ask the population if they wanted to join , even if it was a little bit of them , they offered Food, good traits , a stable life basically . Many marginalized people agreed , and they continued like that for thousands of years until we get to Planet Suramu , another victim of genocide , the suramians or surameijin are a (or were) a race mostly know by their “mystic” culture (take in count that mystic means contact with god or spiritual) Their warriors were frightening by their well known ki powers , but as strong their spirit was the weak they were on physical matters . The suramians got invaded by another alien species and a long lasting war happened , still , they lost , after a devastating situation the arc came and asked them to join which the lasting survivors agreed . And so on , visited planet Sadal , victims of the evil saiyans , the weak , but pure hearted escaped as they soon could . This resulting on variety of species on the arc , after so many generations a Saiyan , Pankin , and a suramian , Ashi , met , they had a baby which they named Saori , for Ashi’s culture , and her middle name Nusa , for her saiyan culture , they lived happily until some bandits , lidered by an arcosian , assaulted the arc . Overpowering most of the warriors of the arc they decided to save as many people as they could, sending Nusa , crying and screaming on a whole desesperation enviroment to the planet where the roleplay is taking action
    Thanks for reading! I hope to make it in! If you dislike it I can replace the character! I dont have any troubles , but I’d rp better most likely with Saori 😀

    Have a nice day

    (My user name on Discord is LukiRol#4035 )

    • #31982

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      WE ARE NOT ACCEPTING MORE HALF-SAIYANS, ARCOSIANS, AND ONLY ONE MORE REALLY GOOD SAIYAN

      To make myself clear:
      THIS IS THE FINAL TIME I WILL WRITE THIS. ANY MORE HALF-SAIYANS, ARCOSIANS, AND POORLY WRITTEN SAIYANS WILL BE AUTO-DENIED WITHOUT ANY OTHER MESSAGES ADDED

    • #31990

      Zyph
      Participant

      Only Races left, are Namekian, Human, Shinjins, Demons, and Majin

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • #31992

      Luki
      Participant

      Okay geez! XD sorry! Okay! Then im replacing the name to Maia , appereance … same on clothes , blue majin , hairstyle yet to be decided , green eyes .
      also changing a few stuff from the story , she is a majin , born from majins (like on Dragon ball Online) and well , pretty much everything goes the same!
      Best wishes!

    • #32011

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      I am going to attempt to maintain composure here.

      1. You need to write a NEW application.
      2. This was a run-on sentence.
      3. If your new application is the same as the previous, with just replaced names, you will be more than denied.
      4. If your new application lacks quality, like the original, and this run on sentence, you will not even get a reply.
      5. Compare the accepted applications to yours, look at flaws in yours, fix grammatical errors, fix your spelling, etc…

      This is your only warning.

  • #31994

    Xaltory
    Participant

    Name: Bet

    Gender: Male

    Race: Human

    Age: 17

    Alignment: Good

    BP: 800

    Personality: Bet is a very distant person usually not being the first one to open his mouth. He doesn’t enjoy much company as he enjoys being left alone half the time because of the fear of being bullied like in his younger days. He is very shy around almost everyone. He is on the other hand a good person at heart but you wouldn’t be able to guess just by looking. He is very doubtful of his own abilities coming from many years of being bullied. He is how ever comfortable around his friends and will even show signs of interest in something at times when around them. He is average intelligence in most things and a genius in others. He loves his parents but doesn’t respect them highly for them forcing him into fighting and training his butt off for years for what he thinks for their own self gain in the end. He feels sometimes neglected by his parents feeling that he is somehow letting them down even though he knows that they are letting him down.

    General appearance: Bet has brown eyes and dirty blonde hair with a simple casual hair cut and style. He wears the Orange Star High School clothing and wears a Green Gi when training or fighting.

    Backstory: Coming from a rich house hold and a well known famous family of martial artists he has been destined sense day one to become a fighter and carry on his parents legacy leaving almost no room for himself to explore and earn his own way in life. After his 6th birthday he began training everyday from morning till night only stopping to eat at lunch time and what not. He would do push ups, sit ups, squats and then train with his father and mother and only would stop when he could beat them in a brawl or last long enough. He was put into tournaments and used by his parents to gain even more wealth (in the children portion of the tournaments that his parents could not enter). He had one day won against the wrong person leading to his opponent telling all his friends lies about Bet and leading to people making fun of him and calling him a cheater and anything else they could find to mock him over. This lead to him becoming a very distant person not talking or making eye contact with someone he found would be mean or rude to him. This continued until he was 17 and sent away by his parents to continue to learn martial arts in Satan City and was also enrolled in orange Star High School. He didn’t think he would but he was just hoping that maybe, just maybe he would finally find the one that would respect him for who he is and find a real friend here for once.

    Side note: I’m Mosan’s friend in real life just so you know. If you might have guess this future friend I will be meeting that will respect my character is Mosan (he has already given me permission to put this in). My character will go through a crap load of character development through Mosan leading me to become more open and happy and possibly becoming friends with the other role players (OOC and In Character hopefully haha). Hope you enjoyed I know it isn’t a lot but it’s a human application so. Any ways thanks for reading.

    Discord: Xaltor #5502

    • #31995

      Zyph
      Participant

      Mosan, told me you were gonna apply sooner, or later. Anyways, as I see you misspelled “since” with “sense”, the story is very original. Which I like, but their somethings I would like you to answer and work on.

      Start with some with elaborating on some stuff, like

      Who are his parents, What was they’re legacy.
      How come he had no room for himself to explore and earn his own way in life, what did he do?

      Also, elaborate more on his training. I doubt he would’ve reached 800 BP doing sit-ups,push-ups and squats only. Then that would mean his around Mr.Satan’s level of strength,or even Videl at beginning of The Buu Saga.

      Elaborate, more on the person who wronged Bet, and spread lies about Bet.

      Add more what he did throughout his life in school before he turned 17, and moved to Orange Star City (this takes place in Dead Zone which is way before they re-name the city).

      I know, this is your first time. But, that doesn’t mean you can’t improve your applications. Anyhow, Good Luck!

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Zyph.
    • #32004

      Xaltory
      Participant

      Alright thanks for the reply here is a better updated version of my application

      Name: Bet

      Gender: Male

      Race: Human

      Age: 17

      Alignment: Good

      BP: 300

      Personality: Bet is a very distant person usually not being the first one to open his mouth. He doesn’t enjoy much company as he enjoys being left alone half the time because of the fear of being bullied like in his younger days. He is very shy around almost everyone. He is on the other hand a good person at heart but you wouldn’t be able to guess just by looking. He is very doubtful of his own abilities coming from many years of being bullied. He is how ever comfortable around his friends and will even show signs of interest in something at times when around them. He is average intelligence in most things and a genius in others. He loves his parents but doesn’t respect them highly for them forcing him into fighting and training his butt off for years for what he thinks for their own self gain in the end. He feels sometimes neglected by his parents feeling that he is somehow letting them down even though he knows that they are letting him down.

      General appearance: Bet has brown eyes and dirty blonde hair with a simple casual hair cut and style. He wears the Orange Star High School clothing and wears a Green Gi when training or fighting.

      Backstory: Coming from a rich house hold and a well known famous family of martial artists. His mother the fast and agile Caffey and his Father the unmovable rock Coff. he has been destined since day one to become a fighter and carry on his parents legacy leaving almost no room for himself to explore and earn his own way in life because all his parents wanted him to do was fight and train and that one day he would only take up his parents mantel and he will never be special because of himself, but because of his parents. After his 6th birthday he began training everyday from morning till night only stopping to eat at lunch time and what not. He would do push ups, sit ups, squats and then train with his father and mother and only would stop when he could beat them in a brawl or last long enough. He was put into tournaments and used by his parents to gain even more wealth (in the children portion of the tournaments that his parents could not enter). He had one day won against the wrong person his name was Josh. Josh then told all his friends lies about Bet and leading to people making fun of him and calling him a cheater and anything else they could find to mock him over. This lead to him becoming a very distant person not talking or making eye contact with someone he found would be mean or rude to him. Bet later found a friend, his name was Cray. Cray was Bets only form of defense against the bullies but not long after becoming friends with him Cray couldn’t take much of it anymore and left Bet beginning to make fun of him as well. This caused Bet to become even more bitter and angered one day lashing out on one of the students and hurting them. He never knew the kid but he was expelled from his school. Similar things continued until he was 17 and sent away by his parents to continue to learn martial arts in Orange Star City and was also enrolled in orange Star High School. He didn’t think he would but he was just hoping that maybe, just maybe he would finally find the one that would respect him for who he is and find a real friend here for once.

      Side note: Sorry didn’t want you to think I was expecting special treatment definitely wasn’t wanting that. Tell me if anything else needs changing. Again thanks for reading.

    • #32019

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Woo! Gonna keep this short and simple.
      Proceeds to write a 5 page review…Accepted!

  • #31998

    Luki
    Participant

    So… Did i make it or what? I changed what i had to! XD

  • #31999

    jneff126
    Participant

    Welp i guess ill give this a shot
    Name: Gran (pun on grain)
    Gender: Male
    Race: Human
    Age: 20
    Alignment: Good
    Apperance: http://prntscr.com/fhjl5m
    Personality: A kind but easily agitated person. He has a strong sense of justice and will attempt to take on any opponent that dares threaten the peace of earth. While he has this will to do good he also has his selfish side where he will do just about anything for money and with this it leads to an internal conflict of doing the right thing or trying to make a quick zeni! He also loves to eat food (almost like a saiyan).

    Backstory: Gran was born to a middle class family in age 741. Gran’s father was a average buisnessman and his mother was a kind women who had a great love for martial arts. Gran’s early childhood was surrounded by his mother’s love of martial arts and then at the age of 9 he had gone to watch the 21st Budokai Tenkaichi Tournament and was really impressed with Goku and Krillin! He was impressed that a couple of kids not too much older than he was could be capable martial artists. So then a few days after that he sought out to find some teachers and for the next 3 1/2 years Gran had trained with many teachers. But they couldnt teach him what Goku and Krillin had displayed in the tournament. (He Didnt go and watch the 22nd World Tournament because he was too busy training). Then a little while after Goku had defeated King Piccolo Gran was given a hint on where to find Master Roshi by his one teacher Master Maze (a pun on Maize). Master Maze was a strict teacher and had trained with Roshi for some time. So He told Gran where to find Master Roshi and so Gran went to go become his student and he had trained with Roshi Till the 23rd Budokai Tenkaichi Tournament had been announced. (He had learned the Kamehameha And the Basic Ki Blast but if that wont do for the roleplay you can cut out that he learned these). Sadly though Gran had lost in the preliminaries to Cyborg Tao. He had also stayed to watch the rest of the tournament because he was interested at how much stronger Krillin and Goku had gotten. After seeing the fight with Tien and Tao Gran felt terribly ashamed that he lost to Tao seeing how much of a coward he was and swore to never be beaten by a coward like him again! Then when the fight between Piccolo and Goku ensued he saw how evil Piccolo was and asked Roshi Where he could train to become even stronger to combat evil like what he saw! Roshi told him about Korin and he has trained there ever since. Gran also drank the Ultra Divine Water making him stronger than krillin but weaker than tien (putting him at around a 230 as his power level before Vegeta had landed).

    my discord Jneff126#2027

    • #32014

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      A pretty good backstory, but a few points of confusion. For example, where did he find his first masters. Why did he choose them?

      How did his Master Maze train with Roshi? Roshi took on very few students, Goku and Krillin were the first in a long time. Why did Roshi agree to train Gran?

      As for the Kame Hame Ha, and Ki Blast, maybe keep it at Ki Blast. I’m not saying it’s impossible for him to know it, but we’re a bit skeptical of him learning it that quickly.

      The 23rd Budokai Tenkaichi is pretty good, but him going to train under Korin is a bit iffy itself. Maybe possible, but not 100% sure to be honest.

      Him drinking the Ultra Divine Water would be useless, it doesn’t do anything.

      Your timing for your power is a bit off, I think you mean Raditz, and not Vegeta.

      Improve on those things that I mentioned, maybe write a new application to better expand it, and I’ll check back when I can.

    • #32017

      Lyme
      Participant

      Actually there are two Ultra Divine water types, one is fake, the second made Goku stronger then King Piccolo at full power

  • #32013

    CoolhionX
    Participant

    NAME:CoolhionX
    Age:14
    Gender:Male
    Race:Arcosion
    pls add me on discord CoolhionX#1018 that’s how to notify me

    • #32015

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      420/10 “Should be accepted…”– IGN
      13/37 “Can’t Stump the Trump!”– Game Informer
      6969/6969 “Brought me to tears…”– CCN

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  NegativeBoom.
  • #32034

    Noobly25000
    Participant

    This is Mosan’s sister I don’t have a discord or a jingames account so I’m just submitting it under my brothers and I’ll keep updated from my brothers Discord.

    Name: Modosan (Inspiration from my brothers name yes)

    Gender: Female

    Race: Human

    Age: 12

    Alignment: Good

    BP: 84

    Personality: Not to brilliant but on the other hand a genius when it comes to comedy. She hi to a lot of people because of her out going nature. She is a Mr. Satan Fan girl (when he comes around I understand this is starting at the dead zone movie) Often day dreams not paying attention to a lot of the things going on around her. She loves animals and enjoys living on her farm unlike her brother. She loves to fight and enjoys the adrenaline rush she gets from it and always asks her father to train her. She enjoys being a lot stronger then most people her age because of her advantage of having a father as a martial artists. Her dream is to surpass her older brother despite knowing that this will never happen. She is jealous of her brothers some how unimaginable strength and that he doesn’t even have to try yet he is still stronger then everyone she knows. She’s also confused on why he has a tail and believes it to be somehow connected to his strength.

    General Appearance: She has Ocean Blue eyes and Dark Brown Hair. She also has a small nose and small ears. She is also taller then most people her age.

    Backstory: The farthest back I can remember is when I was training with my brother who at the time wasn’t much stronger then an average kid his age. It didn’t take long before he surpassed all the kids in our training class. My father was teaching kids martial arts to raise more money for the farm. My father thought it would be to dangerous for us to continue to train without protection. When I could finally fight against father when he wasn’t trying was when I was 7 years old. Usually it took kids until they where 10 until they could go up against my father which I was pretty proud about. I supposed it was because I had to learn how to dodge pretty good because of my brothers darn tail. It was like an extra limb. It’s like it had its own reactions like a mind of its own. It was up until I was nine or 10 when I could fight my brother again at his lowest level. It didn’t take long until I could almost fight my father at his best but even then I couldn’t actually best him in a battle. For my 10th birthday my father taught me about Ki. I thought it was only in legends and child story’s but apparently it was real. Some how I still managed to make a joke out of it. My father was impressed that I could learn how to manipulate ki as fast as I did, but yet my brother was still able to do it under a day when it took me almost half a month. I always looked forward to the next world martial arts tournament, I begged my father to let me join the next time it came around. He said next time we got the chance he would let me enter. I still haven’t gotten to do a world martial arts tournament and I feel my father might have forgotten. I might ask him again soon. When I was 12 I went to go see my brother, and that’s when stuff started getting weird again. I’m sure everything will be fine.

    That’s the end thanks for reading.

    • #32035

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Not bad, but not great either.

      Your name is too… similar to Mosan. (I understand you said inspiration, but…)

      Your backstory is fairly bland, and that’s pretty much all I can say. Not much to it.
      Just try to add more to it, make it more interesting.

  • #32050

    Noobly25000
    Participant

    Hey Mosan’s sister back again… yaaaa. Any ways this will hopefully do it. Remember no discord and I’m using my brothers jingames account.

    Name: Modosan (I made it similar to my brothers because we are siblings. I thought it would be a nice touch. I also thought it would make sense. But if that won’t do I’ll just make it Betto)

    Gender: Female

    Race: Human

    Age: 12

    Alignment: Good

    BP: 84

    Personality: Not to brilliant but on the other hand a genius when it comes to comedy. She enjoys talking with people and is very outgoing. She is a Mr. Satan Fan girl (when he comes around I understand this is starting at the dead zone movie) Often day dreams not paying attention to a lot of the things going on around her. She loves animals and enjoys living on her farm unlike her brother. She loves to fight and enjoys the adrenaline rush she gets from it and always asks her father to train her. She enjoys being a lot stronger then most people her age because of her advantage of having a father as a martial artists. Her dream is to surpass her older brother despite knowing that this will never happen. She is jealous of her brothers some how unimaginable strength and that he doesn’t even have to try yet he is still stronger then everyone she knows. She’s also confused on why he has a tail and believes it to be somehow connected to his strength.

    General Appearance: She has Ocean Blue eyes and Dark Brown Hair. She also has a small nose and small ears. She is also taller then most people her age.

    Backstory: The farthest back I can remember is when I was training with my brother who at the time wasn’t much stronger then an average kid his age. It didn’t take long before he surpassed all the kids in our training class. My father was teaching kids martial arts to raise more money for the farm. My father thought it would be to dangerous for us to continue to train without protection. When I could finally fight against father when he wasn’t trying was when I was 7 years old. Usually it took kids until they where 10 until they could go up against my father which I was pretty proud about. I supposed it was because I had to learn how to dodge pretty good because of my brothers darn tail. It was like an extra limb. It’s like it had its own reactions like a mind of its own. It was up until I was nine or 10 when I could fight my brother again at his lowest level. It didn’t take long until I could almost fight my father at his best but even then I couldn’t actually best him in a battle. For my 10th birthday my father taught me about Ki. I thought it was only in legends and child story’s but apparently it was real. Some how I still managed to make a joke out of it. My father was impressed that I could learn how to manipulate ki as fast as I did, but yet my brother was still able to do it under a day when it took me almost half a month. I always looked forward to the next world martial arts tournament, I begged my father to let me join the next time it came around. He said next time we got the chance he would let me enter. I still haven’t gotten to do a world martial arts tournament and I feel my father might have forgotten. I might ask him again soon. Recently I just turned 12 years old and my brother turned 17. He went off to orange star city to join orange star high school and to be honest I want to go to orange star city also. Maybe I’ll get to visit him soon. I heard there are a lot of good martial art classes in orange star city. The high school sounds like a lot of fun also and even living without parents! But again my brother always gets the cool things because he is either older or stronger! But on the bright side of things I am finally able to best my dad in a fight. I’ll ask my father about the next world martial arts tournament and maybe I’ll finally be able to fight someone my own size.

    That’s the end… Again… Thanks for reading… Again… Sorry it’s just kind of unclear what you wanted. I kinda just got a “make it better” without something to go off of or improve on. It was unclear what you wanted from the application. Hopefully I was able to manage. Not sure how interesting I can make my character with her only being human besides the fact she has a half alien older brother. I want my character to be pretty normal kid until she starts fighting along side her older brother during garlic jr and what not. I don’t have a lot to work off of is all. With her being a kid and human in a semi-normal family it’s pretty hard to make it interesting. Obviously things will improve with character development during the roleplay but right now there just isn’t enough to work with who I want my character to be.

    • #32054

      Lyme
      Participant

      One of the problems from before was your name remember that

    • #32057

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      Yea Mosan is the one who suggested the name because our names are actually similar in real life so just thought it be cool if it was in roleplay also. If it won’t do I’ll just make it Betta.

    • #32063

      Zyph
      Participant

      I’d say add a bit more content to your backstory, and as Lyme stated. I understand, that you and Mosan, have similar names irl. But you can still make your name original, it just sounds to me you added “do” in Mo”do”san, you don’t necessarily have to reflect your characters to you guys in real life. But, if you wanna keep that name, you may. Anyways, thats my point of view on it.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 1 week ago by  Zyph.
  • #32055

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Name:zero
    Race:human
    Outfit:jacket and pants,or assassin uniform
    Backstory: he grew up in a class of all sayians.not wanting to be surpassed ,he trained until he f ***ing dropped.one day his friend recognized him training hard and noticed a special ki coming from him.his friend told him to join the league of assassins .my character joined and went through rough training.blinded by his desire to get stronger ,he killed everyone they told him too.his friend got jealous,and challenged zero to a duel sword on sword. Everyone knew that zero was unsurpassed in sword skill.so his friend was quickly disarmed and cut down like a fly.the league disgusted that zero would kill a fellow member ,turned on him.then zero snapped and killed his whole league in a flash of speed and skill. He had killed them all ,until he realized he was laughing .he went and buried his friend and promised to never kill again.
    BP:2000

    • #32058

      Lyme
      Participant

      I am not one to allow applications, but I just have to say that yours is a train wreck, there isn’t any time put into it, and there is no quality, it is way to small, I know for a fact you will be turned down instantly, if they allow you to even try again, then actually try

  • #32056

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Later in the role-playing,his special ki will be explained as him being the original ssj good reincarnated as a human to limit his power.

    • #32059

      Zyph
      Participant

      Denied

      This was god-awful, and Human’s are the easiest application to apply for.
      Zero’s Backstory didn’t make sense at all, and wasn’t understandable, there’s too many grammatical errors . His friend tried to fight him for the most idiotic reason, and Zero killed everyone out of nowhere, and for no reason. Plus you didn’t follow the character submission template, you made your own.

      Now, for my favorite part out of all of this. You pulled shit out of your ass writing this honestly. The “Original SSG” was reincarnated into a Human. Ha-Ha, No. that doesn’t make sense , am sorry. But, it just doesn’t, I assume this was an attempt to get away being a Saiyan. But, like we previously said No, we’re no accepting any saiyans. Or any Saiyan God Reincarnated into a Human.

      This application, was plain awful. I’d suggest make an effort like everyone else, or don’t even try at all.

      • This reply was modified 4 months, 2 weeks ago by  Zyph.
  • #32061

    phoenix416
    Participant

    Name: Pota To
    Gender: Male
    Race: Half-Saiyan
    Age: 15
    Personality: usually very calm/relaxed. Very easy to make friends with, sorta weird though.
    General Appearance: CC outfit (future trunks outfit).
    Backstory: A Half-Saiyan raised on planet Vegeta. Was cast out and shamed by the other saiyans, but landed on earth and started a new life while keeping his saiyan heritage hidden from others and has few friends despite being friendly (mostly because of awkwardness). He wont hesitate to kill those who commit crimes against the universe. He is overall pretty like-able but can be very serious.

    • #32064

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Ok Potato. Your creativity is like mashed potatoes.

      Here’s a Haiku I wrote just for you!

      Your brain is a mush
      You are like mashed potatoes
      Get off this forum

      You get it? Now scram.

      By the way, 15, raised on Planet Vegeta,and half-saiyan? Yeah. No.
      At the time of our roleplay, Vegeta would have been gone for 21 years. You weren’t raised on Vegeta. You aren’t Half-Saiyan, and you are a failure.

      In other words, not to be rude but, fuck off.

    • #32067

      phoenix416
      Participant

      oh I didn’t know planet vegeta was destroyed in the rp

  • #32066

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Can I redo zero please?I’ve learned from my mistake,s

  • #32068

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    I knew his backstory it’s just I didn’t say it the way I wanted too.the ssjgod was really bad alright I’m sorry.but how much detail do I need for a backstory.I just want zero to be an ex-assassin who is unrivaled in sword skill.

  • #32069

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    I can do better I was trying to make a short backstory .but I’m gonna make it long so it isn’t crappy,but can I keep my character youngish and make him intelligent

  • #32070

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Can I my character have a demon mark?

    • #32074

      Zyph
      Participant

      You may, but if it’s a piece of crap, like last time don’t even bother. What’s a demon mark? Well, if your actually gonna do better. Do it, and don’t tell me. Show me.

  • #32075

    Alex
    Participant

    Name: His name is Alex Harrison.
    Gender: He is a Male,
    Race: Alex is a Saiyan
    Age: 21
    Personality: He is Kind, Friendly and Soft. Though he does have a more Darker, Violent side to him.
    General Appearance: He wears a Dark Black Gi with a Blue shirt underbeneath his Gi. He wears Armbands on his hands, his Leggings are also Black, with his Shoes being White, Dark Blue, and Red.
    His hair is Spiky with Most of it sticking up, Only parts of the Front bend downwards, he has Blue eyes and currently has a tail.
    Also, I have a picture of Alex, he was drawn by one of my Friends. It would make it much easier to show you what he looks like with that.

    Backstory: Alex was born recently before the Destruction of Planet Vegeta his father, Marcus, was a Scientist at the time, his Mother a former Lower Class Saiyan took care of Alex while his Father had been busy working on his Research and Theories unlike his Wife Marcus wasn’t always interested in fighting, Alex had more of his Father’s side than his Mothers, however. Marcus had recently discovered that King Vegeta was going to visit Frieza for a “Talk..” Marcus was worried about this, as he also noticed a few Space Pods going far into the Distance, he got suspicious of what was going on… He didn’t like the King, but he knew he couldn’t fight the King without being Killed.
    Marcus’s power level was only around 3210, he knew Frieza is far more powerful than the King, if that “Talk” went south, Marcus thought of a plan to get either, his Wife himself. Or Son off the planet, but he knew that if they went missing, espically himself. It could cause some attention to his family and himself So Marcus went to his Wife and asked her if he could take Alex for a moment, She agreed. Unaware of what Marcus was going to do with Alex. Marcus had already prepared a Space Pod for expeditions towards other Planets or Systems, he was originally going to go onto an expedition on this Lifeful planet called.. Earth, but seeing that it’ll take a while to get permission to go there. He put Alex into the Space Pod, the coordinates were already put into the flight controls, he went to his wife, telling her the truth. At first she couldn’t believe that Marcus was going to send Alex far away, but she also couldn’t believe that things might go south. She saw her child within the Space Pod, yelling at Marcus to get him out. But Marcus wouldn’t, explaining to her that there might be a problem going on with the Planet. She didn’t understand what Marcus had ment, but before she could ask why, Marcus started the Space Pod, it began to go towards Earth. Alex’s Mother, in her new found Rage towards Marcus fought with Marcus knowing that, letting her own Child go into the unknown without her permission, nor even telling her! The area Marcus was in got badly Damaged due to the Fight, Marcus had a higher power level, but he would not fight back, however. Once the fight was over, She flew off, Marcus stared to the ground for a few minutes, he knew he had to get another space pod to catch up with his own son! Meanwhile, King Vegeta was killed by Frieza, and not long after, Bardock had arrived to attempt to end Frieza. During those moments, Marcus had thankfully found one remaining Space Pod… He thought that, once they see the damage done to his Area. They would no doubt put him in prison, or worse, Kill him! So Marcus went off to a planet not far from Planet Vegeta. Alex’s Mother, had tooken a Space Pod earlier to a planet far from Planet Vegeta, she had to let her anger out… When Marcus looked back at the Planet, he saw a Giant Ball crush into the Planet, destroying it.. The debris caused by the Explosion, Threw Marcus’s Space Pod off course for a moment, knocking him out even. Meanwhile Alex’s Space Pod would eventually reach Earth, he would have displayed a slight above intelligence whenever he grown older, he had a taste for fighting as well. He however, focused on Studying and learning new skills on Earth. His power level is only around 16, he hasn’t trained yet. He is leaving the Orange Star High School currently. He usually keeps to himself, he does however act friendly towards his friends. Alex is unaware of his Mother and Father nor is he aware of being a Saiyan,
    despite looking odd with his Tail. People grew used to seeing him having a tail. He was raised by an Family, the only one’s there were two widowers, it was the mother of their two Children and their Father. The mother at first wasn’t sure about Alex, and his odd looking tail. But soon enough, it made the both of them happy. Though they did argue at times about the Tail. But they never decided to cut it off. Thankfully there were curtains within Alex’s room. And most of the time he wouldn’t check to see what’s outside, though. Whenever he saw event’s happening in his local area, he would look down, smiling…

    Basically, in a nutshell. Alex is pretty much a Friendly kind Saiyan who prefers to read and learn new skills.

    His Mother and Father are currently serving within Frieza’s Empire.
    They haven’t gotten back together because of Alex.
    Marcus also know’s how to control the Great Ape form, he had to teach it to his Wife prior to the Destruction of Planet Vegeta, he never got to teach it to Alex.
    Alex is probably going to be like his Father if he ever has children. Just less Research and more Theories.

    • #32076

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Finally, something I can read without cringing!

      Ok.

      1. Saiyans (full blood) are born with Black or Reddish brown hair (not a problem there), and Black eyes. So the blue eyes won’t work… That’s a simple fix.

      2. While your character’s name is mostly fine, we do already have an Alex, so maybe change his first name. As for other saiyans mentioned, specifically Marcus, isn’t a saiyan name. Alex lives on Earth, so he’d only have an earthling name. Marcus is a saiyan, his name should be a vegetable pun.

      The rest of this is fine, and we’re just wanting to see some errors fixed.

  • #32078

    Noobly25000
    Participant

    You guys are probably getting sick and tired of seeing me buuut HEEEEY its me again! Mosan’s sister… Wooooh! Hip hip! *boooo* ok any ways. Hopefully my last attempt at this! Hopefully… Also I made sure to make things connect this time and not be all over the place that way things flow.

    Name: Betta (not important. Don’t really care if it’s like my brothers that was just his idea. To be honest I like this name better. Let me know if I need to change it again.)

    Gender: Female

    Race: Human

    Age: 12

    Alignment: Good

    BP: 84

    Personality: Not to brilliant but on the other hand a genius when it comes to comedy. She enjoys talking with people and is very outgoing. She is a Mr. Satan Fan girl (when he comes around I understand this is starting at the dead zone movie) She will often day dream not paying attention to a lot of the things going on around her. She loves animals and enjoys living on her farm unlike her brother. She loves to fight and enjoys the adrenaline rush she gets from it and always asks her father to train her or just fight with her. She enjoys being a lot stronger then most people her age because of her advantage of having a father as a martial artists. Her dream is to surpass her older brother despite knowing that this will never happen. She is jealous of her brothers some how unimaginable strength and that he doesn’t even have to try yet he is still stronger then everyone she knows. She’s also confused on why he has a tail and believes it to be somehow connected to his strength.

    General Appearance: She has Ocean Blue eyes and Dark Brown Hair. She also has a small nose and small ears. She is also taller then most people her age. She is usually seen wearing her fathers Gi class uniform which is red with their family symbol on the back.

    Backstory: The farthest back I can remember is when I was training with my brother, well half-brother, we don’t actually know his real father but my mom is still his real mom. My brother at the time wasn’t much stronger then an average kid his age but after my father opened his martial art classes that’s when we started noticing things. My father started running martial art classes to raise money for the farm and that’s when I started noticing weird things about my brother, and not only because of that tail. It didn’t take long before he surpassed all the kids in our training class at almost lighting fast speeds, almost inhuman. My father thought it would be to dangerous for us to continue to train without protection so we started wearing pads. When I could finally fight against father when he wasn’t trying was when I was 7 years old. Usually it took kids until they where 10 until they could go up against my father which I was pretty proud about. I supposed it was because I had to learn how to dodge pretty good because of my brothers darn tail. It was like an extra limb. It’s like it had its own reactions like a mind of its own. It wasn’t up until I was nine or 10 when I could fight my brother again at his lowest level. It didn’t take long until I could almost fight my father at his best but even then I couldn’t actually best him in a battle. For my 10th birthday my father taught me about Ki. I thought it was only in legends and child story’s but apparently it was real. Some how I still managed to make a joke out of it. My father was impressed that I could learn how to manipulate ki as fast as I did, but yet my brother was still able to do it under a day when it took me almost half a month. My passion is fighting but of course the one who doesn’t even enjoy it as much as me is the super skilled one. For this reason I always looked forward to the next world martial arts tournament so I could prove my self and I begged my father to let me join the next time it came around. He said next time we got the chance he would let me enter. I still haven’t gotten to do a world martial arts tournament and I feel my father might have forgotten. I might ask him again soon if he doesn’t bring it up because this is getting ridicules I deserve to be in the tournament and I deserve to be stronger then my brother I train the hardest. Recently I just turned 12 years old and my brother turned 17. He went off to orange star city to join orange star high school and to be honest I want to go to orange star city also. Maybe I’ll get to visit him soon. I heard there are a lot of good martial art classes in orange star city. The high school sounds like a lot of fun also and even living without parents! But again my brother always gets the cool things because he is either older or stronger! But on the bright side of things I am finally able to best my dad in a fight. I’ll ask my father about the next world martial arts tournament and maybe I’ll finally be able to fight someone my own size and work up from there. I will get stronger I promise you that!

    End. Just end. Please be the end. It’s the end right?

  • #32079

    Alex
    Participant

    Alright, I could change Alex’s name to Marcus, and change Marcus’s name to Renk, it’s a Lotus Root. Thankfully I made the skin with black eyes.

    • #32080

      Lyme
      Participant

      As I have said before, I am not someone who accepts the applications, I am just someone who likes reading them, and to be honest, I see no problem with yours except the power level. I know it has to be a little high so you could have some use in the story, but when Goku was twelve he had a power level of 10, and he is a saiyan, I would lower it to a at least 15-30, sorry if that is too much of an inconvenience, and don’t let me bring your confidence down! again, your oc is very well made and I do hope you get accepted

    • #32082

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Accepted. We need your discord.

  • #32081

    jneff126
    Participant

    alright try number 2 i added more detail in the parts you said i also removed the ki attacks because seeing your reason i can agree i also removed the multiple masters because it was easier to explain one than multiple
    Name: Gran (pun on grain)
    Gender: Male
    Race: Human
    Age: 20
    Alignment: Good
    Apperance: http://prntscr.com/fhjl5m
    Personality: A kind but easily agitated person. He has a strong sense of justice and will attempt to take on any opponent that dares threaten the peace of earth. While he has this will to do good he also has his selfish side where he will do just about anything for money and with this it leads to an internal conflict of doing the right thing or trying to make a quick zeni! He also loves to eat food (almost like a saiyan).
    Backstory: Gran was born to a middle class family in age 741. Gran’s father was a average buisnessman and his mother was a kind women who had a great love for martial arts. Gran’s early childhood was surrounded by his mother’s love of martial arts and then at the age of 9 he had gone to watch the 21st Budokai Tenkaichi Tournament and was really impressed with Goku and Krillin! He was impressed that a couple of kids not too much older than he was could be capable martial artists. So then a few days after that he asked his mom if she knew where he could get some training. To his luck she had an old friend named Maze (a pun on Maize) she sent Gran to Maze with a giant sum of zeni she had saved up just in case of this situation. She had met Maze when she was a young delivery woman she had delivered food, supplies, etc to him and became good friends with him. Master Maze had accepted Gran as a student and he was a strict teacher and had trained under Roshi for some time in fact he had been a student along side the Ox King and Grandpa Gohan. Then a little while after Goku had defeated King Piccolo Gran was told to seek out Master Roshi by Master Maze. So He told Gran where to find Master Roshi and told him how bad of a lech Roshi was.Gran ended up using up all his money and hiring a beautiful women to come with him to persuade Master Roshi to train him and along side this a letter from Maze as a recommendation. Roshi had galdly accepted Gran and trained him Till the 23rd Budokai Tenkaichi Tournament had been announced. (He did not learn any ki related attacks). As for the girl Gran hired she left a week after coming there roshi was satisfied because he had his “fun”.Sadly though Gran had lost in the preliminaries to Cyborg Tao. He had also stayed to watch the rest of the tournament because he was interested at how much stronger Krillin and Goku had gotten. After seeing the fight with Tien and Tao Gran felt terribly ashamed that he lost to Tao seeing how much of a coward he was and swore to never be beaten by a coward like him again! Then when the fight between Piccolo and Goku ensued he saw how evil Piccolo was and asked Roshi Where he could train to become even stronger to combat evil like what he saw! Roshi told him about Korin. Gran then went too Korin and asked him to train him. Initially Korin had said no but then asked him how he got here and said Master Roshi Sent him. Korin then reads Gran’s mind learning why he wants to be trained and tells Gran if you can prove to me that you want to do the good that you think and say you want to do i will train you. Gran then sets out for 2 months doing good deeds for as many people as possible. What he did first was figuring out why the river water for a near by village stopped flowing. He found the solution fairly fast there was a giant boulder blocking the way and causing the stream to stop its flow. He then tried his hardest to move the giant boulder it took him a few hours to do so but he managed to do so. Next he had to help a man with his farm (the farmer that raditz killed) his farm wasnt able to grow anything making him unable to make money. Gran investigated the reason behind this and found out that there were parasites in the soil where the crops were growing which prevented the crops from growing. He tries to find a solution for it but nothing can be done to get rid of the parasites.So he came up with a different idea and so he had to convince the farmer to move reluctantly the farmer agreed and promised to plow the land for him for free. So Gran plows the entire land for the farmer which takes at least 2 weeks to do so.Then for the next month he helped people with small things such as helping clear some fields for other farms, fixing bridges, stoping animals from attacking people in the cities. After that the next half a month was spent helping a village with a bandit problem they had run into he used the power he learned from Master Roshi to defeat the bandits he did take some injuries from the bandits (for example he got hit by a few stray bullets). After being through this grueling 2 months Korin believed that he was worthy and ready for his training. Gran had taken the journey to drink the Ultra Divine Water (the correct one that nearly killed goku but made him strong enough to beat king piccolo) though nearly killing him it made him much stronger. By this point he is stronger than Krillin but weaker than Tien (putting him at around a 230 as his power level before Raditz had landed).
    my discord Jneff126#2027

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 1 week ago by  jneff126.
    • #32085

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Currently not accepting or denying you, but you are being considered. I’m going to look at your story some more, compare it to others, etc…

      You have a pretty high chance of acceptance, but I want to be sure.

  • #32087

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Name:ichiko(alternative name zero)
    Gender:Male
    Age:14
    Personality:cold,cocky,calculative. He reacts to strangers with a strategic approach due to his assassin training.
    General apperance: teen gohan hair, black gi,sword strapped to his back,and sandals on his feet.
    Backstory:(I’m gonna do this in first person)I didn’t have many hobbies before I started learning how to fight. I came from a privileged family who pretty much gave me everything I wanted. Let’s just say I spent more time with my computer than my actual family. But one day everything changed.it started with the power outage. my dad told me the power would be back on in about a day. I looked at my dad like an idiot and told him “well,what do you expect me to do for a day?”he responded with how about you watch the world martial arts tournament like a normal child”.
    “But being a normal child like you were,is boring . Name one good thing about your childhood that makes yours better than mine” ichiko’s dad paused for a minute and said” Your mother”
    ” Okay dad you won,I’ll go watch the tournament,but you better not be on another mom rant by the time I get back” As ichiko closed the front door behind him,ichiko’s father revealed a smile.
    Ichiko was walking to the martial arts tournament when he started to wonder where this place actually was. He reached in his pocket and it was empty. ichiko face palmed as he realized he forgot his phone. He started to walk back to his house,when he realized that it was going to take to long to get back and he was going to miss the tournament if he took the traditional route home. So on his own intuition , he started going on paths he had never gone on before . He reached an abandoned alleyway when he heard a voice from behind him saying”I think you’ve gone too far ,rich boy”Ichiko turned around to see two older boys wearing hoods,pointing their knifes at him.ichiko not seeing another way out of this dropped his Rolex on the ground and said “take it,just don’t hurt me” the two street boy’s who obviously expected ichiko to react differently started to get jittery.
    “Is this a trick you scum”with his knife pointed closer at ichiko .Ichiko then started rambling like a madman about how they could trust him,when he realized it was too late. He could see it in their eyes,they were as scared of getting caught with the same volume of intensity that ichiko had of getting stabbed by them. So ichiko closed his eyes and thought of how he was finally going to see his mother for the first time. But god had other plans for ichiko,as it turns out someone had heard this transfer. As the first thug thrust his knife at ichiko,a hand caught it. The man who caught looked down at the thug in disgust and put one centered to blow to the thugs gut and sent him flying . The other thug shocked by the display turned and ran. The man looked back and asked ichiko looked at the guy and said”can you teach me how to do that?”
    The man replied”do what?”
    Ichiko replied”don’t act coy you made as hock wave with your hand”
    To be continued backstory part 1
    Did my content improve based on this?

    • #32088

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      It might be an improvement, IF I COULD ACTUALLY READ IT! Any ways I suggest that (even though I’m not staff) that you
      1. Improve spelling and grammar.
      2. Expand a little more on your character and his background. This is way to bland and cliche leading to a lot of it being cringe. Make your character more believable and don’t make him over powered or anything. In fact try to make him weak so you can expand on his strengths in the actual roleplay.
      3. Put down your race. You forgot it.
      Fix some of these things and you might get accepted. Remember don’t be a marry sue. If you don’t know what that is look it up. Any ways best of luck to you.

  • #32089

    Stallord_
    Participant

    Name: Gareth/Garetto
    Gender: Male
    Race: A different variety of saiyan
    Age: 17 terrestrial years/4 years in the time of his home planet
    Alignment: Neutral
    Personality: Not defined. The individual is completely unpredictable, can be kind, joking, proud, angry, resentful and change between them from one moment to another without being noticed, for being a carrier of two souls in a body
    General apperance: Gi of gray training, black clothing of long sleeve under this one, gray training pants, white boots, brown hair, brown eyes, height of 176 cm, weight of 61 kg, black / purple aura. From time to time a mark on the forehead as a symbol of the demon clan.
    Backstory:
    Gareth a young Saiyan of just 17 years of age lives in the Earth, in a village that was in charge to him after the death of its tutor.
    This young saiyajin at the age of 4 years still lived on his home planet, KOI 0204 b, in the Trappist-1 solar system located in galaxy NGC 6822 in universe 10
    In such planet a year is equivalent to almost a million Earth years, such race of saiyajines is very different to the one known in Universe 7, this race has in addition to the ability known like zenkai, an extra ability called takashcá, an extremely powerful blow If applied correctly, similar to the Super God Shock Flash, if in its execution there is an error, the individual who is using that ability could lose the muscular control of his arm by a tear and rupture of the tendons.
    This breed of Saiyans live for an exaggeratedly long time, approximately 52 years of the planet KOI 0204 b, near that age individuals die by a huge deterioration of their organs having made a great physical wear and tear in the fighting.
    The planet KOI 0204 b was threatened by a force of massive destruction, it wanted to extinguish the life in the whole universe, an Arcosiano called Yadorok, with the help of the rest of beings of its race, destroyed the planet and the solar system to which it belonged .
    His father, Gael and his mother, Aricci, sent Gareth to another planet, the original destination was the planet Kepler148-b, a planet with very fit conditions for life, but unfortunately the explosion of the star generated a super nova, doing A rupture in the fabric of space-time, generating a wormhole that would transport Gareth’s ship to the universe 7, arriving at a planet called Earth.
    Gareth landed in a village, not remembering his childhood very well because of the damage to the memory sector in the brain, caused by the rupture in the fabric of space-time.
    In the village, the village leader named Joey, took care of Gareth as if it were his own son, Gareth had a normal development like the other children, with the exception that it had a great combat ability and an extremely large force At the time of throwing a blow.
    With the death of the leader of the village, Gareth had to take charge of the village.
    One day some thieves went to leap out of the village, and Gareth exterminated them mercilessly, since that day the people of the village have feared him.
    As time went by the people of the village were leaving, for fear that Gareth had murdered them.
    At the age of 17 Earth years, (age who lived on Earth from having arrived, in the age of his home planet would still be 4 years), Gareth was already completely alone in a desolate village, lived on the plantations that had Made all the people of the village.
    A few days later, Gareth began to build a developed society where his village was, hoping that someday someone would come back and not be alone anymore.
    Gareth began investigating sombre many things, studied architecture, mechanics, medicine, biology, astronomy, advanced physics and chemistry to develop this super society.
    Studying the theory of relativity, he pointed out that this theory could be applied to create dimensional portals, this reminded him of the rupture in space-time; And with the aid of astronomy, found that a super nova or a large amount of energy emitted in the universe could originate a black hole, similar to a wormhole, that is, a dimensional portal; What the black hole does is throw what it traps in any direction at a great speed without knowing where it is going to stop.
    Knowing all this Gareth began to experiment using unknown metals on Earth, that is, the material with which his ship was built.
    After several months, Gareth managed to open a dimensional portal, but did not dare to enter and then closed the portal.
    A few days later he began to hear strange voices and a rare presence that followed.
    When he realized, he was a demon, the dimensional portal led to hell, from where came this demon called Stallord.
    Gareth decided to open the portal and enter to see what was happening and extermianr as many demons as he could, since in hell he could touch them.
    As he crossed the portal, Gareth saw a great fortress, an infernal empire, entered the fortress and asked the demons that who was their leader, the demons replied: Dabura.
    Gareth went to the main hall, where Dabura the Demon King sat on his throne.
    Gareth told Dabura that he would take Stallord off him, but he did not want to.
    Gareth told him that if he did not he would kill him, but Dabura does not get upset, and decides to fight Gareth.
    Gareth is confident he tries to hit, but Dabura is very powerful, evaded and with a finger on the forehead leaves him unconscious, creating a damn mark on his forehead, where it would originate an evil in Gareth, known as the demon Garetto.
    Gareth did not remember what happened, but he felt stronger.
    Gareth and Garetto share the same body, and can change control to their liking but then lose consciousness, until Gareth decides to assimilate Garetto.
    In time Gareth accepted Garetto, and he could control the memory and strength of this demon.
    Gareth had a brother without knowing it, his name was Narlecks, that’s right. Was, Garetto killed him.
    Gareth had also met a beautiful woman whom he had become fond of, his name was Nusa, so he was murdered by Garetto.
    Gareth had also met a guy named Jeyked, Jeyked said it was a supposed “Kaioshin”, Garetto also tried to kill him but he did not succeed.
    Finally, an Arcosian named Krein, came from the same sector where Gareth’s home planet was located, was one of the Yadorok soldiers, and Garetto also attempted to kill him.
    After an intense fight between Jeyked and Krein against Garetto, Jeyked managed to separate Garetto from Gareth, and Krein killed Garetto, however, Garetto was already part of Gareth, so Gareth still retains the memories, skills, and thinking of Garetto .
    Some of the skills I possessed were: Kiai, mimicry, aura knock, black kamehameha, pit of evil darkness.
    After the death of Garetto, Gareth felt very sorry for what he had done, so he set out on a journey in search of the dragon balls to resurrect his beloved and his brother.
    Jeyked had told him about the dragon balls, some magical balls that when he gathered the 7, you could fulfill any desire.

    • #32093

      Raiton
      Participant

      So I can’t at if you’re accepted or not but no more saiyans… not even sure what a different variety of Saiyan means but yeah no more saiyans half – saiyans or arcosian if I’m correct. Namekians Shinjins are both under represented maybe pick on of those I’m just suggesting.

    • #32100

      Stallord_
      Participant

      When I say different variety of saiyajin, it means that they are saiyajines that had an evolution different from those of the universe 7, these saiyajines have their eyes brown, black, gray and red, and their hair black, brown, white or gray.
      I mean, I’m pure saiyajin, but I need the semi saiyan breed to get the color of my eyes.
      And the Arcosian Krein, is a friend who will soon apply.
      I would put it for him, but unfortunately the history of each one is quite long.

  • #32098

    Alex
    Participant

    My Discord is Alexsquirtle Lecute #4612

  • #32102

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Can I make my story with Minecraft mechanics

  • #32103

    Name: Oozak
    Gender: Male
    Race: Namekian
    Age: 28
    Personality: Oozak is quite social for a namekian but does still like meditating alone. He is seen a trust worthy person who can be seen as being very noble. He similar to a saiyan enjoys fighting and training in order to become stronger. Although Oozak can be ignorant at times tending to only use his own ideas in order to further his goals.
    General Appearance: His whole body is gree, with the lumps being dark yellow and outlined in red. He wears the demon clan trousers and shoes and the namekian shirt.
    Backstory: Oozak like most namekians was born on planet namek. As a child he wanted to become one of the greatest and strongest fighters in his clan in order to make his father (who was one of the strongest of their clans warriors proud), but after Frieza arrived on planet namek his village was raided and his parents were killed. Now being at the age of 19 he was able to fend off most of them. But after sensing large power levels (far above his own) he fled from the village and scoured the planet trying to find and protect other villages and their clans. Time passed and Oozak grew worried that he was the only one left. Then in the distance he saw a namekian with a powerrlevel he thought none of his kind could achieve, this namekian was Piccilo shortly after fusing with Nale. Anger filled up inside of Oozak, if it was possible for this other namekian to become so strong he could train and gain that power too, and finally avenge his fallen comrades and family. Finding a namekian ship, Oozak fled the planet, broken and weary from the guilt of leaving his kind to be killed. But he though to himself, “It is for the greater good of the universe.” Oozak went to many different planets training under each planet slowly going to ones with even more intense gravity in order to train himself. Word eventually reached him that Frieza had been defeated. Oozak after hearing this needed to find the being responsible for this and ask to be trained by them. Hearing that it was a saiyan from earth Oozak made his way to the planet. But the message that he got about Frieza being defeated was given to him too late. Many years had past since that day and what he arrived to see was a being of such immense destruction it made Oozak’s very body tremble, it was Majin Buu. Oozak couldn’t bring out the courage to face such an opponent and once again fled. This caused Oozak to become so flustered about how weak he was and how he wouldn’t have affected the tide of battle, he travelled across the galaxy meeting and training with some of the best fighters and martial artists the galaxy had to offer. He then heard from one of his teachers that a new planet namek had been created and that his people had been transported there. Rushing to his ship he flew to the new planet namek. After finding out about the death of the grand elder he went to talk to the one who would eventually take his place and for him to unlock his hidden potential. Feeling a rush of power flow through him he thanked his people and was told that majin buu had been defeated by the same saiyan who defeated Frieza. Thrilled Oozak yet again got in his ship and headed to earth where he would seek to meet and possibly be trained by the saiyan.

    • #32111

      More on personality: He also has a lot of respect for strong and powerful beings and is willing to train under them in order to become stronger.

    • #32113

      Lyme
      Participant

      First thing I have to say is that this is based on the dragon ball story line, so the namekians are not all warrior’s, and are mostly peacful, second is there was nothing that motivated you to want to become one of the strongest, so why would he want to be? third is at that time of the rp, your oc would be weak and useless, fourth of all, all this shows is how he got stronger and not how he grew as a character

  • #32106

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Backstory: he born of an engineer named Saul and his mother died from child birth. ichiko didnt really care that his mother died because he didn’t really have a chance to get too know her. Plus just having a cool engineering dad was enough. For the most part, ichiko had a fulfilling life except for school. He hated school,it was too easy and it didn’t even let him do any physical activity. Ichiko felt like his friend was lucky he trained at a dojo. Then one summer he asked his dad if he could do take. Martial art classes at the dojo,his dad agreed like he usually did. So when ichiko popped up at the lessons one day,and his friend welcomed him and offered to help him outside of the dojo if he needed it. When he approached the sensei,he was asked did he know of ki. Ichiko at this stage of the story said no. So the sensei explain ki as life energy and something you unlock through nature or internet se focus. the sensei told ichiko to not come back until he had unlocked his ki. Ichiko trie for weeks to unlock his ki and started to wonder if it was even real. His friend from the dojo who saw ichiko struggling with unlocking his ki, proposed an easier method. His friend made a ball of ki and put in his friends hand to hold .by the time the ki ball dissipated,ichiko already knew the feeling of the ki and he started to create a tiny ki ball in his hand. Ichiko ran back to the dojo,to show the sensei that he unlocked his ki. When the sensei saw the ki ball in ichiko hand,he said” now I shall teach you to fight”
    Several weeks pass
    The sensei had challenged ichiko to a fight to see his progress. Ichiko nervous about the fight sparred with his friend excessively. Also,at home he practiced what he could with his ki and found out he could make a ki blade if he put his hand in karate chop motion and charged ki into it.
    Ichiko barely lost his battle against his sensei. The sensei who recognized ichiko’s progress gifted him with a sword and a new gi. He gave Ichiko a quest to find the strongest fighters and fight them until he wins.because he knew he couldn’t teach ichiko much more than he already knew. ichiko said goodbye to his friends and his dad.his dad didn’t take it easy but ichiko promised his dad he would come back(plus he showed his dad his ki blade and said that he couldn’t really stop him)
    To be continued in roleplay hopefully

    • #32121

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      Forget those guys I FLIPPING LOVE IT honestly. I’m not joking I’ll send you a friend request on discord. What’s your discord?

    • #32122

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      I’ll send you the link to the discord once I friend you. I have been given perms by the staff members to invite you.

  • #32109

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Name: ichiko
    Age: 14
    Personality: fun,outgoing,and determined. He’s pretty friendly of others but only respects his people that look strong.
    General apppearence: gi or my Minecraft skin that consists of pants,jacket with red lightning symbol on back,and shoes.
    Backstory is above

    • This reply was modified 4 months, 1 week ago by  God's Flame.
    • #32115

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      You Filthy Ningen
      By: Marcus
      N – Not a Chance! (in hell)
      I – I cannot even begin to fathom the fuckery you’ve made of this backstory!
      N – None has managed to fuck up as you have. (how do you fail at human this much?)
      G – Zeno damn you! I’m getting triggered!
      E – Each attempt at this, you have failed, why try again?
      N – Never again, will we be faced with such garbage of a mortal like yourself, Filthy Ningen.

  • #32116

    Alex
    Participant

    Zamasu’s way of telling you..


    Z – Zero chances of you getting accepted!
    A – Amazing how you’ve opened my eyes towards the Cringe you have shown me!
    M – My GOD! How the fuck did you manage to make this bullshit!
    A – Accept how you’ve managed to fail at this simple Application!
    S – Scathing.. the amount of Fuckery you have managed to make out of this character!
    U – Unacceptable! This is completely Unacceptable! You don’t even know how a Saiyan actually works!

  • #32117

    Name: Oozak
    Gender: Male
    Race: Namekian
    Age: 28
    Personality: Oozak is quite social for a namekian but does still like meditating alone. He is seen a trust worthy person who can be seen as being very noble. He similar to a saiyan enjoys fighting and training in order to become stronger. Although Oozak can be ignorant at times tending to only use his own ideas in order to further his goals.
    General Appearance: His whole body is gree, with the lumps being dark yellow and outlined in red. He wears the demon clan trousers and shoes and the namekian shirt.
    Backstory: Pixar was born into the Dragon clan and was a warrior type Namekian, something being very rare among the name koans as they lived peaceful lives rarely having to fight. But over the years since the passing of Nail fusing with Piccilo a squadron of warrior type name namekians were built up and trained in case an event similar to Friezas arrival were to occur, because of this these few individuals were trained in the early years of their childhood in order to make sure they could face most of their enemies. Oozak although one of the most keen, was slow when it came to training an improvement, this meant out of all of his fellow warriors he had to train the hardest to keep up. One day when he was training by himself by the edge of the village he thought to himself, “Why am I doing this, what purpose do I have to keep training, we have not had a single disaster on the planet since Frieza invaded our original home, is this all for nothing.” Seeking wisdom and a purpose he went to the elder of the dragon clan and asked for his wisdom on the subject. The elder lowered his hand and placed it gently onto Oozak’s head. “Why do you train my child? Why in this era of peace and prosperity?” Oxalis replied, “I just don’t see the point in wasting my precious time on training in order to face something that may never come.” The elder replied with a clam tone, “This is not about you Oozak, this is about the fate of our people, back when Frieza invaded our people could not predict that it would happen. We were not prepared and because of that our people suffered. Until you can accept that your purpose is to protect the good and innocent against something that may never come. You will never have a purpose and never show growth in strength my child.” Oozak left the elder and walked out into the vast fields of names, but then hearing a scream in the distance he flew over to see what had happened, a young namekian dangled by a cliff screaming for assistance, the child slipped and fell but as quickly as he heard the scream Oozak caught the young child bringing him back to the village. After letting the child go, a smile shone over his face, “This is what I am meant to do, prepare my self for anything that could happen, I feel it, a sense of purpose.” Rushing back to the elder he shouted, “I think I realise it now, why I’m hear what I’m doing, not just for our people but for all the good people in the universe.” The elder placed his hand again gently on Oozaks head suddenly a bright white aura surrounds Oozaks body and a overwhelming pool of energy spills out of him. “I have unleashed some of your hidden potential my child, your strength has increased greatly, but this is at a cost, I will send you to earth in order to experience all that the two namekians Kami and Piccilo once did in order to show to you that your purpose is not just meant for hear and that there will always be evil lurking in the dark corners of the universe. This strength I gift to you will help you combat that evil, you were not meant to just protect us Oozak, but the universe, I can see it within you, the burning passion of fighting and protecting those of good, now go experience the true dangers out there and know what it truly means to be a warrior namekian.” Oozak then left planet Namek in order to go to earth and to gain a better sense of his purpose and in order to grow stronger in order to defeat the evil that tries to envelop the world as we know it and to train and to become stronger in order to combat that evil.

    • #32120

      Sorry I repeated myself at the end about him training on earth to grow stronger my mistake.

    • #32135

      Lyme
      Participant

      a lot better, fix the grammar issues, spell the characters name correctly, and maybe add a little bit more content, and you might be accepted! also, in the beginning of your backstory you accidentally called your oc Pixar

  • #32123

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    My discord is Thebest27

  • #32124

    Alex
    Participant

    You need to put your tag in as well.
    Before anyone can invite you. That’s how it identifies you from another Thebest27.

  • #32125

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    #8599

  • #32126

    Rin
    Participant

    Can’t wait til more Half-Saiyan Roles pop up 😉

    • #32129

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Listen pal, half-saiyan slots will not be opening up anytime soon.
      Probably not going to ever.

      If you wanna join, choose a different race.

      Races you can apply for atm:

      Human
      Namekian
      Majin
      Demon
      Shinjin

      We will not accept ANY half-saiyan, saiyan, or arcosians.
      We are nearing the end of accepting applicants anyways.
      We have 2 slots left.
      That is it.

  • #32127

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Did I get kicked from the discord.

  • #32128

    Alex
    Participant

    You were kicked as you weren’t even actually Accepted in the first place. Since you kept trying and trying with bad applications, we had enough of these bad attempts. So we put you in, and kicked you off. You weren’t even accepted at all, it was a lie.

  • #32130

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Well no one tried to helpfully criticize my story. All guys did was call it trash.

  • #32131

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    You guys could’ve just told me I wasn’t in.why did you guys have noobly lie to me about me being accepted.

  • #32132

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    It was pointless anyway.I had no chance of being accepted since everything about my character in your eyes is crap.

  • #32133

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Whatever .I guess their’s no point in hanging on to the living world. This was all I had left and you took it from me.so I’ve set my computer to auto screenshot after I hang my self. Good bye asshhole,see you on the other side.
    <im

    • #32134

      Lyme
      Participant

      Bye! have a safe trip to nowhere cause all you are doing is trying to make us look bad! now why don’t you just stop trying to make us pity you and go do something else, you didn’t have to join the rp

    • #32136

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      Listen. I understand you’re upset.

      But.
      How DARE you.
      To even USE suicide as a way to make people feel bad?
      I’ll let you know, I was suicidal in the past, I made it through.
      I have friends that are, or were, suicidal.

      How FUCKING dare you?

      You’re literal human trash.
      If you do die, I really don’t fucking care.
      Once again.

      HOW DARE YOU?

  • #32138

    Rin
    Participant

    Name: Pyro

    Gender: Male

    Race: Demon

    Age: 17

    Allignment: Neutral evil (He kills only when he wants to)

    Personality: Pyro is not a crazy killer but, If you do anything to make him angry he will kill you in an instant. Pyro is very anti-social so he doesn’t talk much or like alot of socail things. He doesn’t like the fact he is a Demon so he tries not to embrace it but when he gets angry his demon side fully comes out.

    General Appearence: Pyro has human colored skin, Red eyes, and Deep black horns. He has white spiky hair. He has a Black trench coat and a ripped gray scarf. Pyro has black marking on his Chest and Shoulders. He has scars down his back, legs and arms. He carries a scythe on his back everywhere he goes.

    Backstory: A King Demon by the name of Abaddon was feared most deamons. He Chose Astarte a queen of spirits to have a child with. He arranged a marrage and soon had a kid. After the kid was born Abaddon Killed Astarte. Abaddon chose to name the kid Pyro as a fit for being his successor. Pyro tried to play with the other demons but got rejected as Pyro was feared because he resembled his father and people wanted nothing to do with him. Pyro soon got used to people picking on him at the age of 6. He trained most of the time while he was in the demon realm because, he has nothing to do. Pyro had no one that wanted to be his friend so he was alone all through out his life. At the age of 7 Pyro gain a incredible hate for his father relaising what he did to his mother. Pyro was beat by his father everyday giving him scars as training to get used to pain. No one would stop him because no one wanted to mess with his father. Pyro kept trying to find friends but there still was no luck. As soon as people saw him they ran in terror hoping his dad wouldn’t come. Pyro attempted to kill his father at the age of 10 but failed and put in a cage as a way of punishment. He was given a thing of food every 2 weeks to get him by. Pyro broke out of the cage about a year later. He hated everyone for not helping him for when he needed it. He soon grew murderous towards everyone that tried to stop him. People seen him comming down and ran away. Pyro ignored them and ran. He soon found a exit leading to a place called earth. Pyro didn’t want to look like a demon. He found a guy with a scarf and a trenchcoat. He killed them for it and ran to the exit. Pyro got blood on the scarf so he ripped the pieces with blood out. He put on the trench coat and scarf hoping no one would recognize him in the place he was going. He tried to hide everything that shown he was a demon but could not hide his horns as much as he tried. He kept running and later got to the exit. There was a teleport pad. He stood on it and pressed the button. He was transmitted to earth.
    Pyro Started his journey on earth at the age of 11. No one really seemed to recognize him they just thought it was a little cosplay he was doing. Pyro found a weapon shop in village called Orham. He looked around and seen a weird scythe that was glowing. He asked the man about it and the shop keeper said it was a cursed scythe that was found years ago. Anyone that tried to use it was found dead. Pyro asked the man if he could have it and the man replied saying it was suicide. Pyro insisted he would take it because he has seen a scythe almost like it but a different color in his fathers room. The Shop keeper later let Pyro take the scythe but hated to do so. Pyro was testing the scythe and it showed huge amounts of power. Pyro found a weapon trap that was hanging the scythe up and took it. He put the scythe on his back and started out of the village. He walked to a mountain a few miles away and found a little cave he could hang out. Pyro wanted to try out the scythe so he took it off his back and started using it. It cut straight through the stone in the mountain. Pyro seemed to be able to use the scythe pretty well. Pyro was walking wandering around for about a year learning to use the scythe of his until he found something that caught his eye in a town. He found a man talking about Ki to his friend. Pyro ease dropped on the conversation trying to get to know as much as he could. He soon figured out how to use his ki. He made a black ki ball about the size of his hand. It exploded making the men run knowing they were getting spied on. So Pyro wandered around kept trying to use ki. He lied down in random places just to sleep. He would sleep in a tree, on the grass, in a cave, on a rock, wherever. He could only make little Ki blasts at the beginning. He soon was able to make a beam and a wave. He was so excited that he learned this new power it was almost all he did. At the age of 14 Pyro made a little fort out of trees. He used his scythe to cut them down and picked them up. He gathered tons of logs over time and later grew tons of strength doing it. Pyro decided to train. Pyro trained his strength, Endurance, and Ki control. At the age of 15 Pyro soon discovered a way of flying. Some Hikers tried to talk to Pyro trying to get him to have a house. Pyro ignored them and kept training. He trained Ki control and could now form Lasers and Disks aswell. He held out a finger and gave a deadly small laser a try. He shot a black laser out of his finger making a whole all the way through the mountain. Pyro was impressed by what he was accomplishing. He loved being out and not bothered by anyone. He hated life in the Demon realm and wish he had ran away sooner. Pyro soon developed a skill from his mother which allowed him to see spirits. He became aware of the dead without even knowing them. He could see them but not interact. He could switch the ability on and off but he never knew where it came from. Pyro tried not to worry about it too much but he could use it if he really needed to as it cost alot of his stamina. He kept training til the Age of 17. He decided he should go out and see what he could discover instead of being cooped up in a tiny place. He destroyed his house and started off on his Journey.

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  • #32140

     
       
    Name: Oozak
    Gender: Male
    Race: Namekian
    Age: 28
     
    Personality: Oozak is quite social for a namekian but does still like meditating alone. He is seen a trustworthy person who can be seen as being very noble. He similar to a saiyan enjoys fighting and training in order to become stronger. Although Oozak can be ignorant at times tending to only use his own ideas in order to further his goals.
     
    General Appearance: His whole body is green, with the lumps being dark yellow and outlined in red. He wears the demon clan trousers and shoes and the namekian shirt.
     
    Backstory: Oozak was born into the Dragon clan and was a warrior type Namekian, something being very rare among the name koans as they lived peaceful lives rarely having to fight. But over the years since the passing of Nail fusing with Piccolo a squadron of warrior type name namekians were built up and trained in case an event similar to Frieza’s arrival were to occur, because of this these few individuals were trained in the early years of their childhood in order to make sure they could face most of their enemies. Oozak although one of the most keen, was slow when it came to training an improvement, this meant out of all of his fellow warriors he had to train the hardest to keep up. One day when he was training by himself by the edge of the village he thought to himself, “Why am I doing this, what purpose do I have to keep training, we have not had a single disaster on the planet since Frieza invaded our original home, is this all for nothing.” Seeking wisdom and a purpose he went to the elder of the dragon clan and asked for his wisdom on the subject. The elder lowered his hand and placed it gently onto Oozak’s head. “Why do you train my child? Why in this era of peace and prosperity?” Oxalis replied, “I just don’t see the point in wasting my precious time on training in order to face something that may never come.” The elder replied with a clam tone, “This is not about you Oozak, this is about the fate of our people, back when Frieza invaded our people could not predict that it would happen. We were not prepared and because of that our people suffered. Until you can accept that your purpose is to protect the good and innocent against something that may never come, you will never have a purpose and never show growth in strength my child.” Oozak left the elder and walked out into the vast fields of names, but then hearing a scream in the distance he flew over to see what had happened, a young namekian dangled by a cliff screaming for help, the child slipped and fell but as quickly as he heard the scream Oozak caught the young child but just beside the child another one fell into the depths of the cliff killing the child and ending its life. Dropping the child off quickly at the village Oozak fell to the ground stricken with grief and anger, about how he wasn’t quick enough to save that child from death, about how he wasn’t prepared enough to face that event. A tear slipped down Oozak’s eye while he gritted his teeth in anger. But then he face turned from anger to a neutral painless expression. He had now figured out what his life of training was meant for, in order for him to be prepared enough to face these kind of events, to train to be quick enough to save that child, “This is what I am meant to do, prepare myself for anything that could happen, I feel it, a sense of purpose.” Rushing back to the elder he shouted, “I think I realise it now, why I’m hear, what I’m doing, not just for our people but for all the good people in the universe.” The elder placed his hand again gently on Oozaks head suddenly a bright white aura surrounds Oozaks body and a overwhelming pool of energy spills out of him. “I have unleashed some of your hidden potential my child, your strength has increased greatly, but this is at a cost, I will send you to earth in order to experience all that the two namekians Kami and Piccolo once did in order to show to you that your purpose is not just meant for hear and that there will always be evil lurking in the dark corners of the universe. This strength I gift to you will help you combat that evil, you were not meant to just protect us Oozak, but the universe, I can see it within you, the burning passion of fighting and protecting those of good, now go experience the true dangers out there and know what it truly means to be a warrior namekian.” Oozak then left planet Namek in order to go to earth and to gain a better sense of his purpose and in order to grow stronger in order to defeat the evil that tries to envelop the world as we know it. In the ship Oozak looked out of the window back at his planet gripping the side of a chair. “I will become stronger, and I will make sure I can face any problem head on, because that is my purpose.” Oozak then put on his weighted clothing and then begun his training aboard his ship, wasting some time for him as he traveled to earth and to help him grow in strength. As he begun to train a smirk appeared on his face which turned into a smile, showing his excitement on arriving at earth and finding out what it truly means to be a defender of the universe.

    • #32141

      I have edited out all the grammar and miss spellings and have added a bit more content to it now.

    • #32142

      The reason for him wearing demon clan trousers and shoes and being part of the dragon clan is simply because the only namekian clothes on earth were either styled after or found to be part of the demon clan as they were styled after Piccolo’s clothes which he has worn since the early days of his existence.

    • #32148

      Sorry again I have decided to change the gi of my character in order to make his look seem more unique to him as a character. He wears the uub chest, the hercule legs, namekian shoes and the #6 white bodysuit.

    • #32160

      Discord Client #6933

  • #32147

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Hey guys,sorry for the suicide trolling that was wrong.but I’m gonna try to leave this post on a good card hopefully

  • #32149

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Also, boom.I’m sorry for making you and your friends suicidal phase look minor. My deepest apologies.

    • #32153

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      I’m sorry also. We all did some bad things we are not proud of. It was my idea to do it and I am EXTREMELY sorry. A lot of bad things happened because of it and I really hope you can forgive us.

    • #32154

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      You apologizing means a lot. Thank you.

    • #32155

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      And knowing you are unharmed is also a big releaf.

  • #32157

    Rin
    Participant

    I’m applying for a Demon race now since Half-Saiyan won’t be opened. Wish me luck!

  • #32158

    Rin
    Participant

    Name: Pyro

    Gender: Male

    Race: Demon

    Age: 17

    Allignment: Neutral evil (Kills only when he wants to)

    Personality: Pyro is not a crazy killer but, If you do anything to make him angry he will kill you in an instant. Pyro is very anti-social so he doesn’t talk much or like alot of social things. He doesn’t like the fact he is a Demon so he tries not to embrace it but when he gets angry his demon side fully comes out.

    General Appearance: Pyro has human colored skin, Red eyes, and Deep black horns. He has white spiky hair. He has a Black trench coat and a ripped gray scarf. Pyro has black marking on his Chest and Shoulders. He has scars down his back, legs and arms. He carries a scythe on his back everywhere he goes as saftey.

    Backstory: A King Demon by the name of Abaddon was feared most demons. He Chose Astarte a queen of spirits to have a child with. He arranged a marrage and soon had a kid. After the kid was born Abaddon Killed Astarte. Abaddon chose to name the kid Pyro as a fit for being his successor. Pyro tried to play with the other demons but got rejected as Pyro was feared because he resembled his father and people wanted nothing to do with him. Pyro soon got used to people picking on him at the age of 6. He trained most of the time while he was in the demon realm because, he has nothing to do. Pyro had no one that wanted to be his friend so he was alone all through out his life. At the age of 7 Pyro gain a incredible hate for his father relaising what he did to his mother. Pyro was beat by his father everyday giving him scars as training to get used to pain. No one would stop him because no one wanted to mess with his father. Pyro kept trying to find friends but there still was no luck. As soon as people saw him they ran in terror hoping his dad wouldn’t come. Pyro attempted to kill his father at the age of 10 but failed and put in a cage as a way of punishment. He was given a thing of food every 2 weeks to get him by. Pyro broke out of the cage about a year later. He hated everyone for not helping him for when he needed it. He soon grew murderous towards everyone that tried to stop him. People seen him coming down and ran away. Pyro ignored them and ran. He soon found a exit leading to a place called earth. Pyro didn’t want to look like a demon. He found a guy with a scarf and a trench coat. He killed them for it and ran to the exit. Pyro got blood on the scarf so he ripped the pieces with blood out. He put on the trench coat and scarf hoping no one would recognize him in the place he was going. He tried to hide everything that shown he was a demon but could not hide his horns as much as he tried. He kept running and later got to the exit. There was a teleport pad. He stood on it and pressed the button. He was transmitted to earth.
    Pyro Started his journey on earth at the age of 11. No one really seemed to recognize him they just thought it was a little cosplay he was doing. Pyro found a weapon shop in village called Orham. He looked around and seen a weird scythe that was glowing. He asked the man about it and the shop keeper said it was a cursed scythe that was found years ago. Anyone that tried to use it was found dead. Pyro asked the man if he could have it and the man replied saying it was suicide. Pyro insisted he would take it because he has seen a scythe almost like it but a different color in his fathers room. The Shop keeper later let Pyro take the scythe but hated to do so. Pyro was testing the scythe and it showed huge amounts of power. Pyro found a weapon trap that was hanging the scythe up and took it. He put the scythe on his back and started out of the village. He walked to a mountain a few miles away and found a little cave he could hang out. Pyro wanted to try out the scythe so he took it off his back and started using it. It cut straight through the stone in the mountain. Pyro seemed to be able to use the scythe pretty well. Pyro was walking wandering around for about a year learning to use the scythe of his until he found something that caught his eye in a town. He found a man talking about Ki to his friend. Pyro ease dropped on the conversation trying to get to know as much as he could. He soon figured out how to use his ki. He made a black ki ball about the size of his hand. It exploded making the men run knowing they were getting spied on. So Pyro wandered around kept trying to use ki. He lied down in random places just to sleep. He would sleep in a tree, on the grass, in a cave, on a rock, wherever. He could only make little Ki blasts at the beginning. He soon was able to make a beam and a wave. He was so excited that he learned this new power it was almost all he did. At the age of 14 Pyro made a little fort out of trees. He used his scythe to cut them down and picked them up. He gathered tons of logs over time and later grew tons of strength doing it. Pyro decided to train. Pyro trained his strength, Endurance, and Ki control. At the age of 15 Pyro soon discovered a way of flying. Some Hikers tried to talk to Pyro trying to get him to have a house. Pyro ignored them and kept training. He trained Ki control and could now form Lasers and Disks as well. He held out a finger and gave a deadly small laser a try. He shot a black laser out of his finger making a whole all the way through the mountain. Pyro was impressed by what he was accomplishing. He loved being out and not bothered by anyone. He hated life in the Demon realm and wish he had ran away sooner. Pyro soon developed a skill from his mother which allowed him to see spirits. He became aware of the dead without even knowing them. He could see them but not interact. He could switch the ability on and off but he never knew where it came from. Pyro tried not to worry about it too much but he could use it if he really needed to as it cost alot of his stamina. He kept training til the Age of 17. He decided he should go out and see what he could discover instead of being cooped up in a tiny place. He destroyed his house and started off on his Journey.

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    • This reply was modified 4 months, 1 week ago by  Rin.
    • #32162

      Rin
      Participant

      Edited version such as Spelling errors, and Gi Change.
      ————————————————————————————————Name: Pyro

      Gender: Male

      Race: Demon

      Age: 17

      Alignment: Neutral evil (He only Kills when he wants to)

      Personality: Pyro is not a crazy killer but, If you do anything to make him angry he will kill you in an instant. Pyro is very anti-social so he doesn’t talk much or like a lot of social things. He doesn’t like the fact he is a Demon so he tries not to embrace it but when he gets angry his demon side fully comes out.

      General Appearance: Pyro has human colored skin, Red eyes, and Deep black horns. He has white spiky hair. He has a black t shirt and a Capsule corp jacket and black pants. Pyro has black marking on his Chest and Shoulders. He has scars down his back, legs and arms. He carries a scythe on his back everywhere he goes.

      Backstory: A King Demon by the name of Abaddon was feared most demons. He Chose Astarte a queen of spirits to have a child with. He arranged a marriage and soon had a kid. After the kid was born Abaddon Killed Astarte. Abaddon chose to name the kid Pyro as a fit for being his successor. Pyro tried to play with the other demons but got rejected as Pyro was feared because he resembled his father and people wanted nothing to do with him. Pyro soon got used to people picking on him at the age of 6. He trained most of the time while he was in the demon realm because, he has nothing to do. Pyro had no one that wanted to be his friend so he was alone all throughout his life. At the age of 7 Pyro gain a incredible hate for his father realizing what he did to his mother. Pyro was beat by his father every day giving him scars as training to get used to pain. No one would stop him because no one wanted to mess with his father. Pyro kept trying to find friends but there still was no luck. As soon as people saw him they ran in terror hoping his dad wouldn’t come. Pyro attempted to kill his father at the age of 10 but failed and put in a cage as a way of punishment. He was given a thing of food every 2 weeks to get him by. Pyro broke out of the cage about a year later. He hated everyone for not helping him for when he needed it. He soon grew murderous towards everyone that tried to stop him. People seen him coming down and ran away. Pyro ignored them and ran. He soon found a exit leading to a place called earth. Pyro didn’t want to look like a demon. He found a guy with a scarf and a trench coat. He killed them for it and ran to the exit. Pyro got blood on the scarf so he ripped the pieces with blood out. He put on the trench coat and scarf hoping no one would recognize him in the place he was going. He tried to hide everything that shown he was a demon but could not hide his horns as much as he tried. He kept running and later got to the exit. There was a teleport pad. He stood on it and pressed the button. He was transmitted to earth.
      Pyro Started his journey on earth at the age of 11. No one really seemed to recognize him they just thought it was a little cosplay he was doing. Pyro found a weapon shop in village called Orham. He looked around and seen a weird scythe that was glowing. He asked the man about it and the shopkeeper said it was a cursed scythe that was found years ago. Anyone that tried to use it was found dead. Pyro asked the man if he could have it and the man replied saying it was suicide. Pyro insisted he would take it because he has seen a scythe almost like it but a different color in his father’s room. The Shopkeeper later let Pyro take the scythe but hated to do so. Pyro was testing the scythe and it showed huge amounts of power. Pyro found a weapon hook that was hanging the scythe up and took it. He put the scythe on his back and Went to a clothing store. He found a Capsule Corp Jacket and a Black t shirt. He asked the lady if he could have it and she said he could mainly cause it looked like he had no other clothes. Pyro put on the new jacket and t shirt and took off the scarf then started out of the village. He walked to a mountain a few miles away and found a little cave he could hang out. Pyro wanted to try out the scythe so he took it off his back and started using it. It cut straight through the stone in the mountain. Pyro seemed to be able to use the scythe pretty well. Pyro was walking wandering around for about a year learning to use the scythe of his until he found something that caught his eye in a town. He found a man talking about Ki to his friend. Pyro eavesdropped on the conversation trying to get to know as much as he could. He sooned figured out how to use his ki. He made a black ki ball about the size of his hand. It exploded making the men run knowing they were getting spied on. So Pyro wandered around kept trying to use ki. He lied down in random places just to sleep. He would sleep in a tree, on the grass, in a cave, on a rock, wherever. He could only make little Ki blasts at the beginning. He soon was able to make a beam and a wave. He was so excited that he learned this new power it was almost all he did. At the age of 14 Pyro made a little fort out of trees. He used his scythe to cut them down and picked them up. He gathered tons of logs over time and later grew tons of strength doing it. Pyro decided to train. Pyro trained his strength, Endurance, and Ki control. At the age of 15 Pyro soon discovered a way of flying. Some Hikers tried to talk to Pyro trying to get him to have a house. Pyro ignored them and kept training. He trained Ki control and could now form Lasers and Disks as well. He held out a finger and gave a deadly small laser a try. He shot a black laser out of his finger making a whole all the way through the mountain. Pyro was impressed by what he was accomplishing. He loved being out and not bothered by anyone. He hated life in the Demon realm and wish he had ran away sooner. Pyro soon developed a skill from his mother which allowed him to see spirits. He became aware of the dead without even knowing them. He could see them but not interact. He could switch the ability on and off but he never knew where it came from. Pyro tried not to worry about it too much but he could use it if he really needed to as it cost a lot of his stamina. He kept training til the Age of 17. He decided he should go out and see what he could discover instead of being cooped up in a tiny place. He destroyed his house and started off on his Journey.

      Discord Client #3476

  • #32163

    Shiny
    Participant

    Alright, so I can’t accept you or deny, as I lack permission, however I have some questions. For one, you keep saying everyone didn’t go near him because they were afraid of his father. However, you said he was used to being picked on by age six. It is not good to have confliction in your backstory. And when you said that some hikers came and tried to get him a house, you never gave a reason why the hikers should care, which makes that part a little weird, especially because that little section has little to do with the backstory as a whole. Another question, why does Pyro want to get stronger? He seems to almost constantly be training, but why? And why does he hate being a demon? Also, why did he develop the ability to see spirits? You said he got it from his mother, but how? Why did he gain this ability from his mother? Finally, I would suggest running your application through a spell checker and a grammar checker, as there are quite a few mistakes.

    • #32164

      Rin
      Participant

      Thank you I will use your Help to make it better.

    • #32167

      Shiny
      Participant

      No problem! Remembe, demon is one of the hardest races to apply for!

  • #32165

    Name: Oozak
    Gender: Male
    Race: Namekian
    Age: 28
     
    Personality: Oozak is quite social for a namekian but does still like meditating alone. He is seen a trustworthy person who can be seen as being very noble. He similar to a saiyan enjoys fighting and training in order to become stronger. Although Oozak can be ignorant at times tending to only use his own ideas in order to further his goals.
     
    General Appearance: His whole body is green, with the lumps being dark yellow and outlined in red. He wears the uub chest, the hercule legs, namekian shoes and the #6 white bodysuit.
     
    Backstory: Oozak was born into the Dragon clan and was a warrior type Namekian, something being very rare among the name koans as they lived peaceful lives rarely having to fight. But over the years since the passing of Nail fusing with Piccolo a squadron of warrior type name namekians were built up and trained in case an event similar to Frieza’s arrival were to occur, because of this these few individuals were trained in the early years of their childhood in order to make sure they could face most of their enemies. Oozak although one of the most keen, was slow when it came to training an improvement, this meant out of all of his fellow warriors he had to train the hardest to keep up. One day when he was training by himself by the edge of the village he thought to himself, “Why am I doing this, what purpose do I have to keep training, we have not had a single disaster on the planet since Frieza invaded our original home, is this all for nothing.” Seeking wisdom and a purpose he went to the elder of the dragon clan and asked for his wisdom on the subject. The elder lowered his hand and placed it gently onto Oozak’s head. “Why do you train my child? Why in this era of peace and prosperity?” Oxalis replied, “I just don’t see the point in wasting my precious time on training in order to face something that may never come.” The elder replied with a clam tone, “This is not about you Oozak, this is about the fate of our people, back when Frieza invaded our people could not predict that it would happen. We were not prepared and because of that our people suffered. Until you can accept that your purpose is to protect the good and innocent against something that may never come, you will never have a purpose and never show growth in strength my child.” Oozak left the elder and walked out into the vast fields of namek, but then hearing a scream in the distance he flew over to see what had happened, a young namekian dangled by a cliff screaming for help, the child slipped and fell but as quickly as he heard the scream Oozak caught the young child but just beside the child another one fell into the depths of the cliff killing the child and ending its life. Dropping the child off quickly at the village Oozak fell to the ground stricken with grief and anger, about how he wasn’t quick enough to save that child from death, about how he wasn’t prepared enough to face that event. A tear slipped down Oozak’s eye while he gritted his teeth in anger. But then he face turned from anger to a neutral painless expression. He had now figured out what his life of training was meant for, in order for him to be prepared enough to face these kind of events, to train to be quick enough to save that child, “This is what I am meant to do, prepare myself for anything that could happen, I feel it, a sense of purpose.” Rushing back to the elder he shouted, “I think I realise it now, why I’m hear, what I’m doing, not just for our people but for all the good people in the universe.” The elder placed his hand again gently on Oozaks head suddenly a bright white aura surrounds Oozaks body and a overwhelming pool of energy spills out of him. “I have unleashed some of your hidden potential my child, your strength has increased greatly, but this is at a cost, I will send you to earth in order to experience all that the two namekians Kami and Piccolo once did in order to show to you that your purpose is not just meant for hear and that there will always be evil lurking in the dark corners of the universe. This strength I gift to you will help you combat that evil, you were not meant to just protect us Oozak, but the universe, I can see it within you, the burning passion of fighting and protecting those of good, now go experience the true dangers out there and know what it truly means to be a warrior namekian.” Oozak then left planet Namek in order to go to earth and to gain a better sense of his purpose and in order to grow stronger in order to defeat the evil that tries to envelop the world as we know it. In the ship Oozak looked out of the window back at his planet gripping the side of a chair. “I will become stronger, and I will make sure I can face any problem head on, because that is my purpose.” Oozak then put on his weighted clothing and then begun his training aboard his ship, wasting some time for him as he traveled to earth and to help him grow in strength. As he begun to train a smirk appeared on his face which turned into a smile, showing his excitement on arriving at earth and finding out what it truly means to be a defender of the universe.

    Discord client #6933

    • #32166

      I am reposting what I put earlier as I made it cleaner as it makes the application look cleaner. Thank you.

  • #32168

    Shiny
    Participant

    Members of the dragon clan are people like Kami and Dende. Warriors don’t come from the dragon clan, they come from the warrior clan.

    • #32169

      Yes that’s the point it is very rare to have a warrior type name loan be born into the dragon clan, this is why there was a squadron. I stated that it was rare for a warrior type Namekian to be born but it was my fault not to mention that it was rare for the dragon clan.

    • #32170

      And I mean warrior TYPE name koan not a namekian from the warrior clan. The warrior type namekians differ slightly as they tend to have larger muscles and a born more powerful. Therefore it could make sense for one to be born outside of the warrior clan.

    • #32172

      Lyme
      Participant

      A warrior type isn’t rare to be born in the dragon clan, in fact he would just be put into the warrior clan **Like all the other ones**

  • #32173

    God’s Flame
    Participant

    Name: bonito
    Race:human
    Personality: he likes to read novels and is determined to protect everyone who matters to him and to exterminate anyone who threatens his place to belong. he is quite smart,before the accident,he was going to college to study Japnenese literature.
    Age:18
    Geeral Appearance:black hoodie and white hair. Has a gray eye and a demon eye. Has black adida sneakers.
    Backstory:Bonito’s mother abused him excessively,but he always viewed the good side of her. Bonito remembered how she always used to read books to him. Around the age of 4,his mother died from working herself to death for bonitos aunt. For this bonito resented his aunt and vowed to never see him self reduced to that. When bonito was 14 years older,he used his genius and love of Japanese novels to get a grant for kamii university . Bonito met a girl named Mize at a coffee shop and bonded over their mutual love of books, they planned a date soon after their meeting. They spent the day together with nothing out of the ordinary happening until that night. Mize being afraid got bonito to escort her back home down a deserted area where she revealed herself to be a human eating demon.
    Bonito struggled against her,but mize was too strong and easily pierced bonitos abdomen with her demon hand claws. Before mize could finish him off,multiple steel beams fell from the construction area above fell onto Mize ,crushing her. The disturbance was heard by a passerby,who then called for help,and both were sent to Kane general hospital. There they professed Mize too far gone and decided to transplant her organs into bonito,without contacting their relatives, given the urgency of the situation. When bonito woke up his right eye was red and demonic. The red eye had faded away by the time they dismissed him to go home.
    After his dismissal,he noticed he saw things differently with his right eye and his sense of smell had been heightened so he could smell human flesh. When bonito was cutting a loaf of bread,he cut his finger with the knife and the knife broke against his skin. Convinced that something was wrong with him and Society wouldn’t accept him,bonito left his home and never came back.
    Is my character good or bad?

    • #32181

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      I can see your creativity has made some improvements. Although I think it would be much better if you sticked to the dragon ball lore. According to some people on the discord this is very similar to Tokyo goul (I never have seen it so). Also improving on some grammar and putting in as much detail as you can would be a lot more helpful for all of us. I know you can eventually do it if you put enough time and effort into it. I believe you can do much better then this.

    • #32182

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      This is up to staff though. Just my advice.

    • #32183

      Noobly25000
      Participant

      Before making a new application if you have any questions ask me or if a staff member is willing ask them. I’m willing to be here and answer questions about applications and even give you pointers so don’t hold back if you have any questions. But don’t expect me to write the whole thing for you. This doesn’t mean I won’t give you advice though on HOW to write it.

    • #32184

      NegativeBoom
      Participant

      This is a better story than other’s you’ve produced on this forum thus far, I will say that. There are a few grammatical errors, here and there, and it’s not a confusing story either. It seems to be pretty simple, with a few extremely confusing points.

      I understand that they were in urgency, but, typically in a emergency room, they do not transplant organs of someone who had their body ripped open. Especially if the person they’re taking the organs from was just crushed. That would severely damage said organs.

      Another issue is, how your character managed to survive. You claim she didn’t manage to finish him off but, if those steal beams fell on her, wouldn’t they also land on him? Thus, he wouldn’t be alive.

      My final issue, at least major one, is that when he ‘cut his finger’ and the knife broke, why was he suddenly convinced that society wouldn’t accept him. It’s not like anyone saw this. His whole motivation to leave home was that. I would rewrite that if I were you.

    • #32191

      God’s Flame
      Participant

      Andrew something.his avatar has a blue thingy

    • #32194