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  • #23128

    Kondai
    Participant

    So I’ve been thinking about it and I want to try my hand at writing a fanfic since I haven’t done so in a long time. I am a Roleplayer and an ex-fanfic writer and I think I could do this decently.

    If you have a character you want put in then please fill out the form keeping the following in mind:

    1.) I will not take any Mary Sues

    2.) I am limiting races that way the races are spread out, as more people get added in I will allow more of each race, the max number of people for any race I’ll allow is 4 to start with.

    3.) They all start off with the basics only, characters will not start off with any transformations other then the ones that don’t need unlocked through specific methods (Examples of stuff they WONT start with: Super Saiyan 1-Blue, Cooler’s Super Form or Golden Form. Examples of stuff they WILL start with: Great Ape, Reverse forms and base form AKA final form), It will be a while before any new forms are acquired so be patient. They will all start off with a low power level.

    4.) Any canon moves will not be obtainable without training with one of the canon characters

    5.) Don’t expect your character to get any sort of special treatment.

    6.) If I’m not writing your character as he was envisioned by you, CALMLY inform me and I’ll do my best to fix it.

    7.) One character per person for now, I don’t want to be overworked too much.

    8.) No children of canon characters

    Races:

    Human: 0/4
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    Saiyan: 0/4
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    Legendary Super Saiyan: 0/1 (You can only be this if I really like your character, otherwise you’ll be asked to sign up a different character, there will only be one of these unless that character has a child.)
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    Hybrids: 0/4 (These can be a hybrid of any two races within canon and reason, no Majin or Namekian unless that hybrid is a cyborg. Legendary Super Saiyans can only have hybrids if the legendary super saiyan has a child. The hybrid can only be two races at a time)
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    Kaioshin: 0/4 (Good Kai)
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    Makaioshin: 0/4 (Evil Kai)
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    Androids: 0/4 (Fully Robotic)
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    Namekians: 0/4
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    Frieza Clansmen: 0/4 (Frieza’s Race)
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    Tuffles: 0/4
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    (Note: If you have an idea for a race that is canon feel free to suggest it)
    (Second Note: This universe combines GT and BoG/RoF. All transformations exist at the same time.)

    Character App
    —————————-
    Name:

    Age:

    Gender: (Skip if race doesn’t have a gender)

    Race:

    Backstory:

    Personality:

    Appearance:

    Moral Alignment:

    Abilities: (5 Max to start with, within reason, these don’t have to be abilities your race has canonically as they start with those anyway.)

  • #23130

    Anonymous

    Lemme give this a go…:

    Name:
    Mate. (idk).

    Age:
    16.

    Gender:
    Male.

    Race:
    H00man.

    Backstory:
    Mate had always been way weaker than normal. Unfortunatelly mate was the weakest child of king Adolph and queen sarah, which made him have a rather depressed mood with whatever was going on at that moment. Mate lost all hope eventually, cause he never was really a fighter-kind of character, but then a terrible accident happened… Fegler (not a joke), a saiyan male came and blew up the whole kingdom with just 1 attack. Mate at that point was outside the village/kingdom since he went on his uncles farm that was located 5 miles away from the actual kingdom. Noone even had enough time to react, fegler just came by the village, jumped really high up and blasted the castle, causing the whole village to get oblitarated by the raw destructive force of that attack. Fegler’s power level was believed to be around 500, at the time, and thats why he was able to destroy the village. Adolph then kinda completely gave up on life… He saw the whole village getting blown up and he didn’t have a reaction. It was like if his thoughts were incinerated alongside the kingdom. He went to sleep after that. When he woke up, it was like if his character completely changed. He had a fiery will to get stronger, and so he started training like hell. His power level, after 4 months of training was around 18.

    Now you can continue this. I’m not sure if you want extremelly strong characters or if they should start out weak, so i didnt continue the backstory a lot.

    Personality:
    Explained in the backstory. Has many chances to just trigger a personality change switch, but his current personality is pretty plain. Doesn’t get angry at nothing, always is sad/depressed, but his willpower is just off the charts. Nothing’s gonna keep him down ๐Ÿ˜›

    Appearance:
    I thought you were gonna make a fan fic (Book style), not a manga. But i can explain:
    He looks like most regural teenagers.
    He’s obviously fit cause of his training, not buff tho. He has really short hair, and he wears whatever.
    His body is way stronger/looks way buffer than the arms and legs, tho.
    If you need skin colours, its like this:

    Moral Alignment:
    Neutral to good. Really confused atm.

    Abilities:
    Basic ki control (moving stuff [kinda] around with ki, pushing people/things back, power increase by ki etc. etc.)
    Basic ki skill set. He can form any kind of blast and shoot it, but currently it takes a lot out of him.
    Mae Panch (Pronounced “My punch”). Basically a way stronger than normal punch, just like gokus “Papper scissor rock” attack, only that it uses ki.

    Is he Approved or no? I’m fine with some character tweaks like a power up since he needs one, but just tell me.

    • #23133

      Kondai
      Participant

      I am making a fanfic, I ask for appearance to get a generalized idea, it simply helps me write better.

      As for the character it looks good, it’s approved.

      1/4 Human Slots Taken

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
  • #23167

    SSGokufour
    Participant

    I plan to apply. I’ll be copying and pasting from a text doc soon.

  • #23168

    superciano06
    Participant

    Name:Hex
    Age:12
    Gender:Male
    Race:Saiyan
    Backstory: Hex Was A Simple Kid From Planet Vegeta, He Thought His Fellow Saiyans Was Gonna Be His Friends, He Was Wrong, Because Of His Hatred Of Killing He Got Almost Killed Himself And At The Moment He Almost Got Killed, He Wen’t Into A Space Pod And Went To Planet Earth.

    Personality:Nice And Courageous,Can Be Annoying And Picky At Times

    Moral Alignment:Good

    Abilities:Fly
    Ki Control
    High Sky Blast
    Mega Eruption Wave
    Goofy Munchers Disk

    Appearance:Brown Skin
    Gohan Like Hair
    Black Eyes
    Brown Tail
    Black Shirt
    Black Stripe On Waist
    Black Pants

    • #23188

      Kondai
      Participant

      Accepted

      1/4 Saiyan Slots Filled

  • #23175

    Luki
    Participant

    Character App
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    Name:Saori

    Age:14

    Gender:Female (I’m a dude XD)

    Race: Hybrid (Saiyan And Human)

    Backstory:(Well not kinda much here but I’ll try) There was an arc in space , saving most of the species of the universe and protecting them if they always were about to extinct or so (Every kind of them no matter their alignment ) A saiyan and a human had a daughter , named Saori , she was born with a tail . One day , space pirates attacked the arc , because they had TON of lifelong supplies , they were destroying the arc , children were sent into spacepods to save them while she was scaping she saw a Arcosian (kind of the leader of the pirates ) making her hate them because she lost her family and home that day… And she wants to see her family again , and in order too , she will have to train… A Lot! Well after she is sent she lands on the planet the Fanfic will take place (Clearing out , she never made some kind of train , she only knows the basics)

    Personality: Kind , Nice , a pacifist but if there is no other thing to do she will fight! Believes there can be good in anyone , A bit shy , never gives up!

    Appearance: Has Long black hair , Light blue eyes , Kinda short height , Cute ยฐ3ยฐ , Wears a blue t-shirt , grey baggy pants and trunks like yellow boots (and dont forget the tail!)

    Moral Alignment:Good!

    Abilities: Fly , small ki control , Ki sense , Meditation (For ki charge , right?)

    I hope you liked my character! :3
    ~With love Luki XD

    • #23189

      Kondai
      Participant

      Accepted

      1/4 Hybrid Slots Filled

  • #23191

    TravelerSoul
    Participant

    I’m currently thinking of a character for you, but in the mean time, I want you to keep some things in mind (one writer to another). It’s alot of work, but it’s worth it. Take your time to write each character, and try not to make the villains two dimensional. Try to avoid cliches (like using dragon ballsor senzus all the time) and you’ll do fine. Good luck, I can’t wait to see your next chapter

    • #23201

      Kondai
      Participant

      Hey thanks for the tips buddy, I really do appreciate it.

      I’ve been doing role-playing and writing since I was about 9 years old (I’m currently 15, going to turn 16 in a little under a month) While I don’t think my writing skills are GREAT I do think that I can make an interesting story.

      Senzu Beans will not be used or even mentioned until later when they go up to Korin Tower and even then they will only receive them in very specific parts where they would need them.

      Dragon Balls will most likely only come into play to revive someone who died or for a specific plot reason. Even in the situation of a character being revived from death it will most likely be several chapters before that happens to allow them time to train in otherworld.

  • #23192

    Thrasher
    Participant

    Name: Dr. Combat/Neil Combat

    Age: 120

    Gender: male

    Race: Hybrid (Saiyen Cyborg)

    Back Story: As just a boy Neil has had a great interest in technology but on the planet he was razed on there was hardly any technology available so growing up Neil used scraps of whatever he could find and turned them into his own inventions but as his creations were nothing more than simple items to make day to day life more entertaining he grew bored with his creations and one day as he was collecting scrap from a junk yard he felt something pulling on his tale not knowing what it was he jumped in terror and saw that what grabbed him was the remains of an android which to him was far more fascinating to him then anything else hes ever seen so he dragged the remains and what scraps he could find that looked like they were once part of it back home and examined every part thoroughly day and night as at the same time he just happened to be studying anatomy so as he studied the android he noticed that the parts were very similar to that of his own body so he decided to perform an experiment on him self he was going to implant a modified scouter sensor into his eye and to his amazement it worked he was able to read the power level of any creature he wanted so as he was sparring with his brother he surprised him by telling him his power level and how he could see that he was holding back so his brother knocked him out of the air faster then he could blink and as he hit the ground he could hear the snap of his leg break and instead of taking his brothers advise to see a doctor he instead convinced his brother into assisting him with an experiment and reluctantly he helped him fabricate a leg out of the scrap android parts and attach it and as they left there home to go get groceries a gang of arcosian thugs brutally beat them to a pulp but Neil was just barely the only one to live as he woke up he noticed his brother dead next to him so he blasted a hole into the ground and barried his his brother and as he limped home he planned of a way to get back at the thugs who killed the only family he had left so once he got back to his workshop he gathered the remaining parts he had left of the android and replaced his broken arm with one that was much stronger and on his unbroken arm he implanted metal plates under his skin and on his chest he implanted metal plates and replaced his broken foot with a new one so feeling satisfied by his modifications he made he jetted out after the thugs and as he brutally returned the favor to them in plenty there leader stopped him and offered him a job making cybernetic parts for his people and when he asked the leader his name he replied Cold the future ruler of the galaxy so he agreed thinking this guy was just a joker and potential business partner so from there for years he designed cybernetics and improved versions of scouters up until his boss was killed for trying to help his son out then from there he switched to improving his own body in fear of dying someday so eventually he succeeds by making nanites to restore and maintain his body but sadly to him he is only able to regenerate only slitely faster than normal to couter act his ageing and constantly tests and improves his self with every chance he gets while maintaining a stict training schrdule to keep in practise with his ki techniques

    Personality:Analitical,Obsessive,likes testing his improvements in fights

    Appearance:Right arm and leg and left foot metalic left eye glowing red righteye normal looking black ears replaced with cybernetic ears looks like the side of a scouter tail metallic weres black saiyen armor with out shoes feet look like metal shoes has sword atached to right arm and a deployable sheild in his leftarm has long blck hair like Radits but longer

    Moral Alignment: Neutral fights to improve self

    Abilities: flight (implant and ki), ki control, slightly faster regerneration(doesnt age), ki sense(internal scouter and sensitivity training), and instant transmission learned from the cold family

    • #23203

      Kondai
      Participant

      Looks good but one complaint, instant transmission is a move that is used in canon by Goku, I don’t want anyone starting with that. If you want to replace that go ahead.

    • #23219

      Thrasher
      Participant

      Instead of instant transmission has an internal program to tun into a great ape at any time but because of all of his improvements to himself os not yet able to control the form

    • #23224

      Kondai
      Participant

      So, basically a Power Ball?

      Sounds fine to me
      Accepted
      Hybrids: 3/4

  • #23193

    Hirolka
    Participant

    Hey, I always love making a character for these kinds of things!

    Name: Toro

    Age: 23

    Gender: Female

    Race: Saiyan

    Backstory: Like all Saiyans, Toro was born into the Low-Class of warriors and shipped off as a baby to an unknown planet, and conquered it under the light of the full moon.
    However as she grew older and her mind became sharper, her fighting skills didn’t follow suit and following the unification of the Saiyan Army and the Galactic Frieza Army, she was reassigned from her role in the front lines to working at a communication outpost on some backwater planet in the middle of nowhere, and so she operated the machines with both hands and held her coffee with her tail everyday, all for the glory of the grand space tyrant.
    Of course on one infamous day, all the Saiyans received the orders to meet back at Planet Vegeta, and she boarded her Space Pod home.
    But a combination of pilot error, system malfunction, and poor timing led the Space Pod into the path of an asteroid field that collided with her Space Pod, spiraling the hibernating Saiyan off course and towards the unknown.
    As the years passed her Space Pod stayed in order as it drifted through space, but it’s ability to maintain Toro’s condition suffered alongside her, and when it finally broke down on some planet, a Toro weakened by catabolysis and atrophy stepped out…

    Personality: Regardless of her fighting capabilities, she’s a Saiyan through and through, and holds an unquestionable loyalty to King Vegeta and Frieza.
    She’s tough, headstrong, and a natural hoarder who keeps anything she’s interested in within arm’s reach, however anything and anyone she doesn’t see any worth in may as well be invisible.

    Appearance: Thin and malnourished until that’s settled, then her body is just the same default Akira Toriyama always uses for every woman in the series.
    Has black hair like Videl’s, only longer at the bottom.
    Wears the basic Battle Armor that Vegeta wore during the Ginyu and Frieza saga.
    Should probably mention that she didn’t age while in the pod because of space magic or something, I’m sure that out of everything written here, that’s not the biggest concern.

    Moral Alignment: Neutral, follows wherever the food, wine, money, and power flows from.

    Abilities:
    Super Energy Wave Volley (AKA That attack people use that just makes other people cooler)
    Full Power Energy Blast Volley (Same as the above, but this one actually works)
    Energy Wave (It’s like every other Ki Wave… But it’s the off brand version)
    Double Handed Energy Wave (So you do the other Energy Wave, but with two hands!)
    Power Ball (Toro’s trump card that kept her alive on the battlefield for so long.)

    • #23204

      Kondai
      Participant

      Eh I would say no to the Power Ball but I’ll allow it since most Saiyan Warriors know the technique.

      Accepted
      2/4 Saiyan Slots Filled

  • #23195

    Luki
    Participant

    Hey buddy , here is a draw i made a long ago about my character ! Take a look!http://picpaste.com/saori-84BEimvZ.png Thanks for making me in though! ๐Ÿ˜€

    • #23202

      Kondai
      Participant

      That’s some Really Good drawing! That’s almost EXACTLY like a character you would actually see in Dragon Ball.

      And no problem, I’m incredibly unlikely to say no to someone’s character unless it’s incredibly unreasonable, doesn’t fit the guidelines I put out, or the person is causing issues.

  • #23200

    FlamesWrath
    Participant

    Name:Flames

    Age:20

    Gender: (Skip if race doesnโ€™t have a gender)Male

    Race:3/4’s Saiyan (Quarter Human)

    Backstory:He was born on planet Earth to a Half Saiyan Mother and a Full Saiyan father. His Father, decided in order to train him, he left him with a Namekian named Bassoon. He trained under him for 12 years until he was 15. After that he trained his mind. He decided to settle down after 3 years of learning. He still trains on his own in his home.

    Personality:Sort of intelligent. Not extremely smart but knows his stuff. Commited to training. Gets bored easily when he isnt doing anything. Likes to fight people but takes his fights seriously. Doesnt hold much pride.

    Appearance:Hair is flattend down. His eyes are bright red.He often wears casual wear. When fighting he uses Battle Armor

    Moral Alignment:Neutral, Goes with what he thinks is right.

    Abilities: (5 Max to start with, within reason, these donโ€™t have to be abilities your race has canonically as they start with those anyway.):
    -Flying
    -Ki Sense
    -Ki attack: Volcano outburst.Red. Blast attack.
    -Full power energy volley.
    -Ki attack: Magma wave: Wave attack, Red.

    • #23205

      Kondai
      Participant

      Looks Good!

      Accepted
      2/4 Hybrid Slots Filled

  • #23208

    Kondai
    Participant

    Alright, this got quite a few more people than I honestly expected, that’s awesome thank you all for putting so much faith in me.

    This fanfiction will be posted on a certain site and I will link to it when I post a new chapter

    The first chapter will be an introductory chapter into the world as it is not the same exact world as in the show, the following chapters will slowly bring all the characters in before a villain is introduced. (If no one makes a villain then I will create one)

    At the end of some chapters there will be a vote for what happens next from several predetermined choices. (Give ya’ll a little bit of a say in what happens) This could be anything so stay sharp for that.

    You can continue to submit characters for now.

    EDIT: Fanfiction.net doesn’t allow votes for what happens next so I wont use it

    • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
    • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
  • #23216

    Xach
    Participant

    Lol let me be a majin please. I really want to be a Majin! ๐Ÿ˜€
    Name: Xach

    Age:unknown

    Gender: Male

    Race: Majin

    Backstory: There wasn’t just one majin in existence. Bibidi wanted a creature that was ruthless and could destroy the Supreme Kais, what he didn’t want is something that isn’t evil. Xach was the first attempt at getting an unbelievably strong, evil creature capable of killing the Kais. Since it was his first try, he wasn’t happy with his creation and threw it out into the universe to get rid of it since he couldn’t kill it himself. (you can make him go to whatever planet or something. You can make him land on Earth even and have him taught by Majin Buu or whatever.)

    Personality: He just landed (wherever) so he has the mind of a child and the power of goten/trunks in ssj. He learns fast but his method of learning is like a child—he learns things through mimicry. In his first few days of landing (wherever) he already knows the language and most of the words used (in whatever planet). After about a month he develops his own personality which is: loud, funny, smart, destructive, and temperamental. He also prefers to eat sweets and likes females a lot.

    Appearance: He looks exactly like Super Buu (Gohan Absorbed) without Gohan’s clothes and looks like a teenager. He also has a deep purple skin color like my Gengar pic color. His tongue is white and his eyes are purple too.

    Moral Alignment: Good but is rarely neutral or evil

    Abilities: Unlimited self-healing
    Absorption (he doesn’t know how to do it)
    Splitting apart
    Prefers to fire laser like ki blasts from his eyes unless its a strong ki blast or wave.
    Can copy fighting styles and ki techniques after seeing the opponent do it multiple times.

    • #23217

      Kondai
      Participant

      I’ll allow Majins but I want you to go back over this and fix it. It is a major Mary Sue.

      I’ll allow self-healing but I wont allow unable to die nor will I allow this ability to be unlimited, it would tire the Majin out over time from continuous use.

      His power can’t be anywhere near a Super Saiyan yet, all characters start out fresh. This means that his power would be at Saiyan Saga level Goku/Vegeta at most.

      He can not copy other peoples moves just by viewing them once, while this may be something Majin Buu did I wont allow it because it’s simply TOO powerful.

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
    • #23262

      Xach
      Participant

      I never said he couldn’t die, i think that majins are incredibly weak to large ki blasts and can easily be eradicated from them.

      Also sorry if i made it seem op, I thought we were starting at around the cell saga since the legendary super saiyan slot lol. You can make him exhausted by using the regen a certain amount of times because we are starting at saiyan saga. Also I said he has to watch them do the moves a certain amount of times, not once. If goku starts fighting him and uses kamehameha like 5 times he should be able to copy it and use a much weaker version. I am completely fine with him not being able to copy large ki blasts, instant transmission, or techniques like kaioken and all that. I’m also completely fine with him starting off with the strength of a saibamen or nappa at best.

      Also just for clarification, a mary sue is someone who is seemingly perfect or unbeatable by any means. I purposefully made him with limits making him much-much weaker than lots of the characters in dragon ball z. An example was me making him with the mind of a child. Lol a mary sue of my character would be this:

      Abilities: Unlimited self-healing and isnt affected by ki or mind control
      Absorption
      Splitting apart and creating portals anywhere
      Can copy fighting styles and ki techniques after reading the opponents mind and doing it before they get the chance themselves
      Mind control
      Telekinesis
      Anything that comes within 5 meters of him is turned to dust
      Breathes in space
      Breathes in water
      Breathes in lava/magma
      Gains ki every 5 seconds
      Can move faster than the flash
      Omni king is his bitch

      Know what im saying? I didn’t create a mary sue, i created something that was about as strong as as a cell jr. with healing and dumb as a baby.

    • #23264

      Kondai
      Participant

      I was perhaps a bit harsh, I was tired and grumpy so my apologies, but I don’t want that copy ability I don’t like it, it’s a gimmick that is far too often used. Perhaps he’d be a quick learner instead and learn abilities faster then usual. I could accept that.

      However in the case of absorption I WILL allow him to learn the opponents techniques that way

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
    • #23344

      Xach
      Participant

      Lol in all honesty I don’t want him to absorb things that much, maybe like absorb one or two things in the entire series. I just really, really like the majin kamehameha so I honestly just wanted him to do cool moves like final flash but pink/purple, you know?

      Also I didn’t mind you being somewhat harsh, because the creator has to be the one who makes sure everything is orderly. I also didn’t want to cause an argument or anything so yeah. The only thing i was kinda triggered by is my character being called a mary sue because they actually ruin the story and are just annoying to read and be suggested. So no harsh feelings, I hope we’re cool, and I hope you do my character justice! ๐Ÿ˜€

    • #23346

      Kondai
      Participant

      Yeah hope you enjoy it and if not let me know what you think should be done.

      Accepted
      1/4 Majin Slots

  • #23221

    Luki
    Participant

    Hey , i got a question , Kondai , you dont have a character in this?

    • #23225

      Kondai
      Participant

      The simple answer: No I don’t have a character in this.
      Will I have a character in this: I have thought about it, I’ll put up an app to show you all what he’s like if I do.

      There’s a good chance I will since there will be quite a few instances of people voting for what happens next

  • #23222

    Thrasher
    Participant

    so Kondai does that work or not

  • #23240

    Anonymous

    Also, some other major stuff about my character that i forgot to mention:
    Doesn’t care about anything. His life, his happiness, nothing. He’s basically like a robot at this point. He doesn’t express emotions properly. He’s… akward.

  • #23261

    superciano06
    Participant

    let me change the cloths for it i made a error
    white t-shirt (at start)
    black pants (at start) (like krillens gi)
    red and black shoes (at start) (like gokus)

    black shirt (like krillens gi (is in the middle) )
    white stripe on waist (middle)
    black pants (like krillens gi) (middle)

    he will wear multiple cloths after middle

  • #23263

    Kondai
    Participant

    Here is the link to the prologue, it is rather short in my opinion BUT it didn’t really need to be too terribly long. Prologue

    I do have a question for you all though: Would you rather me post short chapters and have them come out faster or long chapters at the cost of them possibly taking a bit longer (You’d still get the same amount of content in the long run just a lot more chapters with the shorter chapters option.)

    Let me know of any problems with the prologue and I’ll quickly fix it with a new revised version.

    Summary: The prologue introduces the backstory of how the world came into existence with a few well known characters: Trunks, Supreme Kai of Time, The Time Patrol, and Zeno-sama being mentioned. It explains how two timelines (Super and GT) merged to create the new world.

  • #23266

    Luki
    Participant

    Hey buddy , it doesnt let me see it , it says “Story not found” or something like that (english isnt my main XD)

  • #23267

    Luki
    Participant

    And i would suggest making short ones , it is faster and is better , it creates more suspense , then you could add a full chapter

  • #23270

    Xymgar
    Participant

    Story not found :/

  • #23271

    Luki
    Participant

    And , if you let me , i can draw the thumbnails of them! (You saw my drawing skils , so you know im not bad at it XD) But if only if you want

    • #23275

      Kondai
      Participant

      Thumbnails? What do you mean by that?

    • #23281

      Luki
      Participant

      By that i meant to make/Draw the covers , id give it a “Plus” to the fanfic! :3 . If you dont want to thats also ok ๐Ÿ˜€

    • #23283

      Kondai
      Participant

      Oh sure! What do you have in mind though?

    • #23292

      Luki
      Participant

      Well , if the prologue is a part of the chapter i could make some Zeno-sama , a time machine and a trunks for the prologue , for an actual chapter , i need to see it first XD

    • #23296

      Kondai
      Participant

      The Prologue is just that: the prologue, i did put “Chapter 1” But i’m probably gonna change that

  • #23273

    Kondai
    Participant

    Fixed Link So sorry about that XD, that was a serious fail on my part I accidentally published it as Private, let me know of any other problems

  • #23276

    Android 21
    Participant

    Name: Syn

    Age: 80

    Gender: Male

    Race: Android

    Backstory: Created in an underground laboratory by Dr. Ponsel. Modified, broken, repaired and tested on for 12 long years with the only life form representative being the clumsy old doctor, Syn grew to hate Humanity. Once Dr. Ponsel had a heart attack while manual working on his creation, Syn grabbed the tools the doctor was using and crafted makeshift legs so that he could continue where the doctor left off. For the next 8 years, Syn went out at night to gather material for his body, and improved his body and A.I. during the day until he could fake being a human being. For the past 60 years Syn has been plotting the human downfall while still improving his body.

    Personality: Syn has no set personality, and would alter how he acts depending on the situation.

    Appearance: Syn has no perminant appearance, but prefers to cover up as much as possible as to make changing physical features easier.

    Moral Alignment: ‘Logical’ (Will do any actions that bring him closer to his goals e.x. swiftly killing an enemy; and will stray from action that further him from his goals e.x. swiftly killing an orphan; Sacrificing himself to save a city.)

    Abilities:
    Combat Prediction- Syn’s AI program allows him to track a target and pridict their next action, either in or out of combat.
    ‘Shape Shifting’
    Regeneration of minor damage

    • #23277

      Kondai
      Participant

      Combat Prediction: Not really something I want people able to do

      The rest is fine.

    • #23278

      Android 21
      Participant

      Fair enough.

    • #23286

      Kondai
      Participant

      Accepted (without the combat prediction obviously)

      1/4 Androids

  • #23282

    Harambe
    Participant

    can I join?
    Character App
    โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”-
    Name: Light

    Age: 12 ( mentally )(physically) 165 ( actual age )

    Gender: (Skip if race doesnโ€™t have a gender) EEEEEEEEE

    Race: Majin

    Backstory:
    Born from an egg he roamed the universe barely training. Not knowing where he came from he stumbled across a planet called Earth. It’s beauty was enticing and he decided to stay there. He’ll protect the Earth’s beauty at all costs.

    Personality:
    Strict
    Tries to be funny
    Thinks he’s all knowing but he really isn’t.

    Appearance:
    4’6
    White Pants similar to majin buu’s. Doesn’t have M symbol. Has two arm bracelets on his forearm.

    Moral Alignment:
    Does what’s right for the Earth in his opinion.
    Becomes purely good over time from learning about the Earth and it’s people.

    Abilities: (5 Max to start with, within reason, these donโ€™t have to be abilities your race has canonically as they start with those anyway.)
    Regeneration ( Not to strong lesser than Buu’s )
    Flight
    Not needing to breath.
    Magic. ( Turn things into other things temporarily )
    Basic Energy control.

    Simple character for the sake of being simple.

    • #23284

      Kondai
      Participant

      Majins aren’t born from eggs? -confused-

    • #23442

      Kondai
      Participant

      Accepted

      2/4 Majin Slots filled (Completely forgot about accepting you sorry about that XD)

  • #23290

    Harambe
    Participant

    Well. They can’t remember anything that happend before he was trapped in an egg. oeo

  • #23291

    Harambe
    Participant

    Hey instead of not needing to breath can we put Absorption?

    • #23332

      Kondai
      Participant

      I mean, yeah I guess

  • #23295

    Kondai
    Participant

    I decided to put my own character into the mix

    Character App
    โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”-
    Name: Kondai

    Age: 25

    Gender: Male

    Race: Saiyan

    Backstory: Kondai was born into a middle class Saiyan family due to his Father and Mother’s successes in the Saiyan Army, he was treated with a lot of disrespect from most Saiyans however and absolutely hated King Vegeta, thinking he was a complete traitor to the Saiyan people due to him bowing underneath Frieza rather then standing up and doing something to stop it. As a result Kondai started civil war on Planet Vegeta in order to take him off of the throne. Kondai recently went to Earth to prepare with its fighters to fend off the Saiyans who planned to go there to conquer it. (Hint at a future plot lol)

    Personality: Kondai can be a tiny bit harsh but he means well usually, he tries to protect as many innocent as possible while trying to rid of anyone looking to do harm to the innocent. He is especially concerned of his own people under the rule of someone he considers to have commit an extreme act of treason. On the inside he is a kind and caring guy, but on the outside he can seem a bit cold.

    Appearance: Kondai has messy spiky black hair, black eyes, a well toned muscular body, below average height and typically wears red and black Saiyan Armor over a black jumpsuit with black gloves, red and black boots, and a recent model red visor scouter.

    Moral Alignment: Good

    Abilities: Can read power levels with visor scouter (the scouter can read high levels of power but explodes if it goes too high)

    Power Ball: Can throw a power ball in order to become a Great Ape

    Great Ape Mastery: Can control thoughts and reasons as a Great Ape

    Flight: Can fly at high speeds to get to his destination

    Pure of Heart: Kondai has no evil in him

  • #23298

    Luki
    Participant

    Accepted! XD 3/4 saiyans slots filled! (What am i doing? XD This is your job!)

    • #23299

      Kondai
      Participant

      XD, that is my job dammit! Lol

  • #23301

    chiles07
    Participant

    Name: Horenso
    Alignment: Nuetral
    Age: 19
    Gender:Male
    Race: Full Saiyan

    Backstory: When a saiyan was infused with the power with other Saiyan, a Super Saiyan god was form, the people at this time had knowledge of this but it never practiced because the host always died, But a group of teenage saiyans decided to toy with the power of the super Saiyan god and they transferred all their energy into Horenso, All the Saiyan died leaving Horenso with their powers,skills, mental capabilities and personalities.Horenso spends most of his days alone(exiled from planet vegeta, and accused of killing the teenage saiyans) traveling from planet to keep himself from having to deal with his issues(Horenso does not realize he has 7 personalities).Horenso has 7 personalities (am too lazy to make them, fill them in please) and switches through them, with the right stimuli (fun, anger, etc), and when he transforms into a super saiyan god all the power of the saiyans are linked, kinda of making like a fusion so it neither Horenso or the 7 Saiyan.Horenso is as strong as raditz in his base and he does not realize that he has the power of a super saiyan god. (sorry for grammar errors, it late)

    • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  chiles07.
    • #23303

      Kondai
      Participant

      No, no Super Saiyan, Super Saiyan 2, Super Saiyan 3, Super Saiyan 4, Super Saiyan God, or Super Saiyan Blue yet, not knowing about being capable of it or not.

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
    • #23451

      Kondai
      Participant

      Considering I haven’t heard anything more from you on this in a few days, and you haven’t fixed it or worked it out with me: Denied, please sign up with another character if you wish to try again.

  • #23306

    Luki
    Participant

    I got one final question , how frequent will we see a new part of the Fanfic?

    • #23307

      Kondai
      Participant

      Ill try to put up a new part every few days

  • #23316

    chiles07
    Participant

    Instead of Super Saiyan God, just make it a power boost.

    • #23331

      Kondai
      Participant

      The power boost would be less then a great ape (great ape is a ten times boost) is that ok?

  • #23317

    Anonymous

    First page seems good.
    I’d say it would be better to make bigger chapters but also delay them more than normal.

  • #23320

    chiles07
    Participant

    Where do you see the First page?

    • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  chiles07.
  • #23333

    Kondai
    Participant

    Alright, since the vote was a tie I’ve decided to do it this way:

    I’ll release each chapter in parts roughly the same size as the prologue, each chapter will have roughly 3-5 parts to it

    I wont really promise any specific dates for when each part is released at this point in time because I can get rather caught up in other stuff (Real Life, Roleplaying, etc.) but I will try to release multiple parts every week.

  • #23350

    Kondai
    Participant

    Chapter 1 Part 1

    This Part introduces several characters with fighters Flames, Saori, Xach, Kondai, and Toro making appearances.

    Summary: Kondai has finally arrived on Earth with Earth’s Fighting Force gathering and meeting for the very first time, however Kondai is nowhere to be seen. Kondai ends up going after a Saiyan Space Pod and encountering the Saiyan woman Toro, with a hostile reaction from her. Kondai ends up having to knock her out to get her help.
    (Don’t worry, she will recover by the time the Saiyans arrive)

    Next time: Chapter 1: A New Generation of Fighters! Fighter Role Call! (Part 2: A spar between Earth’s Fighters!)

    (There’s nothing really important happening this chapter, it’s more or less just beginning to somewhat introduce the characters)
    (I realize that they don’t interact much but I wanted to introduce them first THEN give them interaction in the next part, which by the title will be a friendly spar between: Mate, Saori, Flames, and Xach.)

    Planned parts ahead: Chapter 1: A New Generation of Fighters! Fighter Role Call! (Part 2: A spar between Earth’s Fighters!)
    Chapter 1: A New Generation of Fighters! Fighter Role Call! (Part 3: The second space pod, a new fighter and Kondai arrive to the meeting!)
    Chapter 2: The Training Begins! Overcome your limits! (Part 1: Day 1)
    Chapter 2: The Training Begins! Overcome your limits! (Part 2: Day 2)
    Chapter 2: The Training Begins! Overcome your limits! (Part 3: Day 3)
    Chapter 2: The Training Begins! Overcome your limits! (Part 4: Day 4)
    Chapter 2: The Training Begins! Overcome your limits! (Part 5: Day 5)

    • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
    • #23367

      superciano06
      Participant

      when will my charactor come in?

    • #23394

      Kondai
      Participant

      I’ll have him show up at the start of chapter 2

  • #23352

    Harambe
    Participant

    Is light going to be introduced? He wasn’t mentioned in the first chapter.

    • #23358

      Kondai
      Participant

      Light has not been accepted yet, Once you fix him and I accept him I will add him to chapter 2

  • #23353

    Thrasher
    Participant

    Kondai is it possible if its not too late

    to introduce my charector as the other one who landed and offers help to the one who crash landed saying he was following her threw space saying that the arcosians tried to kill him so he escaped in a pod and while in space notesed the pod and started following it and also offers to help protect the planet by offering to fight along with technology (robotic training dummies, advanced scouters, armor, healing chambers, and training rooms with ajustable gravity control) in exchange for a place to setup shop for his expirements and materials to do so

    • #23356

      Kondai
      Participant

      Hmm, alright then sounds good to me. There is a small problem though, Kondai is the leader of a rebellion against King Vegeta where as Toro is fiercely loyal to King Vegeta. Kondai DID help Toro but only because he is honorable and doesn’t like harming someone when they can’t really defend themselves. In other words the two will probably clash with each other a lot and fight a lot. Toro during the chapter where the fight between the protectors of Earth + Kondai and the Saiyan Army happens is most likely going to side with the Saiyan Army (most likely will not die, probably gonna have her live.)

      Also no gravity, not yet anyway. I dont mind weighted clothing though.

    • #23362

      Thrasher
      Participant

      i was thinking he noticed and followerd her seeing how her condition was not wanting to take sides until he meets everyone on earth then he after being attacked by Kondai knowing who he was offers to help the fighters

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Thrasher.
  • #23357

    Luki
    Participant

    Buddy!!! That’s so awesome! I loved how you introduced them! I am a roleplayer as you , maybe i can help with Saori Quotes IF you want to, great part of the chapter!

    • #23359

      Kondai
      Participant

      Thank you means a lot! And sure thing I’d love to see some quotes, it’d probably help me get a better grip on her personality

    • #23360

      Luki
      Participant

      Well , It can variate on what she says , i need a context XD , i can’t make quotes from scratch , i can help by making her dialogue too . By the way i’d love to have more of a graphic design of your character , you know a simple draw (doesn’t have to be a PERFECT draw , just show the aspects of your characters) For the cover

    • #23385

      Kondai
      Participant

      Oh, no thanks I think I can get the writing done on my own but thanks for the offer.

      As for the cover, sure thing!

  • #23393

    Anonymous

    The new page seems good, again.
    ^ This will probably be what i’m gonna say for most of them xD I mean, i’ll give some my opinion. But nothing really happened on the 2 first ones so i just said “They’re g00d”. I’m looking foward to the new ones.

  • #23396

    Luki
    Participant

    Guys , i need a draw or something that shows me how are your characters! a simple face draw should do it! I can get the clothes cover (Answer this one with a pic of your character)

  • #23398

    Harambe
    Participant
    • #23399

      Luki
      Participant

      Thanks! Ill get working on the cover! Is like kid bu Right?

  • #23402

    Luki
    Participant

    I’m still waiting the pics guys

    • #23408

      Kondai
      Participant

      I cant really draw so could it be similar to EX-Gogeta’s hair from Dragon Ball Fusions?:

      (Just the hair, not the face or anything like that, the rest would be like I described him)

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
      • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
    • #23422

      Luki
      Participant

      armor like saiyan saga vegeta or frieza saga?

    • #23426

      Kondai
      Participant

      Frieza Saga

  • #23403

    Anonymous

    Well ima finish drawing my characters pic in like… 2 days or something. So you’ll have to wait, a little ๐Ÿ˜›

    • #23404

      Luki
      Participant

      Well , it doesnt have to be a perfect draw XD , just give me the hairstyle

    • #23405

      superciano06
      Participant

      im very bad at drawing so just give him teen gohan like hair or to be spefic the G2 Hair Style / Update hair from the page 2 hair salon

    • #23406

      Luki
      Participant

      Okie dokie!

  • #23434

    Luki
    Participant

    I have a doubt about the chapter , did them alredy know eachother , like (for example ) Flames knew who Saori , Toro , or Kondai Was?

    • #23444

      Kondai
      Participant

      Nope, never met each other before. They’re only meeting up for the first time after Kondai contacted Earth informing them to gather a group of willing fighters so that he could prepare them to fight against the Saiyan Army

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Kondai.
  • #23435

    Luki
    Participant

    The cover is going great guys!!! I got Saori and Kondai done

    BTW , those are Saori and Kondai

    • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Luki.
    • #23443

      Kondai
      Participant

      That’s looking absolutely amazing

  • #23437

    Harambe
    Participant
  • #23438

    Harambe
    Participant

    ^ Light if he absorbed Kondai

  • #23439

    Luki
    Participant

    That is a great concept!!! I love it !

  • #23440

    Harambe
    Participant

    thank <3

  • #23441

    superciano06
    Participant

    great start to the cover

  • #23449

    Luki
    Participant

    What i have done thus far , these are : Saori , Toro ,Kondai and Light (Those are the one who had a more detailed description , everyone who is mentioned on the first chapter will be here , dont worry )

    • This reply was modified 2 years, 3 months ago by  Luki.
  • #23452

    Kondai
    Participant

    Chapter 1 Part 2

    I finally got out Part 2 for you guys, here it is in all its glory. Its really late for me but I felt like I should get out a part for you guys today anyway.

    Summary: A spar breaks out between the 4 warriors with newcomer Hex joining in the fun (Yeah I put him in a bit early, sue me :P)

    • #23459

      Luki
      Participant

      The new part seems amazing! I loved the way you made Saori . you really nailed her personality

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by  Luki.
  • #23458

    Yellow-The-Neon
    Participant

    Wait Can I Still Join

    • #23472

      Kondai
      Participant

      Yeah but once chapter 2 starts I’ll be shutting down character entries, they will be reopened at a later date afterwards but not for a while

  • #23461

    Luki
    Participant
    • #23467

      Kondai
      Participant

      This looks absolutely amazing, you’re an incredible artist

    • #23468

      Luki
      Participant

      Just wait until this is done , it will look beautiful

  • #23471

    Harambe
    Participant

    I wanted to say something about Light’s fighting style. He uses his majin abilities to stretch and bend himself into many shapes. So he liquifies himself and makes some of his parts solid at certain times.

  • #23475

    Android 21
    Participant

    At what point will Syn be introduced?
    I’m just wondering…

    • #23476

      Kondai
      Participant

      He’ll most likely appear after the fight against the Saiyan army is over.

      Syn is a weird one but a character I have many many ideas for, he doesn’t work at this point in the plot BUT he WOULD work in a plot down the road that I had in mind. (not too far down the road, like DIRECTLY after the Saiyan Army)

  • #23478

    Harambe
    Participant

    What about Light? He hasn’t been mentioned yet in the manga.

    • #23479

      Kondai
      Participant

      I already told you he’ll be in chapter 2

  • #23480

    Luki
    Participant

    Waaaaaaait! Does that mean i madc light in vain! XD ill change it a bit and maki it xach xD

    • #23481

      Kondai
      Participant

      Oh that was supposed to be light? I had no clue I am so sorry lol. But I’d suggest putting light too because he will be a main part of the story. I’d probably suggest putting everyone if you can.

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by  Kondai.
    • #23483

      Luki
      Participant

      Well , for the chapter one i wanted to present the characters who WOULD be in the chapter
      I can add all the people , it will require more time though

    • #23487

      Kondai
      Participant

      OH I see, ok then, you had me confused for a moment lol

      If it helps for you I’ll put him in in part 3 to make it slightly easier on you

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by  Kondai.
    • #23492

      Xach
      Participant

      You’ll have to do quite a bit of changing if you want to make me look how i made myself. My character looks very different from light lol.

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by  Xach. Reason: dab on em
  • #23489

    Xach
    Participant

    You wanna picture of my character?!?

    Oh I’ll give you a picture of my character! >:D

  • #23491

    Xach
    Participant

    Original: http://comicvine.gamespot.com/images/1300-3425937

    Mine: http://unstoppablexach.deviantart.com/art/Majin-Xach-634188133?ga_submit_new=10%253A1473734623

    Put em side by side if you can and try to spot what I just colored and what i made by myself. Also 2 things to note is that is Xach in an adult form and also I don’t want my character to talk like majin buu, but don’t want em to sound like a regular character.

    • #23515

      Luki
      Participant

      Wow ! Thanks you made me save a bunch of time!!! i nailed something like that , but if you want your chracter to look like that ill do it! ๐Ÿ˜€

    • #23516

      Xach
      Participant

      Yeah. You could probably just use my picture and make the muscular/tall features a bit smaller to make him look like a teenager.

    • #23517

      Luki
      Participant

      I tried my best , but i coudlnt do much , but he looks smaller

    • #23527

      Xach
      Participant

      I can probably make a teen version if you want. Then you could just do that.

      Also I don’t want Xach being lights but recolored. I want Xach to look & act different than him.
      I wouldn’t like looking like another character.

      TRIGGERED

  • #23518

    Harambe
    Participant

    oh darn lights been turned into zach ;-; like if u cri ever tim

    • #23519

      Kondai
      Participant

      Eh dont fret too much, at least he’s in the fanfic

  • #23550

    Luki
    Participant

    You guys have missunderstood , ill have both of them on the cover , dont worry . Id LOVE a teen version of Xach , This is getting really problematic XD , i have done almost all the characters that had a kinda good appearence description (still waiting for mate design and Flame gave me almost nothing also Syn , i still need a design , until then , there’s no cover for anyone )

    • #23559

      superciano06
      Participant

      D:

    • #23562

      Android 21
      Participant

      Syn wouldn’t be on the cover due to his nature. He was meant to hide in a group of people and strike when it was easiest, that being the whole point of his ‘shape shifting.’ This effect of an invisible enemy was what made the introduction of the Androids and Cell that much more frighting. Maybe silhouette someone in the background if you wanted a complete cast.

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by  Android 21.
    • #23639

      Luki
      Participant

      silhoutte will be then ๐Ÿ˜€

  • #23579

    Anonymous

    So, i was off the forums for a while so i couldn’t reply. The second part is also good.

    I’m almost done with my character… (I still haven’t even started drawing >_>)

  • #23616

    Harambe
    Participant

    BOOOP

  • #23624

    Anonymous

    FINAL BREEEP

  • #23638

    Luki
    Participant

    Hey guys , i am sorry if i have been abscent , just , i forgot to pay internet bill XD but now im fully back

  • #23726

    SSGokufour
    Participant

    Ok, if you are still taking characters, I have one:
    Race: Arcosian

    Character Name: Cabbeji (Pronounced Cah-beige-i)

    Age: 15

    Gender: Male

    Appearance: Like a normal Arcosian with turquoise plates as if filled with god ki. He has pink muscle tissue, white bio-armor, and red eyes. He wears a cloak when not fighting. Looks very menacing, even though he doesn’t say a word to most. He is the type that, when he enters a room, everyone comes to a silence due to how fearsome and mysterious he appears. He does have a heart for Saiyans, though. While when initially fighting he is as he usually is, quiet but intimidating, he loosens up and starts to look thrilled when fighting for a long duration due to Saiyan DNA (will explain in backstory). He is lean and slender in regard to his muscles, and is about the height of Frost from DBS, while resembling Frieza in appearance.

    Personality: Very serious and intimidating. When fighting, he is very calm and doesn’t go full effort, But this all changes when he transforms. If he transforms, he goes berserk and loses control similar to a great ape (will explain in backstory) . Similar to a Saiyan, his pride forbids him from receiving any help to further his training and strength.

    Backstory: When the Arcosian empire was being overcome by disease that attacked their DNA, an Arcosian emperor sent his newborn child into space in a dying wish to revive his race. While out in space, researchers discovered his pod. Seeing that he was dying of the same disease encompassing the now-dead Arcosian race, they replaced his damaged DNA with Saiyan DNA in hopes to jump-start his immune system to fight to stay alive. The infusion succeeded and bestowed him with great powers and a will to fight. They named this child Cabbeji (based on the vegetable cabbage that grows well in the cold. I know, punny, huh?)

    The researchers decided to ship him off to a saiyan-inhabited planet thinking that they would unlock his potential and serve as guardians to the parent-less being, since he would probably bond more with those that share DNA. The Saiyans taught him lessons like survival, fighting, ki manipulation, and a basic education. When they sensed his rise in power at age 10, they decided to teach him how to transform, sensing a massive Super Saiyan ki waiting to be awakened. When he transformed into his second form, his saiyan DNA made him different than what he was. Like the great oozaru of the saiyans, he went berserk in his horned form. His mindless hunger for fighting led him to commit genocide on the saiyans he once called friends. After he came to his senses and dropped down back to base, he collapsed in a heaping mess. That is when his former friend, Toromato, who was of the same age, attacked him in rage, saying โ€œHOW DARE YOU KILL MY FAMILY, YOU MONSTER!โ€. His berserk instincts acting for him, Cabbeji pierced Toromato (based on tomato) straight through with a thin, fast beam of crimson red. This has left him morally scarred for most likely his whole life.

    From then until age 15, he has scavenged the universe for information on a way to revive the planet he hails from. While he isn’t sure whether they will resent him for the act, he will never be able to be truly happy unless they are living again. Over many fights searching for a way to revive his planet, he has developed a purely defensive style where he doesn’t use up much energy and minimizes damage. He will end a fight quickly if it gets out of hand if he is in his tame first form, but that doesn’t apply to his others.
    Abilities:
    Barrage of Sorrow: He converts all of the sorrow, anger, and sadness into an explosion of ice crystals, harming everyone around him but leaving him in a fractured state. This state of combined emotions will leave him immobile and crying, having sorrow over his lost friends. This will leave him defenseless to others for quite a few hours, and thus it’s a last resort.

    He also prefers beam ki attacks, like how Frieza’s death beam works.

    Other than that, he rarely uses ki attacks as he is mostly a melee warrior.

    Notes on transformations:

    He is normally in 50% base. He will go to 100% when pushed a little. This will cause him to stop pulling his punches and to attack full force, while still being in control.
    When really pushed, he’ll go to 2nd form (The horned form)
    He will do very violent moves, such as bludgeoning people with his horns, and will come close to killing.
    When he is pushed to his limits, he’ll go to 3rd form.
    Like 2nd, except he will give people misery for still being alive and not dead, including damaging vital organs beyond repair and severing limbs.
    When he is near death, he will enter final.
    He will not hesitate to kill his opponent, but plays with his opponent before killing and truly has fun fighting, though in a very cruel way.

    If he transforms, he is more likely to transform in fights soon afterwards because they temporarily โ€œloosen him upโ€.

    Hope you enjoyed ๐Ÿ™‚
    -SSGoku

    • #23747

      Kondai
      Participant

      Backstory: Needs fixed as the Saiyan Race didn’t die in this story.

      Race: Also needs fixed, you said he has Saiyan DNA and he’s partially a Frieza Clansman (I hate the term Arcosian, just something the English Dub filler came up with that people assumed was Frieza’s race.) This would not make him a member of Frieza’s race but a Hybrid, there is still one Hybrid slot open.

    • #24421

      SSGokufour
      Participant

      The way I think about it, this is some distant planet of Saiyans that he killed , not the main ones on Planet Vegeta. Also, if you want to put him as hybrid that’s fine, but the dna only really affects his demeanor and quick fighting off of diseases, not anything else. Actually, hybrid is okay. Also, I just use arcosian because it has more of a ring to it than Frieza Race. I know it’s wrong XD.

  • #23744

    Harambe
    Participant

    Genocide of the saiyan race isn’t really possible. In this canon the saiyans are going to invade Earth and the people are trying to protect it. So maybe you might have to change the backstory a little bit.

  • #23748

    Kondai
    Participant

    Apologies for not releasing a new part for a while, I’ve been a little busy as I’m juggling building my own Roleplay Site, spending time with friends and family, and everything in between. I plan to get started on the final part of chapter 1 real soon

  • #23749

    Thrasher
    Participant

    Kondai can I add that my charecter has a special move called maximum discharge that uses all of his energy and shuts down all of his systems for 10 seconds leaving him completely week

  • #23750

    Thrasher
    Participant

    Luki do you have a concept of mine yet or are you gonna wait awhile

    • #23765

      Luki
      Participant

      Hey! Im good with what i have of the concept , but if you want to add something like an image or a even closer appearence it will be recieved gladly!

  • #23756

    Thecheekysaiyan
    Participant

    Hey I wanted to know is there a saiyan slot still open

  • #23760

    Thecheekysaiyan
    Participant

    I hope this is good because I really think this story could be good.

    Character App
    โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”โ€”-
    Name: Juza

    Age: 18

    Gender: male

    backstory: A saiyan born and raised on planet vegeta he was sent to a alien planet along with three others but the alien race was to much for them soon they got captured and were stuck there for 11 years but soon they were taken to get executed but they were strong enough to fight then aliens back soon everyone was dead except Juza soon he took one of the space ships and traveled to the nearest planet earth it has taken him a year to get there so far

    Personality: crazy and a little bit of a jerk

    Appearance: Hereโ€™s a link to what he looks like Character http://imgur.com/a/lRn44

    Moral Alignment: neutral and sometimes evil

    Abilities:

    Power Ball

    Ki control

    Dokkan blast assault (he shoots a lot of ki blast that are really weak but push back the target)

    Siens major blast(A green ki wave that does a good amount of damage but takes a lot out of him and makes him have to rest)

    Full barrage (Very fast and pretty strong strong punches takes a good amount of ki)

    • #23808

      Kondai
      Participant

      Accepted

      4/4 Saiyan Slots Filled

      (No more Full-Blooded Saiyans till I open back up for more characters)

  • #23818

    Anonymous

    Alrite. I totally forgot about the character drawing thin’ >_>

    • #23830

      Luki
      Participant

      Oh my god buddy! XD Im only waiting for you ! Just the cover is almost ready! I dont want to ruin your character using my vision , thats why i am asking for the draw XD ( Well im still waiting for xach’s drawing , but if he doesnt send me that soon , im probably using the one he gave me first)

      • This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by  Luki.
  • #23864

    Thecheekysaiyan
    Participant

    What page or chapter did you want to introduce all the characters?

  • #23870

    Anonymous

    Ho-kay, just to do you and me a favor ima find an ani-dudes pic that looks like him in the web.

    (couldn’t find anything better don’t judge me xD)

    • #23880

      Luki
      Participant

      What i most needed was his hair XD , but i can deal with it

  • #23881

    Luki
    Participant

    Hey guys , i wanted you to give you a little look of the cover and how it’s going. I still need to make Syn , Mate , Flames…? (since he posted his character he hasn’t post anything yet) , Neil Combat , Juza , Cabbeji (Those last 2 im not sure if they will be on chapter 1 so, Still considering it)

  • #24052

    Harambe
    Participant

    This is so dead…
    Hasn’t been updated in 10 days.

    • #24058

      superciano06
      Participant

      fianlly someone whos making a message been waiting for next part

  • #24132

    Thecheekysaiyan
    Participant

    So is there going to be a new part or is this just dead.

  • #24142

    Kondai
    Participant

    I’m sorry about not putting up a new part a lot of stuff has been going on recently, I’m going to UNFORTUNATELY need to post pone it, but I promise it’ll eventually be brought right back.

    If you actually care enough to know I’ve been in and out lately due to real life events making me tear my hair out (Dropping out of school due to lack of money to continue, my older brother talking about moving really far away to the point I’d only ever see him through skype, and worrying for my little brother’s sake due to my father divorcing his mother.) and just generally trying to not go completely insane due to all of this going on at once.

    Thanks for reading I guess if anyone still cares and I’m sorry about it I know I got a lot of peoples hopes up.

    • This reply was modified 2 years, 2 months ago by  Kondai.
  • #24144

    Luki
    Participant

    Hey , we are here and we support you anytime , we will wait !

  • #24152

    superciano06
    Participant

    Luki is right ๐Ÿ˜€

  • #24177

    Anonymous

    Dam kondai, that’s-i’d say-rough. Not everyone goes through that many things at once >_>
    But we’re here to support you, as luki said.

  • #24179

    Xymgar
    Participant

    ^
    Kondai I wish you the best of luck!

  • #24422

    SSGokufour
    Participant

    I wish you the best of luck and hope you can continue writing in the near future.

    -Four

  • #24716

    Kondai
    Participant

    Alright I’m back, thanks for the support guys it really did help even if it sounds cheesy. While I was gone I gathered my senses, came up with a few ideas, and now here I am. I made a new post for this in General Talk from now on that is where all new chapters of Dragon Ball Another World will be found.

    The New Post

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